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helen614UID: 154029

We can usually learn much more from people whose views we share than from people whose views contradict our own; disagreement can cause stress and inhibit learning.
还有一个月就要考了，匆匆上阵，还请多多帮忙指教！想知道自己到底现在有哪些不足，这样抱佛脚也许效果要好些，多谢多谢啦！
这一篇超时了，管不了那么多，提高质量先

How does disagreement, which, in some sense, is seemingly unwelcomed everywhere, function in our life? It is widely argued that on occasions where disagreement exists, stress is unexceptionably aroused by the distinction among people, and thus learning is inhibited. As a conclusion, as is usually maintained, we can learn much more from people whose views we share than from people whose views contradict our own. But considering the multi-consequence brought out by disagreement, I insist that it won't, at least, harm our process of learning, if it doesn't benefit us.

First, it is always the opposite answer that encourages us to re-consider our points of view and perfect them. As is put forward by the chief professor of our department, discussions may function better with more clashes among us students, since "when we share the same belief, we'll have only one conclusion; but if we have more of various points, we may piece them together and form a more complete one." It is true, when we adjust our plans and attitudes towards a problem according to others' viewpoints, we find more of the shortcomings from our initial ones than in the occasions when what we put forward are extraordinarily similar. Thus our minds are enriched and we can get a full appreciation of the problem.

Second, disagreement does not necessarily cause stress as many people believe. The process of learning decides its basic formula totally on itself, while the participants decide what attitude they take towards the process. Why, as I take leave to wonder, should there be such thing as "stress", if everyone in the group takes the position of a learner rather than a debater? Why, in some sense, should we "win" when we're confronted with distinctions? Taking it for granted that disagreement may cause harmful stress, we may make great efforts to avoid this stress, or rather, the uncomfortable feelings that others are against us, rather than to focus on learning itself. So being "pure learners", we should rather appreciate others when they help us to see the other side of the coin.

Last but not the least, even if disagreement may, on some occasions, lead to stress upon the learners, the stress should be beneficial or should at least be turned beneficial psychologically, rather than being taken as a burden. Were it not for the stress upon Hilbert, the great mathematician, to prove his theory to his contemporarians whose comments severely contradict his essays, he would never put forward the distinguished "Hilbert's 23 problems", which have led the world's mathematics research ever since they were published. Stress, if it does exist, functions best when we understand it and take it as the stimulation of our proceeding.

As a conclusion, in terms of learning, disagreement and the stress that might be generated among us won't block our way of learning, and can most possibly be beneficial, if it brings about the perfection of our thoughts and minds.

imongUID: 140258

busy了一整天了人有点头晕~~sigh，但愿现在不说胡话就是。

没看出来语言上有哪些失误，如果排除我头晕到一定程度或者今天正好不太挑剔两种可能的话，就说明语言上基本流畅。三部分段内的论述也还不错，不过似乎找不到对于主题干（也就是前半句关于more）的分析，只有第一个body还算得上relevant。主要笔墨都在写后面。今天正好在讨论这个题目，看看那个主题讨论的帖子吧。

开头的那个段落语言似乎比较绕，不是很舒服的样子。

也希望你多多参与这里的讨论，交流拓展思路，给别人的文章提提意见，不要有“怕mislead别人”之类的顾虑，参与和交流会帮助自己提高的，帮助别人也帮助自己。助人者人助之，当初so猫的issue88后面跟了7篇修改稿就是最好的例子哦。

helen614UID: 154029

嘻嘻，小女子这厢有礼了～～～