issue127 ~1小时10分钟~~

so猫UID: 148633

issue127
"Facts are stubborn things. They cannot be altered by our wishes, our inclinations, or the dictates of our passions."

Facts that have already existed cannot be changed, the speaker asserts, by any personal factors, such as wishes, inclinations, passion. Nevertheless, I remain the conservation of this assertion, since although the facts-with the explanation in the dictionary that implies the things that has been already happened-as far as I am concerned, cannot be altered, the things concerned with ideology can influence the facts in the future to certain extent.

No one in the world can change the things occurring in the past or at present, otherwise he is not human being but God. People cannot get rid of their destinies to be born in a poor family, with average talent and plain appearance. Meanwhile, the sick have to face the reality that they get the cancer or AIDS even if no one has the inclination to have it. There is nothing for an individual to do but to accept what God gave him. Facts, in this situation, seems more likely to be destiny which has been planned before a person was born, merely by God regardless of the personal efforts in one's later life.

Does it imply that individual inclination and emotion bring nothing to the facts, some people may ask? No, it is possible to reply to this question with abundant examples. Rich Dad Poor Dad, among the best-sellers of New York Times in 2002, mentions (and I paraphrase) that the attitudes towards the situation can cause the alternation of facts in the future. For instance, no one can choose what kind of family he was born. Nevertheless, people can learn hard to find a wonderful job to achieve his goal, which may include earning amount of money to become a rich man. Simply speaking, the facts lies in front of us cannot be changed, yet the facts that will happen tomorrow are unknown which are determined by the attitudes, efforts, and steps we choose to take today. An old English saying that was said as "Do not cry on the split milk." from another aspect represents the truth that past things can never be changed yet the current attitude could be chosen to determine what happens next. To conclude, personal factors cannot solve the problem at present but may influence the future.

Based on the two paragraphs above, people have to be aware that the inclination, wishes, emotions could guide the direction the facts towards. Positive things could lead to the optimistic destination, such as success in business or mental comfort, while the negative ones do the opposite. A successful individual analyzes the situation when facing difficulty, trying his best to find a way out of the swamp. An average person may calm down and turn to others after crying when frustrated by the problems. Pessimistic and hopeless one will stay still and never move ahead when falling down. If this happens in a running race, it is easy to conclude the result that the successful person can reach the goal, the average one also can arrive at the destination, but much more later, and the pessimistic one can never get to the end point. The inclination and emotion of a person can change the future of him, from this point of view.

Past and current facts cannot be altered anymore, however, if people could properly grasp the opportunity at present that derives from the inner inclination and personality, the future facts can be determined, not by God, just by the people who make efforts themselves.

这篇真是差劲写的~~~~
拍吧拍吧~~~~
谢谢~~~

sydUID: 151948

issue127
"Facts are stubborn things. They cannot be altered by our wishes, our inclinations, or the dictates of our passions."

Facts that have already existed cannot be changed, the speaker asserts, by any personal factors, such as wishes, inclinations, passion.[这里的概念定义很好，把3个分开的定义成一个PERSONAL FACTORS] Nevertheless, I remain the conservation of this assertion, since although the facts-with the explanation in the dictionary that implies the things that has been already happened-as far as I am concerned, cannot be altered, the things concerned with ideology can influence the facts in the future to certain extent.

No one in the world can change the things occurring in the past or at present, otherwise he is not human being but God. People cannot get rid of their destinies to be born in a poor family, with average talent and plain appearance. Meanwhile, the sick have to face the reality that they get the cancer or AIDS even if no one has the inclination to have it. There is nothing for an individual to do but to accept what God gave him[“GOD”这里似乎有宗教倾向，不如直接说客观已经存在的事物不能改变，要好些]. Facts, in this situation, seems more likely to be destiny which has been planned before a person was born, merely by God regardless of the personal efforts in one's later life.

Does it imply that individual inclination and emotion bring nothing to the facts, some people may ask? No, it is possible to reply to this question with abundant examples. Rich Dad Poor Dad[加个书名号？], among the best-sellers of New York Times in 2002, mentions (and I paraphrase) that the attitudes towards the situation can cause the alternation of facts in the future. For instance, no one can choose what kind of family he was born[IN]. Nevertheless, people can learn hard to find a wonderful job to achieve his goal, which may include earning amount of money to become a rich man. [Simply speaking, the facts lies in front of us cannot be changed, yet the facts that will happen tomorrow are unknown which are determined by the attitudes, efforts, and steps we choose to take today.]这里我认为是全文的一个关键，到底什么是FACT？后面我就不看了，你的行文没有什么问题，语言也很好，直接到文尾讨论一下FACT吧 :cool:  An old English saying that was said as "Do not cry on the split milk." from another aspect represents the truth that past things can never be changed yet the current attitude could be chosen to determine what happens next. To conclude, personal factors cannot solve the problem at present but may influence the future.

Based on the two paragraphs above, people have to be aware that the inclination, wishes, emotions could guide the direction the facts towards. Positive things could lead to the optimistic destination, such as success in business or mental comfort, while the negative ones do the opposite. A successful individual analyzes the situation when facing difficulty, trying his best to find a way out of the swamp. An average person may calm down and turn to others after crying when frustrated by the problems. Pessimistic and hopeless one will stay still and never move ahead when falling down. If this happens in a running race, it is easy to conclude the result that the successful person can reach the goal, the average one also can arrive at the destination, but much more later, and the pessimistic one can never get to the end point. The inclination and emotion of a person can change the future of him, from this point of view.

Past and current facts cannot be altered anymore, however, if people could properly grasp the opportunity at present that derives from the inner inclination and personality, the future facts can be determined, not by God, just by the people who make efforts themselves.

MERRIAM-WEBSTER 定义的FACT：
1 : a thing done: as  a obsolete   : FEAT  b : CRIME *accessory after the fact*  c archaic   : ACTION
2 archaic   : PERFORMANCE, DOING
3 : the quality of being actual : ACTUALITY *a question of fact hinges on evidence*
4 a : something that has actual existence *space exploration is now a fact*  b : an actual occurrence *prove the fact of damage*
5 : a piece of information presented as having

可以看出FACT 是已经 DONE 了的事物，而你把FACT 分为过去和现在的FACT ，和未来的FACT。 关键在于，未来的事物没有发生，又怎么能叫 FACT 呢？？？
FACT 应该是确定的，而FUTURE 有无限的可能性，似乎很难让2者中任一者归入其分支中去，似乎没有FUTURE FACT 的说法吧，这样似乎有宿命的色彩了，未来的事实。。。，未来的事实。。。
:( ，你觉得 呢？？
不过我认为是不是可以认为FACT 是不能被主观改变的，但是每个人对于FACT 的看法都是不一样的，好比客观事物在主观感情中不同的映射，这样看的话，FACT 在个体的影响就不是FACT 决定而是由 FACT 和 PERSONAL EMOTIONS 共同决定的了，你认为呢？ :D

so猫UID: 148633

呵呵 如果按楼主的思路 这篇文章就麻烦了哦~~~~
我不是宿命啦 不过 我觉得呢 这个文章思路的问题 真的是说不清楚啦
呵呵 你的思路也好好 呵呵 给我上了一课
谢谢你~~~~~~

sydUID: 151948

不客气，共同进步，用你的MOTTO ：GOOD GOOD STUDY
DAY DAY UP！ :D

YevgrafUID: 154550

太困了没认真看：P 说错了不要理会。
fact我也认为是已经发生的事情，至少这样理解好象比较容易接受。
至于future fact，似乎牵涉到未来是否可以被现在（包括现在已发生的事情和决定事情发展方向的规律）决定这样一个哲学问题（我说不清了……ft）。假如你要用future fact表示“未来”或者“未来的一种可能”，用future大概就可以了。future fact这样的词单从词义上说确实不是很妥当。不知道我是否正确理解了你的意思。

jxkingUID: 141801

I would like to say that "You really have tow down son.".

ValentinerUID: 121676

Facts that have already existed cannot be changed, the speaker asserts(用as the speaker asserts好些吧), by any personal factors, such as wishes, inclinations, passion(s). Nevertheless, I remain the conservation of this assertion, since although the facts-with the explanation in the dictionary that implies the things that has been already happened-as far as I am concerned, cannot be altered, the things concerned with ideology can influence the facts in the future to certain extent.
这一段写得好深奥啊,像我这种工科出身的人,是无论如何也捣鼓不出来这样的话的,PFPF啊~~~

No one in the world can change the things occurring in the past or at present, otherwise he is not human being but God. People cannot get rid of their destinies to be born in a poor family, with average talent and plain appearance. Meanwhile, the sick have to face the reality that they get the cancer or AIDS even if no one has the inclination to have it. There is nothing for an individual to do but to accept what God gave him. Facts, in this situation, seems more likely to be destiny which has been planned before a person was born, merely by God regardless of the personal efforts in one's later life.
这一段论述一些事情是生来就定了的,人为无法改变.但看了以后觉得有点唯心的感觉,可能是god一词用得太多了吧.不知道ETS对唯心是怎么看,如果也像仇视达尔文的进化论一样仇视它的话,那最好一些宿命感的理论就不要表现的太过.而且你后文也提到通过后天的努力是可以改变一些天生的逆境的,所以这一段最好不要用一些语气很强的词,最好用些may, possible, might, probable……这样也为你后文埋下伏笔.

Does it imply that individual inclination and emotion bring nothing to the facts, some people may ask? No, it is possible to reply to this question with abundant examples. Rich Dad Poor Dad, among the best-sellers of New York Times in 2002, mentions (and I paraphrase) that the attitudes towards the situation can cause(造成了alternation? 不太好吧,换成offer, provide可能会好点吧) the alternation of facts in the future. For instance, no one can choose what kind of family he was born. Nevertheless, people can learn hard to find a wonderful job to achieve his goal, which may include earning amount of money to become a rich man(这句话总觉得有点不太地道,不如改成……to achieve his goal to be a rich man by means of earning amount of money). Simply speaking, the facts lies in front of us cannot be changed, yet the facts that will happen tomorrow are unknown which are determined by the attitudes, efforts, and steps we choose to take today. An old English saying that was said as "Do not cry on the split milk." from another aspect represents the truth that past things can never be changed yet the current attitude could be chosen to determine what happens next. To conclude, personal factors cannot solve the problem at present but may influence the future.

Based on the two paragraphs above, people have to be aware that the inclination, wishes, emotions could guide the direction the facts towards. Positive things could lead to the optimistic destination, such as success in business or mental comfort, while the negative ones do the opposite. A successful individual analyzes the situation when facing difficulty, trying his best to find a way out of the swamp. An average person may calm down and turn to others after crying when frustrated by the problems. Pessimistic and hopeless one will stay still and never move ahead when falling down. If this happens in a running race, it is easy to conclude the result that the successful person can reach the goal, the average one also can arrive at the destination, but much more(去掉more) later, and the pessimistic one can never get to the end point. The inclination and emotion of a person can change the future of him(or her), from this point of view.
这一段写得很成功,比喻论证得不错,唯一我觉得要推敲一下的就是,successful这个词,既然已经successful了,后面的can reach the goal就觉得有些矛盾,不如在把successful 换成optimistic,正好也和后面的pessimistic相对应.

Past and current facts cannot be altered anymore, however, if people could properly grasp the opportunity at present that derives from the inner inclination and personality, the future facts can be determined, not by God, just by the people who make efforts themselves.

这是一篇很难写的ISSUE,题目抽象.在化抽象为具体上,你做得很好,PF啊~~~,这是一直困扰我多年的难题啊~~~~
但在论述上,觉得始终就是在讲一个方面,就是过去的无法改变,将要发生的会受的个人的努力,态度等的影响.其实思路可以再打开一点.比如说,what seems stationary today  may be changed one day in future, since the fabulous progress of science and technology has realized many of the old myths into realities.
我就想到了这么多.行为类,也是我最不会写的,其实看到so猫写的,想哭的人是我才对.写得真的不错,继续加油!

dawnspeakerUID: 152586

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[B]呵呵 如果按楼主的思路 这篇文章就麻烦了哦~~~~
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好想猫儿自己是楼主吧

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