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银杏UID: 134344

12 The statement of "People's attitudes are determined more by their immediate situation or surroundings than by any internal characteristic." Exactly explained how altitudes are determined.

Admittedly, people’s altitudes are determined by both of their immediate situation and their internal characteristic. A person under different conditions may have completely contradicted altitudes. A young single man may oppose appropriating more money for a grammar school in his community, thinking that this will only add his tax burden; However, if he had a little daughter who studies at that school, he may support the appropriation. Furthermore (In addition), people don’t make decisions only by their immediate surroundings. Their intrinsic characteristic also is a very important determinant. A case in point, a woman with a strong sense of sympathy for homeless people, may propose to set up a home for these destitute people. This example illustrates that people’s altitudes are decided not only by people’s surrounding, but also by people’s intrinsic characteristic, such as the worldview, dispositions and tempers.  Simply put, both people’s immediate surrounding and their internal characteristic determine people’s altitudes.

However, (我觉得however这个词用得比较生硬，用什么更好呢？)which factor affect people’s altitude more ？ I think， mostly, immediate surrounding is more important in determining people’s altitudes. That’s because when thinking of an issue, a social problem and a phenomena, a person’s attitude is greatly affected by her positions in the society. （这里用什么连词好）A person’s positions vary with circumstances around her， therefore her attitude may diverge even to the same issue. Here is a simple example. A car worker, who has just lost his job, may blame his unemployment on cars manufactured in foreign countries. So he may object international trade. Nevertheless, when he buys a pair of shoes, he may find that the shoes produced in other countries are as good as those made domestically, moreover, they are much cheaper. Then buying much cheaper and better product as a consumer, the car worker may not have a hatred for international trade. This example illustrates that people’s altitudes may be opposite in different circumstances. Every one may have such experience that when we decide whether to support or disapprove a policy, our altitudes are primarily depended on what we may potentially get and potentially lose from the policy. A tax reducing plan may be welcome among the middle class people, but may be objected by the people who live on the allowance from government. From the analysis above, it can be concluded that people’s attitudes is influenced more by immediate surroundings than by people’s internal characteristics.

Moreover, myriads of immediate situations affect the development of a person’s intrinsic quality, such as personal experience, education background even(除了even还能用什么) the changes of one’s country. Most of us are familiar with such stories that a person diverts his/her way of living due to an experience of great importance to him or her self. In long term, situations have an effect on people’s internal characteristics. All in all, we have good reason to conclude that It is immediate situations that determine more greatly, people’s attitudes, which are also affected by people’s nature.

我总是不知道应该用什么样的连词

imongUID: 140258

Where is the topic?

建议不要点名叫斑竹。我会自己察看发帖历史的。
我中午吃完饭回来看看。

imongUID: 140258

12"People's attitudes are determined more by their immediate situation or surroundings than by any internal characteristic."

The statement of "People's attitudes are determined more by their immediate situation or surroundings than by any internal characteristic." Exactly explained how altitudes are determined. 开头可不是这样restate的。

Admittedly, people’s altitudes are determined（恐怕在这里determine可以换成更好的词） by both of their immediate situation and their internal characteristic. A person under different conditions may have completely contradicted（？） altitudes. A young single man may oppose appropriating more money for a grammar school in his community, thinking that this will only add his tax burden（后半句？）; However, if he had a little daughter who studies at that school, he may support the appropriation. Furthermore (In addition), people don’t make decisions only by their immediate surroundings.（FT，don't make ... only by 未免太过chinglish了吧） Their intrinsic characteristic also is（is also） a very important determinant.（表达awkward） A case in point, a woman with a strong sense of sympathy for homeless people, may propose to set up a home for these destitute people. This example（光这一个恐怕不够吧，是不是写两个人在相同环境决定不同比较好？） illustrates that people’s altitudes are decided not only by people’s surrounding, but also by people’s intrinsic characteristic, such as the worldview, dispositions and tempers. Simply put, both people’s immediate surrounding and their internal characteristic determine people’s altitudes.

However, (我觉得however这个词用得比较生硬，用什么更好呢？)which factor affect people’s altitude more ？（这个TS倒不如用陈述句直接写，用while ... on considering..之类的都能连起来） I think， mostly（这是干什么用的？）, immediate surrounding is more important in determining people’s altitudes. That’s because when thinking of an issue, a social problem and a phenomena（晕倒，单复数！）, a person’s attitude is greatly affected by her positions in the society. （这里用什么连词好）A person’s positions vary with circumstances around her， therefore her attitude may diverge even to the same issue.（上面几句话都觉得不清不楚） Here is a simple example. A car worker, who has just lost his job, may blame his unemployment on cars manufactured in foreign countries. So he may object international trade. Nevertheless, when he buys a pair of shoes, he may find that the shoes produced in other countries are as good as those made domestically, moreover, they are much cheaper. Then buying much cheaper and better product as a consumer, the car worker may not have a hatred for international trade. This example illustrates that people’s altitudes may be opposite in different circumstances. 例子不错 Every one may have such experience that when we decide whether to support or disapprove a policy, our altitudes are primarily depended on what we may potentially get and potentially lose from the policy. A tax reducing plan may be welcome among the middle class people, but may be objected by the people who live on the allowance from government. From the analysis above, it can be concluded that people’s attitudes is influenced more by immediate surroundings than by people’s internal characteristics.除了中间一个例子不错，段落的其他部分我觉得都很诡辩。你只是说明了people's attitude are influenced by the immediate situations. 但是却基本没有涉及people's INTRINSIC CHARACTERISTICS. （中间那个例子除外）。Intrinsic characteristics的位置一定要体现出来，两者的比较要体现出来。

Moreover, myriads of immediate situations affect the development of a person’s intrinsic quality, such as personal experience, education background even(除了even还能用什么) 如果不一定非要递进的话可以用as well as的 the changes of one’s country. Most of us are familiar with such stories that a person diverts his/her way of living due to an experience of great importance to him or her self. In long term, situations have an effect on people’s internal characteristics. All in all, we have good reason to conclude that It is immediate situations that determine more greatly, people’s attitudes, which are also affected by people’s nature.
这一段涉及到的是一个更大的话题，你等于提出了characteristics are fundamentally determined by immediate situations. 姑且不论这个话题有多混乱（一个变量决定了一个常量，而且这个常量要随变量而变，那到底这个常量是不是常量？），在结尾段提出这个idea你自己能不能说清楚就是问好，更不用提把握住。这一点很失策。而且这个论点的话，还是自己好好想想吧，没那么简单的。

paisleyUID: 64183

希望银杏看到，掉下去了

银杏UID: 134344

看了，谢谢你了。每天都有太多人发帖子了。找自己的事在比较困难，又没有功能，可以一下子搜索出某个人发的所有帖子啊。
多谢imong  和paisley. 你们的意见都很中肯。

imongUID: 140258

用论坛搜索功能就可以
或者点击自己发过的帖子，下面有一个“搜索”按钮。
或者查看自己个人资料（点击自己的id？这个没试过）然后可以找到“搜索该会员的全部帖子”

galaxysongUID: 152834

imong为什么又不用我的变色工具了呢？不好用吗？

ArmArmUID: 159736

哪儿可以找到变色工具？
我每次都Ctrl + v，光标定位，累死了

genie05UID: 30358

galaxysong这个是老帖子了，呵呵。看看时间哦。

ArmArm，在文摘区里去看看，可以得到你要的东西。