issue17 法律的，第一篇吐血之作

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Issue 17 "There are two types of laws: just and unjust. Every individual in a society has a responsibility to obey just laws and, even more importantly, to disobey and resist unjust laws."


Checking the judicial system, we can simplify laws into two types－just and unjust. Despite from hundreds of years ago, people are taught to be a law-abiding people at every mother’s knee, every individual, as the above statement mentioned, has a responsibility to obey just laws and, consciously to disobey even break unjust laws. From the famous letter written by Martin Luther King Jr, it is people’s moral responsibility.

It is commonly believed, a systematic and advanced society or country has great respect for laws. For example, the fact that almost one million American are in jail at every given day is seen not as evidence that American society is lawless, but rather, in the Unite States, as proof that respect for laws is paramount and, disobedience to laws is published. In reality, the point of view of American’s still ambivalent. In the U.S., the pro-life attacks carried out from 1980s by opponents of abortion are good example of law-abiding people may be ready to break the law. Many abortion protesters block access to abortion clinics and harass doctors and nurses to prevent women to “killing” lives all over America.

Why do Americans behave like this in such legal society? Are they unafraid of the punishment of laws? The only reason guiding them to break laws is because the existence of unjust laws. Unjust laws are obstacles to the development of the whole society. Laws which can be regarded as “unjust”, of course, do harmful to one group of people and are beneficial to the other in one society. However, everyone is born equally, no matter you are man or woman, white or black, old and young, everybody deserve the same right. Without exaggeration, unjust laws violating the fundamental civil right and blowing the certain group of people into the “hell” divide the society into unfair circumstances and make them depressed, therefore hinder the improvement of world in the end.

It may seem rather paradoxical and ridiculous to urge people to break laws as well as obey laws. The fact lying on every continents that there are two types of laws: just and unjust. Without rule of laws, people can not live in an organized and peaceful society; unjust laws break the order of society.  Why does the U.S. have the capacity to become a powerful country? It is just because Americans obey just laws and disobey unjust laws. In terms of obeying just laws, they can pursue the success of every field under the construction of legal system; finally, make their country thriving and prosperous. In terms of disobeying unjust laws, they urge the government and legislature to amend them which more or less let the legal system more fair. As it is result, it is not paradoxical to teach people do so.

In conclusion, due to need of development, modernization and future of society and moral responsibility, every individual is expected to deal with the relationship of obeying just laws and disobeying unjust laws in a proper way. As time goes by, unjust laws will be finally displaced and our dream can come true. When it comes to that time, everybody can live in a fair world and our lives are more and more beautiful.

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Checking the judicial system, we can simplify laws into two types－just and unjust. Despite(这个是介词,好像不能后面直接从句吧) from hundreds of years ago, people are taught to be a law-abiding people at every mother’s knee, every individual, as the above statement mentioned, has a responsibility to obey just laws and, consciously to disobey even break unjust laws. From the famous letter written by Martin Luther King Jr, it is people’s moral responsibility.

It is commonly believed, a systematic and advanced society or country has great respect for laws. For example, the fact that almost one million American are in jail at every given day is seen not as evidence that American society is lawless, but rather, in the Unite States, as proof that respect for laws is paramount and, disobedience to laws is published(这句话有些冗长,让人觉得有些费解,是不是想办法把句式变化一下,不要在同一句话用过多的从句和插入语). In reality, the point of view of American’s still ambivalent. In the U.S., the pro-life attacks carried out from 1980s by opponents of abortion are good example of law-abiding people may be ready to break the law(这一句怎么有两个谓语,看不太明白,汗~~). Many abortion protesters block access to abortion clinics and harass doctors and nurses to prevent women to “killing” lives all over America.

Why do Americans behave like this in such legal society? Are they unafraid of the punishment of laws? The only reason guiding them to break laws is because the existence of unjust laws. Unjust laws are obstacles to the development of the whole society. Laws which can be regarded as “unjust”, of course, do harmful to one group of people and are beneficial to the other in one society. However, everyone is born equally, no matter you are man or woman, white or black, old and young, everybody deserve(s) the same right. Without exaggeration, unjust laws violating the fundamental civil right and blowing the certain group of people into the “hell” divide the society into unfair circumstances and make them(them和你要指代的人离得有些远,最好这里还是不要用代词的好) depressed, therefore hinder the improvement of world in the end.

It may seem rather paradoxical and ridiculous to urge people to break laws as well as obey laws. The fact lying on every continents(去掉s) that there are two types of laws: just and unjust. Without rule of laws, people can not live in an organized and peaceful society; unjust laws break the order of society. Why does the U.S. have the capacity to become a powerful country? It is just because Americans obey just laws and disobey unjust laws. In terms of obeying just laws, they can pursue the success of every field under the construction of legal system; finally, make their country thriving and prosperous. In terms of disobeying unjust laws, they urge the government and legislature to amend them which more or less let(let好像没有这种用法吧,换成make或是render都可) the legal system more fair. As it is result, it is not paradoxical to teach people do so.

In conclusion, due to need of development, modernization and future of society and moral responsibility, every individual is expected to deal with the relationship of obeying just laws and disobeying unjust laws in a proper way. As time goes by, unjust laws will be finally displaced and our dream can come true. When it comes to that time, everybody can live in a fair world and our lives are more and more beautiful.
全体说来,全文在语言上面没有什么太大的缺点.但给人的总印像就是很平,没有什么特别出彩的地方.这篇文章我一直是认为最难写的几篇当中之一,因为这个题目本身就是矛盾的,而且如果不是学过一点关于法律的东西的人,很难把问题谈得很深入.
其实举的例子我觉得不错,让人耳目一新,只是在表述上应该再推敲一下,让它更好的为你的论点服务.因为你的例子看上去就是在陈述事实,结论型的语言不是太精辟.
然后就是造句方面,呵呵,看来你也是个喜欢写长句的家伙.这跟我刚开始一样.不过,我现在觉得长短结合才是上策,为写长句而写长句,其实是不可取的.