issue196 V2.0 写得更郁闷！大家来掐吧 俺不怕疼得说

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196 "Technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life."
196． 科技产生的问题多于所解决的，可能威胁或降低人们的生活质量。


科技带来的麻烦比解决的问题多
所以科技可能威胁到或者损毁人类生活的质量

position:Disagree

科技不但没有威胁甚至损毁生活质量，相反，人类生活水平的提高是由科技的发展造成的
因为科技解决的问题多余产生的问题

b1人类生活的质量的提高是由科技发展造成的
b2 科技解决的问题要多于产生的问题。因为其弊端往往是虽不完善或不正确的应用科技造成的
b3 …………………………



The speaker claims that technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life.  But in my point of view, it is not the case, with the help of technology the quality of people's lives is turning better and better in that technology solves more problems than those it creates.

To begin with, it is technology that ameliorates the quality of human lives.  Today, technology, a main method of solving problems, has been generally applied in every field of our world.  It is technology that saves more and more people lives from Death for it is the modern medic; it is technology that creates more and more products needed in daily lives for it is the industries; it is technology that offers more and more information from all over the world and all academic fields for it is the mass media.  Technology is every part of life in that it is connected with every spot of the circumstances.  For example, as Gene Engineering is applied in agriculture, vegetables are made bigger and productive, and fruits are made more delicious and even more colorful so as to attract more housewives' eyes.  Simply put, technology is changing our lives, of course, towards a fascinating direction.

Second, the problems solved by technology are more than those created by it. Because most problems it brings to us are caused by the misuse of technology or by the weakness of it which could be decreased through a technological way.  Take the application of Gene Engineering as an example as well.  A terrorism organization once created a new kind of virus with an eye to threatening their government for some political reasons.  It is a typical example of applying a technological method, Gene Engineering, with an evil aim.  People may complain that such problems are created by technology which is unfair in that it is human ourselves create such problems, though technology is the instrument.  Also problems may be raised by the immature technological method which could be solved by improving it by human.  So to speak, when a host of problems are solved, a few new problems may be created correspondently.  However, the mainstream is positive for that technology is used well generally.

Third, people could solve the new problems raised by technology by various ways.  People can make new laws to prevent the technology from being abused; we can improve the incomplete method by technology itself and so on. It is useless that people always complain that negative problems threaten their lives without trying to solve them.  And it is childish to complain the technology which is just a tool created and used by ourselves.  To solve the problems is more important and significant.

To sum up, applications of technology are improving our quality of lives though it brings us some new problems.  People should use technology much properly and more sufficiently to make greater contributions to our human race.

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196 "Technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life."
196． 科技产生的问题多于所解决的，可能威胁或降低人们的生活质量。


科技带来的麻烦比解决的问题多
所以科技可能威胁到或者损毁人类生活的质量


科技不但没有威胁甚至损毁生活质量，相反，人类生活水平的提高是由科技的发展造成的
因为科技解决的问题多余产生的问题

b1人类生活的质量的提高是由科技发展造成的
b2 科技解决的问题要多于产生的问题。因为其弊端往往是虽不完善或不正确的应用科技造成的
b3 …………………………



The speaker claims that technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life. But in my point of view, it is not the case, with the help of technology the quality of people's lives is turning better and better in that technology solves more problems than those it creates.(从你的TS看出你是完全觉得科技的好处，但是事物的两面性，我觉得你应该谈谈科技的不利，911事件)

To begin with, it is technology that ameliorates the quality of human lives. Today, technology, a main method of solving problems, has been generally applied in every field of our world. It is technology that saves more and more people lives from Death（death） for it is the modern medic(medical care); it is technology that creates more and more products needed in daily lives for it is the industries(for从句始终觉得很啰嗦);（In the field of mass media,） it is technology that offers more and more information from all over the world and all academic fields for it is the mass media. Technology is every part of life in that it is connected with every spot of the circumstances. For example, as Gene Engineering(gene technology) is applied in agriculture, vegetables are made bigger and productive, and fruits are made more delicious and even more colorful so as to attract more housewives' eyes. Simply put, technology is changing our lives, of course, towards a fascinating direction.(What about the negative effects?)

Second, the problems solved by technology are more than those created by it. Because most problems it brings to us are caused by the misuse of technology or by the weakness of it, which could be decreased through a technological way. Take the application of Gene Engineering(?有这个词吗？) as an example as well. A terrorism organization once created a new kind of virus with an eye to threatening their government for some political reasons. It is a typical example of applying a technological method, Gene Engineering, with an evil aim. People may complain that such problems are created by technology which is unfair in that it is human ourselves create such problems, though technology is the instrument. Also problems may be raised by the immature technological method which could be solved by improving it by human. So to speak, when a host of problems are solved, a few new problems may be created correspondently. However, the mainstream is positive for that technology is used well generally.最大的缺点，你没有详细说明如何通过科技来解决问题，你的例子反而是说科技给人类带来的害处，与你的这段的TS直接相反！

Third, people could solve the new problems raised by technology by various ways. People can make new laws to prevent the technology from being abused; we can improve the incomplete method by technology itself and so on. It is useless that people always complain that negative problems threaten their lives without trying to solve them. And it is childish to complain the technology which is just a tool created and used by ourselves. To solve the problems is more important and significant.觉得很空洞，这方面的例子应该很多阿

To sum up, applications of technology are improving our quality of lives though it brings us some new problems. People should use technology much properly and more sufficiently to make greater contributions to our human race.
感觉没有上一篇写的好，如果我来写，我的提纲会是
1．        科技是第一生产力。
2．        科技给人类的生活带来方便
3．        科技的负面影响
4．        人们把科技用于不好的目的
5．        解决问题一方面靠科技，一方面要靠人类自己
以上5点，由你的文章的重心有所取舍。
你觉得呢？

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最初由 sniper613 发布
[B]196 "Technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life."
196． 科技产生的问题多于所解决的，可能威胁或降低人们的?.

以下省略...... [/B]

唉~~~~~我怎么改得这么郁闷呢 写完了都有种呕吐的感觉
faint!!
饭在桌子上摆了半个小时了~~~不想吃~~~~唉~~

过会儿我再来给自己改改~~~现在太不舒服了~~

赫赫~~~~又是老兄第一个给改~~bow一个~~嘿嘿

lovebrianUID: 157127

ts的问题：事物虽然有两面性，但是都有其优势的一面阿~~~人是好人坏人~~还是有定论的阿
Death大写是指死神~~~我印象中是这样的~~~~~
我的初衷是b1写正作用  b2写一下副作用 然后说能解决 b3就恶心了~~~~不知所云的说 写到b3就实在写不下去了~~~~郁闷啊！

你的提纲跟我以前的想法很像~~
我在试图解决题目里面more的问题~~~~~~~~看来还是不成功！

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我的另一篇Issue193,更郁闷，你帮我拍拍吧

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