【独立写作】 primbo的作业贴

primboUID: 3479283

2月25日独立写作
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1gdBnK4N





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2月15日 综合写作［TPO21］
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1dDABKbf
2月15日 独立写作
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1o6FJcDk
2月14日 独立写作
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1o6HKW7S
2月13日 独立写作
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1kT4ZKeN
2月12日 TPO 22 综合写作
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1c0chN1Y

woodpecker017UID: 3455722

好吧，作业区找到你啦~等等~

woodpecker017UID: 3455722

我发现我看错了···重写···

woodpecker017UID: 3455722

改完啦！说的比较直接，不要玻璃心~

primboUID: 3479283

woodpecker017 发表于 2014-2-13 11:35
改完啦！说的比较直接，不要玻璃心~

cellulose我根据听力查字典了。另外在这里看到过一篇帖子说字数是可以超的。

https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1389824-1-1.html

误区一：字数超了扣分。
建议：我特别查阅了最新版的OG，里面关于字数的描述如下：Suggested length is between 150 and 225 words. You will not be penalized if you write more, so long as what you write answers the question.也就是说只要你是在回答问题，多写是不会扣分的。而什么叫做回答问题呢？是不是整合听力和阅读材料呢？
有趣的是，紧接着我又看到了这样一条
CAUTION: You will receive a score of zero if all you do is copy words from the reading passage. You will receive a score of 1 if you write ONLY about the reading passage. To respond successfully, you must do your best to write about the ways the points in the lecture are related to specific points in the reading.
我可以理解成ETS很不待见抄袭阅读材料么？至少在how the task is phrased这部分ETS要求的只有听力材料，以及听力材料与阅读材料的关系这两点。我相信，既然没有要求，既然caution里面有关于只侧重阅读材料的严重后果，回答问题就是紧抓听力材料，加以逻辑性的复述，并明确指出与阅读材料的关系。

primboUID: 3479283

woodpecker017 发表于 2014-2-13 11:35
改完啦！说的比较直接，不要玻璃心~

cellulose我根据听力查字典了。另外在这里看到过一篇帖子说字数是可以超的。

https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1389824-1-1.html

误区一：字数超了扣分。
建议：我特别查阅了最新版的OG，里面关于字数的描述如下：Suggested length is between 150 and 225 words. You will not be penalized if you write more, so long as what you write answers the question.也就是说只要你是在回答问题，多写是不会扣分的。而什么叫做回答问题呢？是不是整合听力和阅读材料呢？
有趣的是，紧接着我又看到了这样一条
CAUTION: You will receive a score of zero if all you do is copy words from the reading passage. You will receive a score of 1 if you write ONLY about the reading passage. To respond successfully, you must do your best to write about the ways the points in the lecture are related to specific points in the reading.
我可以理解成ETS很不待见抄袭阅读材料么？至少在how the task is phrased这部分ETS要求的只有听力材料，以及听力材料与阅读材料的关系这两点。我相信，既然没有要求，既然caution里面有关于只侧重阅读材料的严重后果，回答问题就是紧抓听力材料，加以逻辑性的复述，并明确指出与阅读材料的关系。

woodpecker017UID: 3455722

primbo 发表于 2014-2-13 12:24
cellulose我根据听力查字典了。另外在这里看到过一篇帖子说字数是可以超的。

https://bbs.gter.net/thr ...

哦~谢谢，不过建议写150 255其实还是挺有道理的，毕竟最后写的时间大概只有20多分钟，rater也不想看一大段没有太多用处的辅助句子，这一个部分应该是检验听力整合能力嘛，所以把听到的都写了，和阅读的关系，应该够了，其他的就有点点冗杂啦，不过有时间写多几句漂亮句子总是好的~

primboUID: 3479283

woodpecker017 发表于 2014-2-13 20:29
哦~谢谢，不过建议写150 255其实还是挺有道理的，毕竟最后写的时间大概只有20多分钟，rater也不想看一大段 ...

嗯，老手了。期待看到你的独立作文。刚把2月13号的独立作文写了，看着就想吐。

woodpecker017UID: 3455722

primbo 发表于 2014-2-13 22:15
嗯，老手了。期待看到你的独立作文。刚把2月13号的独立作文写了，看着就想吐。

写完了~~~有没有控制好时间TT

woodpecker017UID: 3455722

额，独立作文致命一个问题，偏题了···the most important problems today,不是problems today啊，开始我也写了好多，然后发现，不对，题目是most important啊TT

woodpecker017UID: 3455722

偏题了···上一段回复说啦~
下面只针对problems solved in future改了：
As is known to all, technology has greatly（整一个看起来高级点的词，significantly~） improved our life during the past 200 years（具体时间是不是有点怪？hundreds of years会不会顺一点？）. Thanks to the telephone and Internet, Instant Communication between people from different countries becomes possible. Most of the problems in medical field have been overcome. However, there are still a lot of problems need to be solved, which may cost longer than lifetime.

      In the first place, compared to the huge undetached （detected吧？）domain on the earth, our knowledge about the world is still limited. On the way to the recognition of puzzling area, it is definitely that we will meet hundred of questions. One question is solved, one more matter surface（似乎没有动词，appear可能比surface好）. Such a matter settled, another stands in front of you.（这两句···不用这么凑字数的） It needs a long period to solve this series of problems, （这句有点和开头句重复了）with great patient and intelligence. Take earthquake for instance. This phenomenon of crust movement is always there（语法似乎不对，漏了副词连词？加一个since） the moment earth formed. Thousands of scientists from varies countries devote all their life in this area, already explaining （会不会have already explained 好点，一般already是用在完成时）the cause of this phenomenon, how it exposed, where does this most likely happened. What a pity（有点突兀，Unfortunately什么的好像自然点）, still couldn’t accurately forecast earthquake. So conclusion can be drawn that people still have a long way to recognize（solve?） the problem we met.
实例很好~
      Moreover, a lot of difficult problems exist in the fields most people don’t like to do. Nowadays, people focus on Finance, Electrical Engineering and Architecture, which are much easier to make money and much more interesting. Compared with the subject above, Geography and Physic just thought to be boring and unpromising. According to some survey, the salary of a investment analyst is triples（额···似乎虽然确实triple有形容词的意思，但很少见这么用的，就好像M double higher than N???） higher than a physic professor. (吐槽一下，万一来了个physic major改卷员，恩···)This kind of state inevitably leading to a serious situation: a lot of important problem is unlikely to be handled in the near future.
切入点挺好~
      Generally speaking, considering the long period of trouble recognition（recognition似乎只有承认，认识的意思，问题认知？似乎题目问的是解决问题，文中这两者之间没有明确建立联系，第一个论点应该是还有很多问题有待发现解决，不应该陈述为问题认知吧？）, and realizing that fewer people willing to devote their time on the field difficult problem exist, there is still a long time to solve the most important problems in today's world.
例子都挺好的，切入点很细致，然后说完例子有一句点题，构思不错~

woodpecker017UID: 3455722

primbo 发表于 2014-2-13 12:24
cellulose我根据听力查字典了。另外在这里看到过一篇帖子说字数是可以超的。

https://bbs.gter.net/thr ...

对了···是不是有个问题，昨天同组另一个盆友，恩，木有帮我们改作文？不过integral算啦~

copyzero2UID: 3433211

primbo 发表于 2014-2-13 12:24
cellulose我根据听力查字典了。另外在这里看到过一篇帖子说字数是可以超的。

https://bbs.gter.net/thr ...

同学，欢迎参加写作小组，不过以后还是直接word就好~~不要把打断英语贴主楼，可能会被吞掉的~~
初级应该够直接上传word了，这个不像口语小组，你直接上传就可以啦~~加油哦~~

copyzero2UID: 3433211

看了看你的综合，稍微提了一点意见~~你看一下有问题再讨论~~

primboUID: 3479283

woodpecker017 发表于 2014-2-14 11:59
对了···是不是有个问题，昨天同组另一个盆友，恩，木有帮我们改作文？不过integral算啦~

是这样的。