issue55 教育：高分 Vs 真正能力培养

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Issue55  教育：高分 Vs 真正能力培养
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作者：dezhi     共用时间：45分2秒     502 words
从2004年2月11日15时45分到2004年2月11日16时30分
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Competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning at all levels of education.
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The speaker asserts that competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning at all levels of education. As far as I am concerned, I partly agree with this statement, for competition is inevitable to some extent.

I concede that competition forces students to focus their attention on their lessons to get higher score, and keep them from other activities on the campus and the news from all over the world, which greatly undermine their creativity and originality. More and more students have access to  universities, which added to the severity of the competition today. Although there are different kinds of activities suitable on the campus for college students and the news is more accessible through internet, many students choose to study in the classroom all day rather than to attend these lively activities or to search for certain kinds of news. Just look around. If everyone around you are competing for a higher score, what will you feel if you are not with them but to participate in these "useless" activities?

Although competition has negative effects under some cases, competition for high grades contributes much to the accumulation and consolidation of the knowledge of the students. No other way can serve equally as competition to stimulate students to work harder and harder, which naturally lead to mastery of more knowledge. As you know, almost everyone has a instinct to be free,  or to be lazy. If there is nothing to encourage us to work hard, hardly anyone can concentrate on the studying and learn more during just a short time at school. Competition also help a student to review his or her lessons before an exam, which may help him or her to remember the facts or spirits of the lessons during the rest of life.

Furthermore, score is the only effective way nowadays to check a student's performance. Hardly any means else can achieve the same purpose. Exams are equal for anyone. Who learns harder gets harder grades, which is cherished by the society and the students. Because of its standalization, it is safe to imagine a student's performance and to praise or punish him or her according to his or her score. Though not always the correct way, it is just the fact under most circumstances. Once a student went to work one day, many good students who had study hard at school will find it easier to get more chances and  bettered confronted with the difficulties ahead, as they had well accumulated the indispensible knowledge at school through the competition for high grades.

In summary, competition for high grades is the only effective way to help students review his or her lessons, and to detemine his or her performance. If the negative effects of the competition can be limited through encouraging students to attend more activities and to pay attention to the great events around them and all over the world, competition itself surely does not seriously conflict with the qualities of learning, but to increase it.

没有事先打提纲的情况下开始写的，
感觉又是光在那里翻来覆去的干干巴巴的论证了，
也没有想到什么好的例子来论证。
为什么觉得自己提高得很慢哪？

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fishergirlUID: 152325

Issue55 教育：高分 Vs 真正能力培养
Competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning at all levels of education.

The speaker asserts that competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning at all levels of education. As far as I am concerned, I partly agree with 同意观点是用with吗？好像是agree with sb. this statement, for competition is inevitable to some extent.

I concede that competition forces students to focus their attention on their lessons to get higher score, and keep them from other activities on the campus and the news from all over the world, which greatly undermine their creativity and originality. More and more students have access to universities, which added to the severity of the competition today. Although there are different kinds of activities suitable on the campus for college students and the news is more accessible through internet, many students choose to study in the classroom all day rather than to attend these lively activities or to search for certain kinds of news. Just look around. If everyone around you are is competing for a higher score, what will you feel if you are not with them but to participate in these "useless" activities? 两个if在一句中出现，有些别扭
竞争使得学生牺牲了大量课外活动的时间来换取高分。

Although competition has negative effects under some cases, competition for high grades contributes much to the accumulation and consolidation of the knowledge of the students. No other way can serve equally as competition to stimulate students to work harder and harder, which naturally lead leads to mastery of more knowledge. As you know, almost everyone has a an instinct to be free, or to be lazy. If there is nothing to encourage us to work hard, hardly anyone can concentrate on the studying and learn more during just a short time at school. Competition also help compels a student to review his or her lessons before an exam, which may help him or her to remember the facts or spirits of the lessons during the rest of life.
竞争可以使学生主动的学习

Furthermore, score is the only effective way nowadays to check a student's performance only way?太过绝对吧. Hardly any means else can achieve the same purpose. Exams are equal for anyone. Who learns harder gets harder higher? grades, which is cherished by the society and the students. Because of its standalization, it is safe to imagine a student's performance and to praise or punish him or her according to his or her score. Though not always the correct way, it is just the fact under most circumstances. Once a student went to work one day, many good students who had study hard at school will find it easier to get more chances and bettered confronted with the difficulties ahead, as they had well accumulated the indispensible knowledge at school through the competition for high grades.
分数是个唯一的标准来衡量学生的表现

In summary, competition for high grades is the only effective way to help students review his or her lessons, and to detemine his or her performance. If the negative effects of the competition can be limited through encouraging students to attend more activities and to pay attention to the great events around them and all over the world, competition itself surely does not seriously conflict with the qualities of learning, but to increase it.

呵呵，限时能够写成这样还不错了，因为我们还有时间来继续提高。
不过我觉得你的论证比较浅，而且首尾有点矛盾，开头是部分同意，结尾时好像完全认同了。三个body之间的逻辑关系也不太清楚。其实，如果按照批驳这一现象的思路来写，会好写一些。

观点：追求高分严重的限制了教育各阶段的学习质量，这是现在很普遍的，也是很严重的一个现象。这个现象的存在有其合理性，但是其危害也不容忽视。
1．分数在一定程度上反映了学习和教学的质量，高分能够鼓励学生学习的积极性，为其将来走入社会奠定良好的知识基础。
2．但让人担心的是，现在教学双方对于分数的过分追求带来了很多负面效应。高分低能，应试教育，考试作弊等等。
3．教育的目的是传道、授业，各个阶段都不应该忘记这一宗旨。从小就应该交给学生一些不依分数来评价的知识、技能。作为一个自然人，他们要有生存技能；作为社会人，他们要建立与社会相容的人生观，价值观。这些都不是分数能反映的。所以应该可观点看待分数。
另外，还可以发掘产生这种现象的原因。

一点胡言乱语，仅供参考。

dezhiUID: 156141

感谢fishergirl，帮我改的这么仔细，bow！
1、I partly agree with this statement---------“同意观点是用with吗？好像是agree with sb. ”
   确实有agree with sb，但据我所知，也有agree with this opinion/suggestion/statement/what you said，表示同意某种说法
2、If everyone around you are is competing for a higher score, what will you feel if you are not with them but to participate in these "useless" activities? 两个if在一句中出现，有些别扭
这样如何：With everyone around you competing for a higher score, what will you feel if you are not learning like them but to participate in these "useless" activities?
3、score is the only effective way nowadays to check a student's performance -----only way?太过绝对吧.
  是啊，改成这样吧：score is one of the most effective ways nowadays to check a student's performance.
4、其他修改意见都很对，这么多小错误，汗~~~~~
5、“结尾时好像完全认同了”-----其实结尾也没有完全同意，如下：
If the negative effects of the competition can be limited through encouraging students to attend more activities and to pay attention to the great events around them and all over the world, .....

dezhiUID: 156141

另外，你提供的思路也很好:)

fishergirlUID: 152325

最初由 dezhi 发布
[B]感谢fishergirl，帮我改的这么仔细，bow！
1、I partly agree with this statement---------“同意观点是用with吗？好像是agree with sb. ”
   确实有agree with sb，但..

以下省略...... [/B]

相互交流，我已经从你的文章中学到不少东西了呢 :)