issue185 未完成(是不是想到了孙燕姿的专辑）

poohUID: 146994

这篇issue写的没头没尾，是写累了，不想写了，太不好意思了 :o 。到此为止已经将近700字了，请大家多提意见，不知道跑没跑题呢，感激。。。

Issue 185
"Scandals---whether in politics, academia, or other areas---can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could."


First of all, it is obvious that scandals are  of the most eye-catching news today, and their power may even eclipse those of speakers and reformers. When browsing a newspaper or webpage, sometimes the most conspicuous head lines are about scandals. Moreover, one must have a deep impression about scandals from the historic ones like Watergate scandal , sex scandal of Bill Clinton to those happen in daily life while paying little attention to the new reform of the government recently.  Two reasons  come into my mind that could explain the phenomenon why people pay so much attention : one is that people are concerned with the function of society and want it to change for better as well as a curiosity of digging into those celebrities or politicians' personal affairs; the other reason is that when the mass media cover those scandals they are prone to magnify scandals in order to draw the attention from public or even cater to some low taste. Compared with the 'normal' acts of the speaker or reformers , 'paranormal' scandals and magnified coverage  seemingly are the center of the public.

Conspicuous may scandals seem and  a lot of attentions they may have drawn on problems in ways no speaker or reformer could, it doesn't equal that scandals could be helpful to society in any areas and at any time. It depends on the motives of onlookers and whether people could go further enough to realize the underlying malfunction as well as take some actions.

When it comes to politics, no matter corruptions, bribery, gerrymander, delinquency or anything else, the scandals undoubtedly will be flaring, but not always helpful. Consider, when two candidates for mayor scandalize each other for the past bad things, should the common people believe them all? If people 's eyes only fix on the blatant scandals they even forget to ask whether the scandals all are real, and only stay at the surface, no doubt what scandals bring is only a black side of the society and political system  which definitely leads to lacking confidence of the constituency . However, if people are able to take one step further to contemplate on scandals as to discover the defects of the system thereafter propel the reform, scandals can be helpful. For instance, because of scandals one survey indicates that 80 percent of Japanese lose confidence on the present government.  Nonetheless, if Japanese think it carefully on the causes of misconducts of the government officers instead of only complaining, they may discovery the reason lies in the malfunction of the government , to be exact, the too close relationship between the government and state-owned companies which makes the officer inclined to commit bribery. It is likely that some effective reforms accordingly  carried out may help to bid the government to function more soundly.

However, as far as academia, I doubt whether scandals could bring more benefit than harm. Because scandals whether they are true or not will distract scholars from their research works and bring panic into academia which inevitably disorders the system. It is well-known that mass media would like to dig something out from those famous scholars which will make a sensation and a scholar usually only focus on studies with little attention to personal images. Just imagine, if the scandals have been prevailing among scholars, even someone who has nothing to do with such misconducts would act cautiously so as not to cause any suspects by medias and surely it is a waste of energy and time. Isn’t it better if those scholars dedicate their time and energy to their researches and make greater contribution to our society?  Maybe some detractors may say that sandals would be help when there is a plagiary. But I would argue  though sandals can bring those who plagiarize into light,  shouldn’t we perfect our supervisory system which should carry out such functions instead of appealing to scandals in view of the disadvantage I discussed above?

imongUID: 140258

Conspicuous may scandals seem and a lot of attentions they may have drawn on problems in ways no speaker or reformer could 恐怕在平行结构上有问题

第三段写得很不错，第二段出了这句话之外也是个相当好的承接（外加里面的分析）。行文的问题在于第四段提出了scandals, whether TRUE or NOT, 然后又提到了helpful/not，两面一交叉，第四段的分析基本上就混乱掉了。 这两个问题如果在文章中都打算体现的话，一定要各自说清楚，如果可以的话也可以进行交叉分析。

如果打算把academia和politics区分开，一定要说清楚：为什么，到底为什么，scandal CAN be useful for one but not the other，到底区别在哪里，在其它等效因素相同的时候，到底最后差异的来源是什么。第四段就是没说清楚，显得乱糟糟的。

行文基本上还可以，除了第四段线路不清之外都还算是比较清楚的。这个水平已经不错了，再改改，写个完成+优化版。开头结尾：补！

poohUID: 146994

如果打算把academia和politics区分开，一定要说清楚：为什么，到底为什么，scandal CAN be useful for one but not the other，到底区别在哪里，在其它等效因素相同的时候，到底最后差异的来源是什么。第四段就是没说清楚，显得乱糟糟的。

的确有问题，我再改改，再补充，发现要说清楚一个题目有的时候700字也不够啊

行文基本上还可以，除了第四段线路不清之外都还算是比较清楚的。这个水平已经不错了，再改改，写个完成+优化版。开头结尾：补！

:) 谢谢鼓励，本来想就这么打法了这个题目，听了imong的花给了我动力要完成它。谢谢imong

xiaoaierUID: 137074

The last paragraph seems not very coherent . However, other paragraphs are very ,very good.

You really did a excellent job! Keep on! Add your beginning and end ! I expect your complete  'works' . ;)