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九月爱上乒乓球UID：151821

ISSUE144 "It is the artist, not the critic, *who gives society something of lasting value." * a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.

提纲: disagree    1.艺术家的作品给社会带来永恒的价值
              2.评论家将艺术家的作品带入人们的视野,也将人们的反馈带给艺术家,促进艺术价值的形成.
                            3. 一些人认为,批评经常歪曲了艺术的真正含义,但是就像艺术家良莠不齐一样,只有客观,诚恳的批判和优秀的艺术作品才能给人们带来永恒的价值.

The speaker claims that it is artist, not the critic, who gives society something of lasting value. However, in my view, both the artist and the critic can equip society with such things and without either one the world would lose a great deal of valuable things.

It is doubtless that great works of artist are really of lasting value to society. For one thing, those works convey the thoughts and spirit of artists, people who are preeminent for their excellent understanding of life and affluent inspiration for creation. For centuries, people from all walks of life are moved by the tragedy of Romeo and Juliet, captured by Mona Lisa Smile, inspired by the independence of Jane Eyre and shocked by the courage of St. Joan. All these creations of artist are treasures for society with its impressive images and valuable spirit. For another, artist's observation for society and the background in the story reflecting contemporary society always cover profound meanings that contribute a lot to the understanding of the world in a certain period. ‘Gone With the Wind’ is just a case in point: the author described a magnificent picture of American Civil War and it has now become a necessary way to help people understand the history of America. Simply put, artists bring society something of lasting value with their great works.

Meanwhile, we should not neglect the transmitting role of critics in creating things of lasting value for society. First, it is critic that brings public's attention to the great works and help people to understand the works well. As we know, not every person is capable of telling the excellent from the crowded, not to mention understanding them completely and perfectly. Critics, maybe of less talent than artist, but may have an accurate and original perspective for art. Thus, with their help we could find the lasting value lies in the artists' great works. Second, critics tell artists the feedback of the appreciators and this is one of the most important factors in shaping the great works that have lasting value to society. Although popularity is not the standard in judging the value of certain work, knowing common people's likes and dislikes will in some way help the artist find the deficiency in their works and thus to produce more excellent works. In this sense, things of lasting value wouldn’t sparkle without critics.

While some people claim that critics who misunderstand artists' works will cause people to diverge from the right direction to understand the works. In my opinion, just like not every writer can be called artist, only responsible and objective critics can generate appreciation of the lasting value of the works. Those misinterpretations will finally die out with more appearance of appropriate criticism.           

To sum up, it is artists and critics who work together to create great works of human history and thus to produce something of lasting value.

九月爱上乒乓球UID：151821

顶,其实思路是denne给我的 谢谢了
大家帮忙改改!

jianguoUID：157933

我接了，先占座，呵呵

发呆的小熊UID：139071

ISSUE144 "It is the artist, not the critic, *who gives society something of lasting value." * a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.

提纲: disagree 1.艺术家的作品给社会带来永恒的价值
2.评论家将艺术家的作品带入人们的视野,也将人们的反馈带给艺术家,促进艺术价值的形成.
3. 一些人认为,批评经常歪曲了艺术的真正含义,但是就像艺术家良莠不齐一样,只有客观,诚恳的批判和优秀的艺术作品才能给人们带来永恒的价值.

The speaker claims that it is artist, not the critic, who gives society something of lasting value. However, in my view, both the artist and the critic can equip society with such things and without either one the world would lose a great deal of valuable things.

It is doubtless that great works of artist are really of lasting value to society. For one thing, those works convey the thoughts and spirit of artists, people who are preeminent for their excellent understanding of life and affluent inspiration for creation. For long, people from all walks（？） of society moved by the tragedy between（of） Romeo and Juliet, captured by Mona Lisa (Smile), inspired by the independence of Jane Eyre and shocked by the courage of St. Joan. All these creations of artist are treasures for society with its(their) impressive images and valuable spirit. For another, artist's observation for society and the background in the story reflecting contemporary society always cover a profound meaning which contribute a lot to the understanding of the world in a certain period. Gone With the Wind is just a case in point: the author describe a magnificent picture of American Civil War and this novel has now become a necessary way to help people understand the history of America. Simply put, artists bring society something of lasting value with their great works.

Meanwhile, we should not neglect the transmitting role of critics in creating things of lasting value for society. First, it is critics that bring public's attention to the great works and help people to understand the works well. As we know, not every person is capable of telling the excellent from the crowded, not to mention understanding them completely and perfectly. Critics, maybe of less talent than artist, but will have an accurate and original perspective for art. Thus, with their help we could find the lasting value lies in the artists' great works. Second, critics tell artists the feedback of the appreciators and this is one of the most important factors in shaping the great works that have lasting value to society. Although popularity is not the standard in judging the value of certain work, knowing common people's likes and dislikes will in some way help the artist find the deficiency in their works and thus to produce more excellent works. In this sense, things of lasting value wouldn’t sparkle without critics.

While some people claim that critics who misunderstand artists' works will cause people to diverge from the right direction to understand the works. In my opinion, just like not every writer can be called artist, only responsible and objective critics will help generate appreciation of the lasting value of the works. Those misinterpretations will finally die out with more appearance of appropriate criticism.

To sum up, it is artists and critics who work together to create great works of human history and thus to produce something of lasting value.
写得很好，除了一点点语言上的问题。学习中，尤其是你的逻辑结构，我的文章总是很乱：）
关于批评家的作用那一部分可以考虑加上些实际的例子，纯粹说理显得单薄了些。

jianguoUID：157933

ISSUE144 "It is the artist, not the critic, *who gives society something of lasting value." * a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.
是艺术家而不是批评家，给了社会一些永久的价值。批评家指经常评价艺术作品，例如小说、电影、音乐、绘画等的人。
提纲: disagree 1.艺术家的作品给社会带来永恒的价值
2.评论家将艺术家的作品带入人们的视野,也将人们的反馈带给艺术家,促进艺术价值的形成.
3. 一些人认为,批评经常歪曲了艺术的真正含义,但是就像艺术家良莠不齐一样,只有客观,诚恳的批判和优秀的艺术作品才能给人们带来永恒的价值.
观点：两者都很重要（我觉得应该重点强调以下批评家—根据题意）
The speaker claims that it is artist, not the critic, who gives society something of lasting value. However, in my view, both the artist and the critic can equip society with such things and without either(either 用在肯定中) one the world would lose a great deal of valuable things.（最后一句话说的不太清楚 待探讨）开头还不错，呵呵
1. 艺术家很重要
It is doubtless that great works of artist are really of lasting value to society. For one thing, those works convey the thoughts and spirit of artists, people(people去掉)who are preeminent for their excellent understanding of life and affluent inspiration for creation. For long,(有这种说法吗？不太清楚，待讨论) people from all walks(?) of society(缺are吧，后面一样) moved by the tragedy between(between->of) Romeo and Juliet, captured by Mona Lisa Smile, inspired by the independence of Jane Eyre and shocked by the courage of St. Joan.（这组排比比较经典，学习之） All these creations of artist are treasures( 用fortune或者wealth)for(for->of) society with(with用的合适吗？) its impressive images and valuable spirit. For another, artist's observation for society and the background in the story reflecting contemporary society always cover(contain好一点) a（单复数不一致呀） profound meaning which contribute（单复数不一致呀） a lot to the understanding of the world in a certain period(加to some degree更恰当). Gone With the Wind（不用加引号吗？） is just a case in point: the author describe（时态） a magnificent picture(用 scene) of American Civil War and this novel has now become a necessary way to help people understand the history of America.(感觉把这句在重整理一下，变成Gone With the Wind, describing a magnificent scene of American Civil War, has become a necessary way to…) Simply put, artists bring society something of lasting value with their great works.(论证的很好，值得学习呀)
2. 批评家也不容忽视
Meanwhile, we should not neglect the transmitting role of critics in creating things of lasting value for society. First, it is critics（单负数） that bring public's attention to the great works and help people to understand the works well. As we know, not every person is capable of telling the excellent(excellence or virtue) from the crowded, not to mention(let alone) understanding them completely and perfectly. Critics, maybe of less talent than artist, but will(太绝对了，用may) have an(用an不合适把) accurate and original perspective for art. Thus, with their help we could find the lasting value lies in the artists' great works. Second, critics tell artists the feedback of the appreciators and this is（换成which is） one of the most important factors in shaping the great works that have（单复数） lasting value to society. Although popularity（前面没有提popularity呀） is not the standard in judging the value of certain work, knowing common people's likes and dislikes will in some way help the artist find the deficiency in their（单复数） works and thus to produce more excellent works. In this sense, things of lasting value wouldn’t sparkle without critics.（太绝对了）
3. 曲解是不可避免的，但最终会被更正。
While some people claim that critics who misunderstand(时态) artists' works will(can) cause people to diverge from the right direction to understand(understanding) the works. In my opinion, just like not every writer can be called artist(chinenglish), only responsible and objective critics will(can) help(去掉 help) generate appreciation of the lasting value of the works. Those misinterpretations will finally die out with more appearance of appropriate criticism.

To sum up, it is artists and critics who work together to create great works of human history and thus to produce something of lasting value.
总体感觉你的思路和例子都很好，也很有说服力，就是有些小错误。很好了，努力呀！
互相进步，我花了一个半小时给你改出来的，个人意见，多多交流。

jianguoUID：157933

对了，有时间，在帮我看看把，越写越郁闷。
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九月爱上乒乓球UID：151821

谢谢两位的批改 all walks of live 各行各业

关于批评家的作用那一部分可以考虑加上些实际的例子，纯粹说理显得单薄了些。

有什么好的例子吗?