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In modern educational system, the function of grade system, a standard of measuring students' study quality, becomes more important than ever. However, there are really some defects existing in this system, which induce [U]many controversies [/U] (a controversy) about whether it is good for the improvement of educational quality if there is an educational environment without grades. As far as I am concerned, the pressure of pursuing high scores blindly is harmful, but this system, existing for many years, has some positive effects on(what?) in process of study.
The pressure of pursuing high scores blindly is an impediment to the quality of learning. As we know, the design of the examination system has some inevitable limitations. For example, [U]the reflection of the examination[/U] (明白你的意思 但是看起来有点像中文翻译的: examination can only test the ability...) is only the ability of holding knowledge in textbooks, but the capacity of other aspects could not being discovered. This defect always results in the phenomenon that a student who does well in examinations but not pays attention to study(ing) other knowledge outside notebooks [U]has difficulties [/U](doesn't perform well) in the society, since the basic abilities for survival, such as how to communicate with others, are absent. (这个地方引出 communicate 我以为你后面开始讲这个, 但你又谈到其他能力,论证火力被分散了)In recent years, many companies complain that some students owning high scores in school could not adapt (to) jobs which require them to exert their own ideas. The main reason is that these students unilaterally pursue grades in the school but do not attentively cultivate own abilities of analyzing and solving problems. When they meet problems not being taught by notebooks and teachers, they do not know how to deal with. Therefore, pursuing high scores blindly limits the quality of learning. 分析挺有道理的 不错
The educational environment without grades could promote the development of students' genuine intellectual to some extent. In China, a popular topic these years is that schools should adopt educational system which is inclined to the training of students' general development including not only imparting knowledge, but also attaching importance to the moral construction and other basic technologies in the society. As a consequence, many elementary schools begin to practice "happy education", which means that the pressure to achieve high grades is replaced by an approach which permits students developing their habits and genius with freedom on the basis of teachers' leading. The result of this new educational system in recent years shows that the comprehensive abilities of students in Chinese elementary school are obviously increasing. For instance, students in these schools received many national awards for excellent children invention, since the happy education system provides the soil to inspire their imagination.(例证加论证 挺好的 来点分析更好)
However, grades also have some positive effects in the process of study. If there were no pressure of the examination, many students would not spend their most time on study, which is harm for the development of them. 看到这 感觉你的which从句用的太多(能不能换换,比如这句:The absence of pressure of the examination would do harm to the development of students for .....)The grade system, existing for many years, has its rationalities, such as [U]grades being considered as a standard to measure the result of study, and the [/U] (可以不要) knowledge could be increased through the preparation for the examination. Take CET 4 test, [U]which is a test in China to measure students’ English level, [/U](an English test) as an example. Students improve their capability of mastering and using English in a short time by preparing for the test, which requires a lot of intensive exercises and then forces students memorizing much knowledge.
To sum up, although there are some positive effects of grades in modern education systems, pursuing high score blindly to some extent is a resistance to education. Reducing the influence of scores in the education system could promote more genuine intellectual development. (581 words)
文章脉络很清晰,论证起来也不含糊,不错了 要是限时写就更好了
当然我认为 文章还是简单的罗列优缺点 还是缺乏对两者之间的比较 到底哪一个更值得提倡 有没有什么样的解决办法 为什么?末尾提出的观点Reducing the influence of scores in the education system could promote more genuine intellectual development 在文章中没有体现
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