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issue 28 greatness of nations measured by achievement or welfare 示范
本帖最后由 tesolchina 于 2015-8-15 23:09 编辑
28) The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
To address the issue raised in the statement, it is important to clarify what it means to be a great nation. I would consider a nation great if it has made positive impact to the development of the contemporary world. Also, a nation that had contributed a great deal in the history of mankind should also be counted as a historically great nation. Given this understanding of greatness, I would first discuss why the general welfare of citizens is not a good indicator; I will then discuss some examples of great nations in history and in modern society to illustrate that the achievments of the elites are better indicators.
While there is no doubt that a nation where people enjoy high quality of life is admirable, the general welfare of the people cannot serve as a reliable indicator of the greatness of a nation. When the people have access to abundant material goods and quality education, they will enjoy a high standard of living. But it does not follow that the nation would necessarily play an important role in the international community. Maybe the nation is endowed with rich natural resources. As a result, the government could afford generous welfare programs that guarantee the quality of life of its citizens. Nevertheless, these wealthy nations do not deserve the label “great nations” unless they have made some substantial contribution to the world as a whole.
In modern society, great nations are often the nations where exceptional leaders in the fields of politics, art and science had achieved great works that can benefit not just their compatriots but the people all over the world. The theoretical physicists in the US who were responsible for the early development of the Internet had made significant contribution to the progress of Information society through their experiments of new technologies. As a result of their works and the other scientists in the US, the nation has become a great leader in information technologies and a great many people’s live have been transformed. Meanwhile, the US is also considered a great nation as it has produced a significant number of leading scientitsts who had been awarded Nobel prizes. These scientists’ achievement had great impact on contemporary society as well as future generations.
If we take a historical view, it is also clear that the achievements of the elites are the better indicator of whether a nation was great. In most ancient societies, the ruling elite often possess the majority of the land and the wealth. Consequently, with the huge income and wealth gap, the general welfare of the people was relatively poor. But nations with outstanding rulers, artists and scientists were still considered great as the achievements of the elites were important for the historical development of the world. Without the invention of paper by an anonymous group of Chinese scientists, for example, Europe could not enjoy the adundant supply of cheap materials for writing and exchanging ideas. Given its important contribution to the progress of the global civilization, it is indisputable that ancient China was one of the greatest nations in the world history. As this example clearly illustrates, the achievement of the elites can be used to better indicate the historical greatness of a nation.
Overall speaking, people may disagree on what makes a great nation; as a result, opinions over this issue may vary greatly among people. If the greatness can be defined as a nation’s influence to the historical or contemporary development of the global society, then the achievements of the elites can be used as reliable indicators to determine the greatness of a nation. Meanwhile, the general welfare may not be a very yseful indicator because certain factors that are not related to the greatness of nations could be crucial in determining the general welfare of people.
| 动作分析 | 内容点评 | 语言点评 | To address the issue raised in the statement, it is important to clarify what
it means to be a great nation. | 提出要界定的概念 | | it is ... to ... | I would consider a nation great if it has made positive impact to the
development of the contemporary world. | 界定概念 | | | Also, a nation that had contributed a great deal in the history of mankind
should also be counted as a historically great nation. | 界定概念 | | | Given this understanding of greatness, I would first discuss why the general
welfare of citizens is not a good indicator; I will then discuss some examples
of great nations in history and in modern society to illustrate that the
achievments of the elites are better indicators. | 主旨句 | 基于这个概念以概括后文的
形式提出观点 | | | | | | While there is no doubt that a nation where people enjoy high quality of life
is admirable, the general welfare of the people cannot serve as a reliable
indicator of the greatness of a nation. | 主题句 | 先让步再提出分论点 | | When the people have access to abundant material goods and quality education,
they will enjoy a high standard of living. | 描述本段分论点的前提条件 | | | But it does not follow that the nation would necessarily play an important
role in the international community. | 否定从这个前提条件
得出的某个推论 | | | Maybe the nation is endowed with rich natural resources. As a result,
the government could afford generous welfare programs that guarantee
the quality of life of its citizens. | 提出某种其他可能性及后果 | | | Nevertheless, these wealthy nations do not deserve the label “great nations”
unless they have made some substantial contribution to the world as a whole.
| 继续推论并回应题目的主题 | 注意本段没有具体例子 | | | | | | In modern society, great nations are often the nations where exceptional
leaders in the fields of politics, art and science had achieved great works
that can benefit not just their compatriots but the people all over the world. | 主题句 | 以前面的定义的
其中一个角度展开 | | The theoretical physicists in the US who were responsible for the early
development of the Internet had made significant contribution to the
progress of Information society through their experiments of new technologies. | 提出例子 | | | As a result of their works and the other scientists in the US, the nation has
become a great leader in information technologies and a great many
people’s live have been transformed. | 将例子和本文主题联系起来 | | | Meanwhile, the US is also considered a great nation as it has produced
a significant number of leading scientists who had been awarded Nobel prizes. | 再简单举例 联系主题 | | | These scientists’ achievement had great impact on contemporary society
as well as future generations. | 展开例子 回应定义 | | | | | | | | | | | | | | |
| 动作分析 | 内容点评 | 语言点评 | If we take a historical view, it is also clear that the achievements of
the elites are the better indicator of whether a nation was great. | 主题句 回应定义的另一个方面 | | | In most ancient societies, the ruling elite often possess the majority
of the land and the wealth. | 描述本段分论点的前提条件 | | | Consequently, with the huge income and wealth gap, the general
welfare of the people was relatively poor. | 由上句推论 回应题目的关键词 | | | But nations with outstanding rulers, artists and scientists were still
considered great as the achievements of the elites were important
for the historical development of the world. | 结合题目的关键词论述分论点 | | | Without the invention of paper by an anonymous group of Chinese scientists,
for example, Europe could not enjoy the abundant supply of cheap
materials for writing and exchanging ideas. | 提出例子 将impact具体化 | | | Given its important contribution to the progress of the global civilization,
it is indisputable that ancient China was one of the greatest nations
in the world history. | 从例子归纳出general point | | | As this example clearly illustrates, the achievement of the elites can
be used to better indicate the historical greatness of a nation. | 再次回应题目的关键词 | | | | | | | | | | |
Overall speaking, people may disagree on what makes a great nation;
as a result, opinions over this issue may vary greatly among people. | 指出对关键概念不同的理解可能导致观点不同 | | | If the greatness can be defined as a nation’s influence to the historical or
contemporary development of the global society, then the achievements
of the elites can be used as reliable indicators to determine the greatness of a nation. | 基于本文的定义 则可以得出这样的结论 | | | Meanwhile, the general welfare may not be a very useful indicator because
certain factors that are not related to the greatness of nations could be
crucial in determining the general welfare of people. | 同否定另一个结论 | | | | | | | | | | |
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