[口语小组]叶子123作业贴（欢迎点评~走过路过表错过啊）

叶子123UID: 3404943

进来逛的筒子们，你们好~
请不要吝惜你们的笔墨，在本帖下面随意点评吧O(∩_∩)O
标橘色的日期是尚未批改的，改后我会恢复为黑色。
你们的意见和建议对我很重要，谢谢啦~

5.30题目
Task 1 Describe the most important day of your life. Explain why it is important to you. Please include reasons and examples to support your response.
Task 2 Some people prefer to do one job or project at one time. Others prefer to do several jobs at the same time. Which do you prefer and why?
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1qWoEH8g


5.29
Task 1 What do you think is the most important quality of a working environment: good leaders, good colleagues or flexible working time? Please use specific reasons and examples to support your response.
Task 2 Some people like to take a break or get a job during summer vacation. Others think it is better to take classes. Which do you prefer and why?
http://pan.baidu.com/s/17xQCQ

5.28
Task 1 Where is your favortie place to exercise outdoors? Please include specific examples and details in your explanation.
Task 2 When on a trip, some people like to keep a journal and take pictures, others just enjoy the journey without recording. Which do your prefer and why?
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1ntJS9qL

5.27题目
Task 1 Describe a person in your family whose personality is very different from yours.
Task 2 Some schools require students to bring their own computers to the classroom. Do you agree or disagree with this policy?
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1o6r0jnc

5.26题目
Task 1 Talk about one activity you will do in the near future. Explain why you want to do this activity.
Task 2 Some students take notes very often during class. Other students do not take notes or rarely take notes. Which do you think is better?
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1nt7Hprz


5.25题目
Task 1  What quality do you think is the most important for a university student? Self-motivation, hard-working, or intelligence?
Task 2  Some people prefer to be a leader in a group project, while others prefer to be a supporting member in a group project. Which do you prefer and why? Use examples and details in your explanation.
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1gd678bT


5.24题目
Task 1  Describe a historical event that you’re interested in most. Explain why you are interested in it and want to know more about it.  Include reasons and examples to support your response.
Task 2 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? What a person wears can show his or her personality.
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1i3BmQhR
task2 revised version on 5-28
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1gd45JRd

5.23题目
Task 1 Talk about two singers who are popular in your country. Explain why they are popular and
how they are different.
Task 2 ：When you take a trip, do you prefer to just look around, or do you prefer to take pictures
and keep a journal?
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1jGhy7jw
5-27新修改版O(∩_∩)O
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1kTLs6Ab


5.22题目
Task 1 If you are asked by your teacher to do community service, which of the following would you choose? Explain why. 1.helping children with their homework 2. teaching adults to use the computer 3. cleaning city park
Task 2 Do you prefer to live in an area that is noisy but close to shops or public transportation, or an area that is quiet but far away from shops and public transportation?
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1mgDi1zM


5.21题目
Task 1  Describe one way to improve the system of education in your country. Use specific details and examples to support your opinion.
Task 2 Some people like to collect old things such as newspapers. Others throw things away after they have used them. Which do you prefer and why?
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1eQHzaSU

5-20
Task 1  Describe a performer, an actor or a musician, etc. that you think is great. Please give specific reasons why you think he/she is a great performer.
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Task 2  When things at home such as furniture or electrical appliances are broken, some people prefer to have them repaired in a shop, while others prefer to fix them at home. Which do you prefer and why?
[tsound]8333[/tsound]

SYSU-MindyUID: 3438352

我改5.22滴哈。
其实不是来批改的，我只是来膜拜的，楼主是我听过这么多人里感觉最好的一个。
语音语调很赞，论证充分，表达得很自如灵活。
一点点小建议：
task1  knowledge的发音 ['nɑlɪdʒ]  楼主有点像['nəʊlɪdʒ]
task2楼主说是 live in an quiet environment吗？应该是in a quiet environment

叶子123UID: 3404943

SYSU-Mindy 发表于 2014-5-23 01:07
我改5.22滴哈。
其实不是来批改的，我只是来膜拜的，楼主是我听过这么多人里感觉最好的一个。
语音语调很 ...

额，我说的是live in an quiet environment~谢谢你听的这么仔细~O(∩_∩)O~

oliviagao74UID: 3502725

你好，我是新上任的版主，来点评你的523作业~
首先，语音语调很好！
task1的问题我想你应该也能听出来，周杰伦拍电影那个点说的太拖时间了，其实可以不用说的嘛~这样后面的difference就会有时间了对吧。因为这道题比较神奇，要说两个人，还要说两个方面，很容易不够说。建议这道题可以这样处理：把他们popular的原因合并在一起说，比如他们的歌都能打动人或者都很美啊这种，讲共性。然后difference的时候再分开说，这样节省了时间，也就有空来elaborate了！建议你再说一遍~
task2的前半部分讲得很赞！我觉得这个水平应该可以拿到26+了。但是第二点就不行了。其实你前面说的特别好，尤其actually那下子调侃一下还觉得很可爱。我觉得这样子你可以顺着这个思路往下说，我以前不照，结果发现怎么了，然后后来我照了，我就发现我不仅有东西可以回忆了，翻看照片的时候还能发现旅途中没发现的美，比如说曾经被我忽略的当地人民热情的笑脸，还有小溪旁被我忽略的一只小松鼠；所以我觉得，照片真好。这样处理的话，比你说plus要更好一点。可以试一下~
另外，看你作业贴没有前面点评的人呢？如果他们逾期未点评，赶紧通知我们，要记录在册的！

lszllcy535UID: 3485562

我评5.24的
task1 木有听出错。。。渣渣水平，例子我都不知道是什么东西。就是感觉35‘的plus说得有点突兀，一开始我还没反应过来，小小地建议楼主可以说轻一点。不过内容和结构都不能再赞！

task2 楼主好像没有说support sentence诶，直接就举例子了。是不是忘记说了？然后楼主用了两个例子，不过都没有反映出来穿着是怎么和性格联系在一起的，比如说爷爷的时候可以加一句很多不认识他的学生通过他的着装觉得他是一个很严肃的人，后面的lady gaga可能都没有时间展开。我觉得专注于一个例子并且联系主题45’的时间就差不多了，再加上support sentence就可以慢慢说上45‘了。我比较懒，如果考场上说我不熟悉的人我绝对会卡壳到连我自己都想掐我自己。。。楼主细节想得太多势必会影响时间。不过其他的都蛮好的~渣渣水平，只能改这些了。

若雨挂念太多UID: 3457916

5.23
首先真的抱歉点评晚了，不过看见版主大大帮你点评了23号的，我的罪恶感减轻了一点点，嘻嘻;P
不得不说，听楼主说话是一种享受，比某些播音员说的还好，敢问楼主是如何修炼的，我也好想学两招啊，求指点:lol
进入正题：
task1:
感动是touch one's heart,不用加 to 呢；鸡蛋里挑骨头的一点，有些地方停顿的时间稍稍有点长，“额”的地方稍微有点多
task2:我觉得说的很好了，水平有限，参考版主的吧:loveliness:
一起加油哦~

叶子123UID: 3404943

oliviagao74 发表于 2014-5-24 23:50
你好，我是新上任的版主，来点评你的523作业~
首先，语音语调很好！
task1的问题我想你应该也能听出来，周 ...

版主君~
不好意思，来晚了~
点评的句句在理啊，其实我考过托，但是口语每次都是卡在24，木有丝毫提升，我也很苦恼>_<希望没事来小页面转一转逛一逛，如果能留下评语，真的是最开心不过了~
根据你说的建议，我今天又录了一遍，地址是http://pan.baidu.com/s/1kTLs6Ab
前几天去考试了，一直没上，不好意思啊~
谢谢版主君~

ps.不知道是不是我电脑的问题，为什么每次别人给我留言的时候我都没有论坛提醒呢？都是我自己打开帖子的时候才惊喜的发现有新留言...

叶子123UID: 3404943

若雨挂念太多 发表于 2014-5-27 14:51
5.23
首先真的抱歉点评晚了，不过看见版主大大帮你点评了23号的，我的罪恶感减轻了一点点，嘻嘻
不得不 ...

嘻嘻，过奖了，谢谢点评啊~
我查了一下，确实呢~是touch one's heart.
我们一起加油！↖(^ω^)↗

叶子123UID: 3404943

lszllcy535 发表于 2014-5-25 00:06
我评5.24的
task1 木有听出错。。。渣渣水平，例子我都不知道是什么东西。就是感觉35‘的plus说得有点突兀 ...

首先，O(∩_∩)O谢谢~

关于task1， 那个event是林肯的一个演讲，就是提出“三民主义”的那个演讲~叫Gettysburg Address，很短，推荐~还有那个plus。。。我是比较容易激动哈，囧
关于task2，那个确实是，其实说的时候我就有点思路混乱，所以...我再说一遍吧= =有兴趣的话可以再鉴定一下，我会5.24的下面~THX!

lszllcy535UID: 3485562

叶子123 发表于 2014-5-28 08:51
首先，O(∩_∩)O谢谢~

关于task1， 那个event是林肯的一个演讲，就是提出“三民主义”的那个演讲~叫Ge ...

楼主，我的好像你没评…

左边右边UID: 3528756

学习了 记号

叶子123UID: 3404943

lszllcy535 发表于 2014-5-28 09:27
楼主，我的好像你没评…

我错了
那几天在考试，一直都没上网，刚刚才补上，请查收~

henimaUID: 3518852

5.28
T1 lz有点喜欢把两个动词并列起来说（9-15秒），但还是建议注意下句子的完整性，加个and弄成并列句好些。发音语调这些都挺好的，但是注意说/s/这个音的时候有些刺耳，建议离话筒远些什么的～
T2 7秒firstly后面那个because去掉会好些，因为不是个复合句。20秒那个应该是I吧，发得有点像啊。31秒应该是carrying哈，too heavy too burden得改改，是想说too heavy a burden吗？整体还是挺好的～

叶子123UID: 3404943

henima 发表于 2014-5-28 21:23
5.28
T1 lz有点喜欢把两个动词并列起来说（9-15秒），但还是建议注意下句子的完整性，加个and弄成并列句好 ...

我对着你的评价又听了一遍~
T2- 20秒的那个就是...“额”的拉长版，囧
      本来应该像这样的 too heavy to carry，但是脑子一乱就把burden想成负重的意思了，囧

T1- 听得好仔细，谢谢！~我感觉我该提升一下我句子的营养成分了...

aliceyang128UID: 3199061

好奇怪，我们不是互评小伙伴吗？为什么都有人把5.28的评过了呢？
但是我还是要评5.28的吧
T1:
楼主声音好好听~~
22'' do my jogging 我觉得直接说jog就可以了
36'' who I knew是不是应该用whom I knew呢？而且整篇都是现在时的话，这里也可以用know
T2：
说的很棒，如果一定要挑毛病，就是the picture for local people还有后面那里用pictures复数会不会更好些？

要向楼主学习语音语调还有淡定，我每次说的时候都好紧张……有时候语速就很快……感觉心态不如楼主的好~~