issue3,限时第一篇结果超过了5分钟(拼写，语法错误以改)

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"It is more important to allocate money for immediate, existing social problems than to spend it on long-term research that might help future generations."

The speaker asserts that we should invest more funds on current social issues rather than on future concerns. Observing from an ex parte angle, I agree that allocating more money for existing social problems can be beneficial and most notably in short time, but after delving into a more profound layer and taking more factors in account, the detrimental defects of this policy apparently outweigh its advantages.

Admittedly, devoting money on current social matters is of crucial importance and is an essential strategy of the government. In point of fact, this is the fundamental policy upon which the economy and community can remain stable and keep developing. Imaging, without invest on crime control and juridical system establishment, the security of the properties of both community and citizens cannot be guaranteed. The end result is that people are worried about their life and procession’s safety all the time and thus cannot concentrate on their work. Similarly, without appropriating adequate money for public communication, the efficient transportation through which people commute to work and companies exchange their commodities is impeded. This is like the artery of a human body is jammed, therefore the health of that person is compromised.

However, these advantages do not suggest that to expend money on existing social problems is more important than to allocate it on issues of future interest. Emphasizing only on short-term problems is not applicable at all and could even lead to a jeopardous consequence. For concrete and persuasive evidence one need to look no further than our society and our environment. We can find specific topics about the illegal emission of industry waste or the public contamination, which are the typical symptoms of short-term policies of our time, on almost every synthesized newspaper, magazine or website. Countless square miles of fertile fields have become deserts; Hundreds acres of woods have been deforested everyday; perhaps even several species have been extinguished during the time I am writing this passage, etc.

Comparatively to investigate money on future issues is a long-term strategy that unfortunately has been ignored universally in many regions of our planet. Actually the contradiction of investing on immediate problems and on future matters is analogical to that of the balance development of the military and the economy of a country. In other words, these two seemingly opposite issues are mutually promoting as well as mutually circumscribing. any Overemphasis on either side will counterproductively compromise the whole equaqoised system. That is to say, if we fail to care enough about out tomorrow, then the tomorrow won't care about us too. Therefore, at the future we will not have sufficient funds to allocate on social matters or long-term researches, and so forth as a result we will find our-selves at the mercy of a vicious circle.

In sum, appropriating funds on current social problem and investing on researches that aimed to achieve a long-term goal are both important and indispensable issues that cannot be ignored. The crux of the controversy of these two matters is that to find a balance point at which the current resources can be optimally arranged and so that the society can keep a reasonable and stable pace of development. Finally let me end here with an old saying: Giving someone a fish is not comparable to teaching him how to fish.

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"It is more important to allocate money for immediate, existing social problems than to spend it on long-term research that might help future generations."

The speaker asserts that we should invest more funds on current social issues rather than on future concerns. Observing from an ex parte angle, I agree that allocating more money for existing social problems can be beneficial and most notably in short time, but after delving into a more profound layer and taking more factors in account, the detrimental defects of this policy apparently outweigh its advantages.你的结构很清晰,呵呵,语法错误已改,看上去真的很爽!

Admittedly, devoting money on current social matters is of crucial importance and is an essential strategy of the government. In point of fact, this is the fundamental policy upon which the economy and community can remain stable and keep developing. Imaging, without invest on crime control and juridical system establishment, the security of the properties of both community and citizens cannot be guaranteed. The end result is that people are worried about their life and procession’s safety all the time and thus cannot concentrate on their work. Similarly, without appropriating adequate money for public communication, the efficient transportation through which people commute to work and companies exchange their commodities is impeded. This is like the artery of a human body is jammed, therefore the health of that person is compromised.论证的很精彩!用词结构也很不错

However, these advantages do not suggest that to expend money on existing social problems is more important than to allocate it on issues of future interest. Emphasizing only on short-term problems is not applicable at all and could even lead to a jeopardous consequence. For concrete and persuasive evidence one need to look no further than our society and our environment. We can find specific topics about the illegal emission of industry waste or the public contamination, which are the typical symptoms of short-term policies of our time, on almost every synthesized newspaper, magazine or website. Countless square miles of fertile fields have become deserts; Hundreds acres of woods have been deforested everyday; perhaps even several species have been extinguished during the time I am writing this passage, etc. 这一段语言结构都满清楚,但是论证得不到点子上,环境污染这个例子是鼠目寸光的结果吗?你罗列了不少的现象,但没论证出

Comparatively to investigate money on future issues is a long-term strategy that unfortunately has been ignored universally in many regions of our planet. Actually the contradiction of investing on immediate problems and on future matters is analogical to that of the balance development of the military and the economy of a country. In other words, these two seemingly opposite issues are mutually promoting as well as mutually circumscribing. any Overemphasis on either side will counterproductively compromise the whole equaqoised system. That is to say, if we fail to care enough about out tomorrow, then the tomorrow won't care about us too. Therefore, at the future we will not have sufficient funds to allocate on social matters or long-term researches, and so forth as a result we will find our-selves at the mercy of a vicious circle.

In sum, appropriating funds on current social problem and investing on researches that aimed to achieve a long-term goal are both important and indispensable issues that cannot be ignored. The crux of the controversy of these two matters is that to find a balance point at which the current resources can be optimally arranged and so that the society can keep a reasonable and stable pace of development. Finally let me end here with an old saying: Giving someone a fish is not comparable to teaching him how to fish.  
总的来说,写的不错!再接再厉哦
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