issue2 第一篇练笔，请大家指教

ivylaujUID: 140844

利用午休时间写了一篇ISSUE，第一次写很痛苦啊，没专门看时间，大概超时在5分钟到10分钟之间。总觉得写不长，才300多字。请大家多点给意见，谢谢！

Issue: "Competition   is   ultimately  more  beneficial  than  detrimental to society."

    I do agree competition is ultimately more beneficial than detrimental to society.

    First,competition can make people and organizations more ambitious and more creative. competition provides you one mirror ,which show you that you are not the best one in the world and show you the distants you have to another one.   my most important work in my company is to collect all information about our competitors. our competitors are locate around the world.some of them are the top 500 companies in the world . though we are not strong enough to compete with them in some regions now,but we know what should we do to improve ourselves through compitions between those companies and us. at the same time ,my company do lots of things to study and develop new products and technology in order to be more competitable in the world market. if no competition, we will satify that we are the top one in biomatic machine field in China ,and do nothing to study and develop new products.   

    Secondly, competition give people motivation to improve themselves ,and then become better and better. if no competition,  people will satisfy with his situation and the achivement he has gotten. throught competition ,we know our shortage .i competed a manager position with one coworker last year,and at the end ,i failed. i asked myself why i failed to get this position and what ability was the coworker have and i did not have. finally,i found he was more positive to his job than me to mine. After that time,i becomed more positive and hard working , and now,i am a marketting strategy manager.i thank the competition between me and that coworker very much,because it provided me one opportunity to be a better emplayee.

    Though competion is beneficial to a society, i would like to point out that both a society and individuals should make sure that the compitions are under control by people ,and prevend people compete with some inlegible way. Both compition with inlegible way and the compition without control will do harm to society .

imongUID: 140258

https://bbs.gter.net/announcement.php?s=&forumid=23 发帖子之前先看一下关于格式的要求。

写作水平一般，还是先去精华区多看看，先学习前人的文章和经验吧。按照现在的水平，光写的话不会提高太多的。

ivylaujUID: 140844

谢谢IMONG 和SAROSC，我会先好好学习别人的好的文章的。