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longlongblack 发表于 2014-8-13 08:47
阁下的作文改完了，基本就没怎么改，作文写的很好，字数够，思路很清晰，用词造句也都很好

thanks for the encouragement i badly need some..here are my comments

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xjq194949 发表于 2014-8-13 13:26

修改的部分要word打开才能看见，所以最好能用word

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xjq194949 发表于 2014-8-13 13:26

另外据很多前辈说似乎argue没有结尾不会有什么问题，所以从来不写结尾...基本就是扯一句废话嘛 - -

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simbaqiao 发表于 2014-8-12 22:02
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已改，加油

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xuhan7daad 发表于 2014-8-12 22:59
you should read my disastrous ones
here are my unsolicited comments on your issue {:1_1: ...

I‘ve just finished reading your comments and HUGE THANKS!!! I only wish I could have the ability to bullshit as well as you do :P Like I said I always stuck at how to make my argument more concrete, by adding examples or relating to more specific description... but it's toooooooooo hard and sometimes under the time-constraint it's just impossible, or otherwise yourself even don't know what you're saying... (like how I've done this one)

Anyway, thank you again and your opinions are invaluable!!

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发表于 2014-8-13 22:17:04 |显示全部楼层

改好了，写的不错

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Ninalala3333 发表于 2014-8-13 21:46
I‘ve just finished reading your comments and HUGE THANKS!!! I only wish I could have the ability ...

one thing i forgot, and was reminded by the issue from longlongblack i just commented upon:

Even though is used to express a fact
Even if is used in a supposition or hypothesis.

so what you mean is 'even if all Chinese people concur' not even though

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xuhan7daad 发表于 2014-8-13 23:05
one thing i forgot, and was reminded by the issue from longlongblack i just commented upon:

Ev ...

I see... I thought they were the same, like "as if" and "as though" both mean the same thing

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