issue44 我的第一篇issue，大家来拍啊

simonhuiUID: 128708

44.Government should not fund any scientific research whose consequences,either medical or ethical,are unclear.
这是我的第一篇issue， 用时一个半小时，又用了15分钟修改了一下。
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The speaker contends that government should not spend money on any scientific research with unclear consequences.I disagree with this contention.In my opinion,government should fund those researches because sooner or later investment in scientific research will do good to the human beings.

It is commonly accepted that scientific progress always acts as the great inpelling force from ancient tribe to modern society.Nearly every progress has propelled the productivity to a high level.For examples,the geometry was invented when the ancient Egyptians tended to devide their lands and it contributed to the prosperity of the ancient Egypt;the engine was created to generate tremendous work forces and it directly resulted in the Industrial Revolution;in the modern world,scientists invented computers which  appear in most fields of our lives and lead to a age of information.I think everyone will agree that the scientific progress changes human's living patterns and provide lives of good qualities.Without these progress ,we cannot come to such highly-developed civilization.In short,scientific progress is always a dynamic force to develop the society.

Admittedly,the consequences of the research may result in controversy.Cloning is a good example of this.On the one hand,cloning can greatly benefit the human.Its application in organ transportation has gained immense success:the patients will not worry about the sourses of the organs which used to be very scarce because the doctor can create the organs needed to plant in the patients by the help of cloning.Moreover,cloning is very helpful for the scientists who are seeking the substitute for the resources in short.On the other hand,however,cloning will not only threaten the normal ethical and moral relations between people,but also may create perfect people which will result in racial discriminations.So,some researches do have unclear consequences.

Nevertheless,government shoule keep optimistic about the scientific research just like what the human have  done before.For example,the discovery of nuclear energe aroused heated debate:some people was facinated in the great amount of energy and dreamed to apply it to the power station while others worried about the tremendous power of the nuclear weapons and opposed  the research.Governments just continued to fund the research.Admittedly,there are the threats of the nuclear weapons in the modern world.But,the nuclear power stations ,which do little harm to the environment comparing to other forms of power station, have generated unbelievable amount of power.The nuclear energy benefits the human a lot.The government should be confident that human is able to control the consequences of the researches.

To sum up,scientific researches with unclear consequences should be supported by the government.The progress will lead to the acceleration of the world's development.The government should have confidence of the power to overcome the sideffect of the progress and cotrol them to benefit the human.

ValentinerUID: 121676

The speaker contends that government should not spend money on any scientific research with unclear consequences.I disagree with this contention.In my opinion,government should fund those researches because sooner or later investment in scientific research will do good to the human beings.

It is commonly accepted that scientific progress always acts as the great inpelling(impelling) force from ancient tribe to modern society.Nearly every progress has propelled the productivity to a high level.For examples,the geometry was invented when the ancient Egyptians tended to devide their lands and it contributed to the prosperity of the ancient Egypt;the engine was created to generate tremendous work forces and it directly resulted in the Industrial Revolution;in the modern world,scientists invented computers which appear in most fields of our lives and lead to a age of information.I think everyone will agree that the scientific progress changes human's living patterns and provide lives of good qualities.Without these progress ,we cannot come to such highly-developed civilization.In short,scientific progress is always a dynamic force to develop the society.

Admittedly,the consequences of the research may result in controversy.Cloning is a good example of this.On the one hand,cloning can greatly benefit the human.Its application in organ transportation(transplant) has gained immense success:the patients will not worry about the sourses(sources) of the organs which used to be very scarce because the doctor can create the organs needed to plant in the patients by the help of cloning.Moreover,cloning is very helpful for the scientists who are seeking the substitute for the resources in short.On the other hand,however(on the other hand 和however都表示转折,用一个就够了),cloning will not only threaten the normal ethical and moral relations between people,but also may create perfect people which will result in racial discriminations.So,some researches do have unclear consequences.
这一段只是在说一些研究会带来不确定的后果,给人感觉只是在陈述一个事实,并没有深入论述一下这样不确定的后果会造成什么样的社会影响,而你的观点对这样的研究是怎样的,到底是继续研究还是停止研究,都没有表态.

Nevertheless,government shoule keep optimistic about the scientific research just like what the human have done before.For example,the discovery of nuclear energe aroused heated debate:some people was facinated in the great amount of energy and dreamed to apply it to the power station while others worried about the tremendous power of the nuclear weapons and opposed the research.Governments just continued to fund the research.Admittedly,there are the threats of the nuclear weapons in the modern world.But,the nuclear power stations ,which do little harm to the environment comparing to other forms of power station, have generated unbelievable amount of power.The nuclear energy benefits the human a lot.The government should be confident that human is able to control the consequences of the researches.
感觉这一段和上面一段可以合并一下,可以先说,admittedly 很多研究是有争议的,然而政府对它的态度如何如何.

To sum up,scientific researches with unclear consequences should be supported by the government.(这里有点绝对,最好用点程度副词来形容一下)The progress will lead to the acceleration of the world's development.The government should have confidence of the power to overcome the sideffect of the progress and cotrol(control) them to benefit the human.

第一篇能这样真让我羡慕.想想我自己的第一篇,真是惨不忍睹啊.
整篇文章的不足就是论述不是很深入,感觉只是在就事论事.
呵呵,这只是我个人的意见,水平有限,你就多担待了啊 :)

simonhuiUID: 128708

谢谢Valentiner的评论！


感觉这一段和上面一段可以合并一下,可以先说,admittedly 很多研究是有争议的,然而政府对它的态度如何如何.

我觉得第二段还是应该和第三段分开来论述会比较清楚，第二段是做的一个让步，然后第三段再转回，进行肯定。  
如果两段和在一起，会显得过于庞大了把。
大家觉得呢？

整篇文章的不足就是论述不是很深入,感觉只是在就事论事.

恩，同意，我自己也觉得有些话写的不是那么有力度，不能一针见血的去说。
我会继续联系的！
再次谢谢 Valentiner！：）