issue10 政府只要管大城市 望指正

~白鸽~UID: 148401

10"Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive, because it is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated."

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  In an advanced and civilized nation, government should allcote resources reasonably between cities and country. They should call for a balance in the financial support. After all, unilateral development is adverse to a nation in a long run.

  Above of all, agriculture based on country appears fundamental aspect in a nation'economy to sustain people's basic lives. Anyway, any person can not survive without eating and drinking. And parently,if we do not satisfy those desires, we can hardly consider other further desires and advancement of society. The broad country is the only spot for agriculture since it provides enomorous arable lands. And agriculture production is fraught with uncertainty because it is contingent on many complex natural conditions. Such natural conditions are very complicated and unpredictable,so that agriculture production turn out to be not controllable. The key of this problem will be to raise technology level.Only if we
use advanced technology to assemble agriculture,  can we promote the  ability to analyse and predict natural conditions so as to reduce the adventure of agriculture production and make it more controllable. For example, China is a large agriculture nation. She was ever very poor in agriculture technology level. With the reform and opening in China, Goverment pay much attention to improving agriculture technology. The country has received large numbers of financial support. Therefore, agriculture in China has made quite great progress, as strongly support the development of the whole national economy.  


Moreover, country almost offers all the natural resources to within a nation. Not only land but also lake, mountain, forest,etc. are all the precious treasure for a nation.For they basically make up of the material foundation of society. How to explore and utilize them is an crucial question to any goverment since abusing natural resources just for industry development has given rise to many environment problems, which is eventually bound to impede the development of the whole economy and society. Cases about this problem have been common occurance. It is high time for man kind to take measures against environment problems and learn to protect and reasonably explore resources.

Finally, we can not ingore a great number of cultural traditions that lie in the country. Modern city civilization is encroaching on many antique traditions specially in cities. Even we can find some clues of cultural traditions only preserved in the country. For instance, We have not seen lots of folk skills in most China cities for a long time,which is always rooted in the village. Therefore, the claim that it is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated is not convincing.


For the reason given above, I insist that governments should seek a balance in financial supprot to different sections of nations. Admittedly, cities are of great importance in society life. Meanwhile, we should not overrate the role of the country. To pursue a kind of concerted and lasting development will be the best way to achieve steady prosperity.

beckhamwiseUID: 142845

10"Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive, because it is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated."

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In an advanced and civilized nation, government should allcote(allocate) resources reasonably between cities and country. They should call for a balance in the financial support.（头两句好象是重复的呀）After all, unilateral development is adverse to a nation in a long run.

Above of all, agriculture based on country appears fundamental aspect in a nation'economy (nation’s economy) to sustain people's basic lives. (appears好象不是很好，感觉优点否定的意思) Anyway, any person can not survive without eating and drinking. And parently（apparently）,if we do not satisfy（satisfy是用于sth satisfy sb） those desires, we can hardly consider other further desires and advancement of （our）society. The broad country is the only spot for agriculture since it provides enomorous（enormous） arable lands.（这句话我看不明白） And agriculture production is fraught with uncertainty because it is contingent on many complex natural conditions. Such natural conditions are very complicated and unpredictable, so that agriculture production turn（turns） out to be not controllable(out of control似乎更好一些). The key of（to） this problem will be(这里好象不应该用将来时吧) to raise technology level. Only if we use advanced technology to assemble agriculture, can we promote the ability to analyse（analyze） and predict natural conditions so as to reduce the adventure（这里为什么用 adventure?） of agriculture production and make it more controllable. For example, China is a large agriculture nation. She was ever very poor in agriculture technology level(poor不合适，应该说落后，再说，中国的农业技术不一定很落后呀). With the reform and opening in China, Government pay(pays) much attention to improving agriculture technology. The country has received large numbers of financial support. Therefore, agriculture in China has made quite great progress, as(为什么用as???) strongly support(支持发展好象不通，用accelerate如何？还有，这个例子并不能说明有了技术，就能把农业变为可以控制的呀？) the development of the whole national economy.


Moreover, country almost offers all the natural resources to within a nation.（看不懂）Not only land but also lake, mountain, forest, etc. are all the precious treasure for a nation. For they basically make up of the material foundation of society.（应该是上一句的原因从句吧） How to explore and utilize them is an（a） crucial question to any government since abusing natural resources just for industry development has given rise to many environment problems, which is eventually bound to impede the development of the whole economy and society. Cases about this problem have been common occurance（occurrence）. It is high time for man kind（mankind） to take measures against(用to solve， against 环境问题？不合适呀)) environment problems and learn to protect and reasonably explore resources.（感觉这一段好象和农村，城市都没有什么关系呀，你是想说污染是因为城市的发展吗，那不是很牵强？）

Finally, we can not ingore（ignore） a great number of cultural traditions that lie in the country. Modern city civilization is encroaching on many antique traditions specially(especially) in cities. Even we can find some clues of cultural traditions only preserved in the country. For instance, We have not seen lots of folk skills in most China cities for a long time, which is always rooted in the village. Therefore, the claim that it is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated is not convincing.


For the reason given above, I insist that governments should seek a balance in financial support(support) to different sections of nations. Admittedly, cities are of great importance in society life. Meanwhile, we should not overrate the role of the country. To pursue a kind of concerted and lasting development will be the best way to achieve steady prosperity.
我不知道你对这个题目的看法是什么样的。我认为，它主要是讨论文化的问题，所以我觉得应该论述文化在城市和乡村的生存空间的问题，或者和这有关系的一些问题。而你的作文大部分没有谈到文化。
不知道其他人有什么看法和意见。
你的一些单词运用得很好，很地道，继续努力，你会做得更好！！！！

imongUID: 140258

嗯，谢谢beckhamwise，做得很不错呢！:)

To：白鸽
也希望你多多参与这里的讨论，交流拓展思路，给别人的文章提提意见，不要有“怕mislead别人”之类的顾虑，参与和交流会帮助自己提高的，帮助别人也帮助自己。互相帮助感觉真得很好的，你觉得呢？积极热心的网友会优先得到斑竹的关注，而且这样其他网友也会更愿意看你的文章呢！^_^

~白鸽~UID: 148401

谢谢beckhamwise，我写得很匆忙，许多拼写和表达错误。不好意思。你指出的很多都很中肯

关于主题，我仔细看了一下：我发现我确实犯了题目理解的错误，我原来草率的把题意理解为：政府只要管大城市，因为城市产生保存文化传统。所以，我更多从农村的种种重要作用论述，不仅是文化了。

其实他没说要只管城市，而是必须保证城市有足够的财政支持发展。我觉得应该对该题目持一个基本的正态度： 城市文明在现代社会很重要。三段的论据打算这样写：城市提供了国民经济基本的工业基础，这也是文化发展的物质基础； 城市成为了现代文化传播和交流的中心；也不可忽视农村在文化中的作用，农村可以配合城市文化发展。

总之，这是一个巨大的教训，给我也给大家：写作前一定要认真审题！！仔细把握作者的意思。特别在issue中。
你意如何？望进一步商榷。

beckhamwiseUID: 142845

这一篇我写过，不过提纲是按照孙远的书上来的，主要是认为中心应该放在农村，因为城市在全球化的浪潮中已经同化了．　你的提纲也很不错呀！加油！