Issue196 (No. 2) welcome to evaluate my issue.

jxkingUID: 141801

196."Technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or  
damage the quality of life."  

Recently, people are always talking about the problem of whether technology creates more problems that it solves. If there is one--which I take leave to doubt--then it is created by  those who have not a good appreciation of technology and do not know to take advantage of it , not by those who have a profound understanding of technology and have had completely make best use of it. As far as I am concerned, I believe that the technology solves more problems that it creates, and thus have greatly improved our life quality.

First of all, many people may sincerely believe that the technology have nothing to do with our daily life, however, we do not have to go very far to see that the technology place an important influence on our work, study, and life. With the development of science and technology, the society get drastically improved and more and more advanced equipments and apparatus come out, which serve as significant tools to facilitate many new effective methods and bring much more convenience to our daily life. One good case in point is the emergence of MRI (magnetic resonance image) in medicine, which is, nowadays, widely used as a necessary assistant examination in all kinds of disease such as fracture, cerebral hemorrhage, and cerebral atherosclerosis and brain infarction and so on. It is especially useful and sensitive to the patient who suffered from carcinoma, even if it is too small to be perceived by X ray film. With the help of this technology, a larger number of patients could then get a early diagnosis in clinical service and then acquire a early and immediate treatment, which could greatly safe their lives and largely improve the quality of life as well as alleviate their bitterness.

In addition, some people may also take for granted that we can live the equal life and solve problem with no help of technology, yet a close examination would reveal that many of problems can not be settled down apart away from technology. Even if we can not deduce this fact of without question from the general principles, we can know this from the concrete example of, for instance, the computer. As we know, computer is not only much fast than human brain in the calculating velocity, but also it make fewer mistakes and fallacies than human race, thus make a great many things available to the common people which expected of mission impossible in the past, such as reporting weather conversion, decoding genetic series, and sending satellites and so on, all this events which are thought to be undoubtedly hallucination and night vision are eventually realized today, which, to a greater extent, attribute to the development of technology.

Admittedly, the technology do bring about some troubles and problems which haunt the imaginations of people as well as political leaders and may sometimes result in great menace and damage to our society. It looks as every sword bears tow blades, the disadvantages of technology do exist which may in some sense threaten and damage our life. Positively, it is a grimly whimsical spectacle that the gunners using technology to shatter men's bodies while, close at hand, surgeons use it to restore them. Obviously, this is not original purpose of the technology. Therefore the problem set for society is not the fault of technology so much as the human's attitude of how to use technology properly and helpfully.

In summary, the technology has definitely and vastly played a utilitarian role in our lives today. Without the help of technology, our life would never get such convenient and comfortable. Moreover, it is the technology that has extended the human brain and greatly brought about solutions to difficulties and problems remained in the past owing to the confine of limited technological level.   (637words)

jxkingUID: 141801

这么都没有人来看我的文章呀？

coolwitsUID: 149150

发得太多了
你准备时间不多了,心情我很理解.
但是一次发6篇,也太夸张了吧, :)
一人一天发一篇是不成文的规定,你这种情况也最好不要超过两篇.
记得以前有一位经常在作文板帮别人改文章的前辈,在考前几天每天发两篇,还一个劲的像板上的兄弟姐妹道歉的.

angel_naliUID: 148055

刚才写了好多评论，丢掉了。心情郁闷。就不再一一重复了。

angel_naliUID: 148055

这里就强调一点刚才写过的最主要的：因为你的position采用的是Disagree with concession，所以建议你的concession部分可以更加有力一些，比如加入几个example 作为支持论证。从生物学的角度讲“实验动物伦理学问题”“克隆人的争论”“转基因食品的食用性“甚至目前流行的”禽流感的防止“问题，都可以作为生动的例证来充实文章。
还有，读了你的几篇文章，感觉你已经形成了自己的写作套路，建议无论旁人如何说，你都要坚持你已经形成的模式，目前你最需要做的，就是在对题目论点分0析的深度，以及论据的选取与把握上下功夫。
Good Luck!

jxkingUID: 141801

感谢上兄弟的点评