issue144 超了点时间，艺术啊艺术，5555

雪夭UID: 142334

144"It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value."

The speaker asserts that human beings benefit more from artist for lasting value of something rather than critic. I concede that masterpieces of artist really reveal the hidden society and enrich human life, however, it is necessary to realize the significant role of critic in the field of art; moreover the cooperation of artist and critic might give society real cultural value.

Obviously, artists create a brilliant society which is full of strength, spirit and energy; on the contrary, they also reveal a hidden community with desire and resistance. By appreciating those masterpieces, people understand the history, the true face of society, and the emotion of artists what can enrich human life. For example, films-"The Shawshank Redemption" and "Forest Gump" -help audiences learn the value of hope, persistent and courage-all of these are basic abilities of survival. In addition, in the life of Michelangelo, he created various works, such architectures, sculptures and painters and all of those expressed citizens' desire of peace and democracy by which replay the history of past time and make influence on human mind perpetually. Therefore, those merits of art have substantial evidence to demonstrate the lasting value of artists.

However, when people pay attention to the importance of artists, it is also crucial to confirm the status of critics for their valuable criterion and guide of appreciation, otherwise, in some cases, works might do harm to society and even fail to be accepted by people. On the one hand, some artists only pursue their own interests so that some works might full of harmful thoughts, such as violence, drug and sex. To avoid of such potential influence, critics have the responsibility to establish criterion in order to limit the content and style of art. On the other hand, art is a abstract field so that without critics' guide of appreciation, ordinary people might feel confused in front of works, not to mention understand the hidden meaning. Although critics are not artists themselves, they have so profound knowledge of arts that they can teach people how to appreciate and how to analyze works. In the absence of critics, works of artists would fail to spread, let alone the lasting value.

Considering the function of critics is essential as well as artists, the effective way of propagating culture is to coordinate their impact rather than emphasize on single one. Critics play as a bridge between artists and audience so that they must do two things: first, provide some feedback about merits and defect of works to artists, of course they also must limit unsuitable works; second, they should help people to understand the value and meaning of arts, or those famous works are only trash in the eye of laymen. Additionally, to better satisfy society and improve themselves, artists should absorb criticism actively and try their best to infuse creative ideas and hidden phenomena into their opuses. By making balance of the two parts, value of art can be spread continuously and effectively.

Understandably, critics are teachers and artists are books. A teacher chooses valuable books and help people learn information from them; books convey the history, culture and ideas to human beings. Without either of them, the real value of art would never be preserved or propagated.

雪夭UID: 142334

可能是我说的时候没表达好something of lasting value
我想说的是艺术家的something of lasting value是反映社会背景啊，品德，优点对后人的影响
而评论家是给艺术一个标准，引导人们去了解艺术，教授欣赏能力的价值
可能写的急，说的就散
很感谢你的意见，中肯
艺术就是恶心，本来不打算写的，考试时候遇见就选另一个，但想想还是有个稍微的准备比较好

papajohnsUID: 127722

我觉得总体说来不错.
提点意见:既然第2个body已经讲清楚了评论家的作用,第3段应该结合艺术家和评论家来谈他们之间的合作如何带来lasting value.
感觉俩段有点重复.
结尾段的比喻很不错.

雪夭UID: 142334

的确，我想想换个角度写critic的作用
谢谢

apolloxpUID: 156355

不错，尤其是结尾，我觉得。
是限时的吗？语言也不错

雪夭UID: 142334

超了2，3 分钟，错字太多了
闷

银杏UID: 134344

我觉得你的文章通篇表达的是你关于artist 和critic的观点，而不是你严密联系这道题目的论证。
我觉得这篇文章应该重点说明，什么是 lasting value,   谁带来了lasting value, artist or cirtic and how come?
最后一段很好。耳目一新！
我想你也许看点有关crtic和aritist的资料会好一些吧。
拙见

雪夭UID: 142334

象zmzhe1648说，我点出了lasting value，在各个段里面，只是说的比较分散而已
body 1是说给人性格上的影响
body2是对人欣赏，思维上的影响
只是我笔画用的不多而已，但是没有忽视这个重点词

银杏UID: 134344

是啊，我的意思是你的文章中是论述了critic 的重要性，这是你对critic  的看法。

但是critic 和artist 的关系呢？ 两者可能都给个人和社会带来了影响。可是为什么你不赞同，是artist而不是critic 给社会带来了lasting value呢。

雪夭UID: 142334

我不知道是你没看明白还是我写的不好
文章的结构是明显的“骑墙”啊
两者都肯定，缺少任何一个都没办法lasting

雪夭UID: 142334

body1 artist
body2 critics
body3 coordinate
总结就更明白两者的关系了

银杏UID: 134344

你想论证骑墙当然可以，这些句子都是从人家的论文里摘出来的，你联系一下语境，作者可能是怎样写这篇文章的。
"It is the artist, not the critic"
我总觉得这种句式怎么也不能说是骑墙吧。

cccppp0219UID: 155414

In the absence of critics, works of artists would fail to spread, let alone the lasting value.
第三段对fail to spread支持不足，另外“let alone ”我觉得不太合适。