2014年4月学习小组"雅思写作互改小组"打卡帖

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Masterpiece00 发表于 2014-4-19 17:04

check it.

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我在 2014-04-20 15:40完成打卡，是本组当天第1个打卡的组员,获得奖励 寄托币 1

{:1_18:} speed up~~!
4.20占座。

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235vanburen 发表于 2014-4-19 05:44
刚刚改了一个文章。。。怎么发上来呢？新人比较笨。。。

请认真看规则贴

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喵呜~ 发表于 2014-4-18 23:35
控制写作时间，  或者在纸上写  在纸上写的速度会慢的多  当然如果不想再纸上写  那在电脑上写的时间必须 ...

谢版大！！
我真是要好好卡时间了。。哭瞎啊。。

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不好意思，这个是刚才TASK2文章的WORD版，欢迎大家来拍砖。谢谢先！

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task2:Students from rural areas often find it difficult to access university education. Some people think that universities should make it easier for them to access higher education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
大约35分钟写完。


The opportunity of receiving higher education should be equal to both city and rural children. It sounds quite reasonable and no one can deny it, but the reality is cruel that children who grow up in cities are getting much higher possibility than rural kids to enter in good universities and graduate with advanced degrees later on. So I have to ask why and how we can help those rural kids to receive the same educational benefits just like their peers living in the cities. My point of view is very straightforward: educational institutes have the responsibility to make it easier for children living in suburban and rural areas to enter in colleges. Here are my reasons.


It is beneficial to the whole society that everyone has the opportunity and hope to succeed, even though you may be born in poverty. Think about a child who was born in the severe poverty, and both parents were never admitted into college. Even worse, people around him/her always say that his/her life will never be changed and will be poor forever, just like his/her parents. It is natural that the child will feel powerless, angry and hopeless. Being hopeless is so horrible that anyone could make a big wrong choice under such extreme situation. In five or ten years, there could be another murderer or drug dealer appears in your community, and you start wondering why? The reason is very simple because they lost their hope to succeed or just survive many years ago when we, as the part of society, kept ignoring their terrible life and education condition. It is critical to everyone in the society to understand that we all are connected in some way. If some people are hungry, needy or treated unfairly, we have the responsibility to help them, because it is actually helping ourselves somehow. Different from urban families, poor families in the rural areas often lack money to pay the expensive university tuition. There are many ways we could help them, such as tuition waiver and creating on-campus part-time jobs.


Another reason for making it easier for rural kids is because higher education should be a public benefits for all the citizens. If getting a college education is just a privilege for elites, it will be a huge humiliation for our country. In the advanced and rich countries in the world, the proportion of people who hold higher education is often much higher than the proportion in those comparatively less-advanced countries. Higher education is not only a benefit, but also means confident and ability to survive in the bad economic situation. If depression happens again, skilled and educated people can switch their career paths and start learning some new skills and knowledge, such as new coding skills and new foreign language, so that even if they lost their jobs temporarily, they are able to find another positions in the market. Less educated people are not so lucky, since they usually don't have the ability to learn new things by themselves. An important measure on whether it is a good country is fairness, and higher education is the key factor of societal fairness. To make the country better, I strongly suggest that we should give more access to the comparatively poor rural children.

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似乎是13年的旧帖子。。。好囧

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我在 2014-04-19 05:44完成打卡，是本组当天第1个打卡的组员,获得奖励 寄托币 1

刚刚改了一个文章。。。怎么发上来呢？新人比较笨。。。

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来报道。加入小组！

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baby_grape 发表于 2014-4-18 10:19
今日作文easier access to的理解...好神奇。

越写越长了。。到底哪里删掉点比较好？

控制写作时间，  或者在纸上写  在纸上写的速度会慢的多  当然如果不想再纸上写  那在电脑上写的时间必须减少（原本是40min  现在只能写30min 这样

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我在 2014-04-18 11:12完成打卡，是本组当天第2个打卡的组员,获得奖励 寄托币 1

A not bad day!

哎呀，我只占座忘了把我的作文上传了，版本能安排找个人帮我review吗，我也可以帮助review别人的。

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我在 2014-04-18 10:19完成打卡，是本组当天第1个打卡的组员,获得奖励 寄托币 1

今日作文easier access to的理解...好神奇。

越写越长了。。到底哪里删掉点比较好？

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Masterpiece00 发表于 2014-4-17 21:50
thank you~我对这次的图表题里单复数的表达很不清楚，比如Railways account for。。。还是accounts for?还 ...

我也觉得挺郁闷的，这里都算是说的整体。。但是谓语单复数确实不好定。。
所以我尽量在回避，反正也怪怪的。。

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baby_grape 发表于 2014-4-17 21:06
check it.

thank you~我对这次的图表题里单复数的表达很不清楚，比如Railways account for。。。还是accounts for?还有transport应该是不可数名词吧？但是它表示复数是后面应该用are？？？我真的晕晕的。