[独立任务]kingsen的作业贴

kingsen_tangUID: 3433046

托福小白一枚，敬请各位多多指教，求狠拍！！！千万不要手下留情！

这次时间终于够了


额 又有好几天没有写了。。。把今天的作业当成了模考的作文




额又好几天没有写了 就快考试了 时间不够怎么破。。。










(貌似写得惨不忍睹啊)

kingsen_tangUID: 3433046

第一次写T的作文
请尽情拍砖
谢谢

以下是附件



附件内容如下：
8.8 综合写作 tpo9
In the lecture, the professor points out that though hydrogen-based fuel-cell engines might be a replacement to internal-combustion engines with finite oil and the fact that burning oil will cause air pollution, the passage is too hasty to conclude that hydrogen-based fuel-cell engines will replace internal-combustion engines for reasons as followed.

Firstly, it's not so practical and available to obtain hydrogen. We can not obtain hydrogen directly from water, and on the other hand, it needs high technology to acquire the pure and liquid hydrogen, which is not practical now.

Secondly, air pollution problem cannot be solved even hydrogen replaces oil as the main power energy. Though the passage points out that the only byproduct of fuel-cell engines is water while the byproduct of internal-combustion engines is carbon dioxide, which will harm the environment, the obtaining process and liquefying process of hydrogen requires lots of energy from burning coal or other resources, which will also pollute the environment.

In addition, there will be no cost saving if the internal-combustion engines are replaced by fuel-cell engines due to the components of the fuel-cell engines need a very rare and expensive element, and till now, no cheaper material can be successfully replace that element, making the fuel-cell engines far more expensive than internal-combustion engines.

wellnessUID: 3400301

8.9互动批改
我觉得楼主写的很不错

kingsen_tangUID: 3433046

wellness 发表于 2013-8-10 07:08
8.9互动批改
我觉得楼主写的很不错

谢谢~辛苦了~我要向你好好学习

shiqilUID: 3266571

改好了:lol

duaifeiliUID: 3460134

改好啦~

kingsen_tangUID: 3433046

duaifeili 发表于 2013-8-10 13:40
改好啦~

收到 谢谢你的意见~~

kingsen_tangUID: 3433046

shiqil 发表于 2013-8-10 11:31
改好了

谢谢，辛苦了~
你的建议很中肯  泛泛而谈是我一直存在的大问题
对了，你昨天是没有写是吧？

shiqilUID: 3266571

kingsen_tang 发表于 2013-8-10 14:19
谢谢，辛苦了~
你的建议很中肯  泛泛而谈是我一直存在的大问题
对了，你昨天是没有写是吧？

嗯，惭愧啊，昨天一小时写了一段实在写不下去了。。

kingsen_tangUID: 3433046

shiqil 发表于 2013-8-10 19:18
嗯，惭愧啊，昨天一小时写了一段实在写不下去了。。

没事的 昨天那题目实在是。。。。

dongr87UID: 3437445

8.8修改来啦~

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dongr87 发表于 2013-8-10 22:27
8.8修改来啦~

谢谢~~你不说 我还没有注意 貌似整篇都用长句了 额 这个得注意一下去 毕竟不是gre作文 谢谢咯

wellnessUID: 3400301

8.10互动批改

kingsen_tangUID: 3433046

wellness 发表于 2013-8-11 07:54
8.10互动批改

咱们的时间很像啊 我正在帮你改 然后昨天占座竟然又在一起了 猿粪啊！

wellnessUID: 3400301

kingsen_tang 发表于 2013-8-11 07:56
咱们的时间很像啊 我正在帮你改 然后昨天占座竟然又在一起了 猿粪啊！

哈哈 是啊 我喜欢早上起来就先把各种作文口语都改完