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tesolchina 发表于 2014-10-24 18:52
GRE写作题库的issue部分149道真题有6种写作要求，包括是否同意命题及不同情况下是否正确（54题）， ...

这是我看到的最靠谱的一篇分析了。之前看到的一般都是不管题目，一刀切，自说自话。今天看到这篇文章真有豁然开朗之感。希望楼主能坚持下去。十分感谢你无私的分享。

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tesolchina 发表于 2014-11-5 23:36
有版友提出语言表达的问题如何解决。这确实是很头疼的问题。一个基本的原则就是要多看好的句子、多模仿；与 ...

I disagree that students from affluent families would benefit from the recommendation, since their financial background allows them to choose majors freely. Neither should those with exceptional talents be constrained by the recommendation, for jobs will eventually come as they reveal their gifts to the world. Nevertheless, the recommendation might be suitable for students under heavy financial pressure, as for them finding a job must be given higher priority.

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tesolchina 发表于 2014-12-16 20:52
64) The human mind will always be superior to machines because machines are only tools of human mind ...

你好，你的范文给我很大启发，那些论点和例子也都十分让人信服。然而我对于题目要求有一个疑问。题目要求的是在展开和支持自己的观点时，要考虑论题在什么情况下为真，什么情况下为假，并且解释对于这些的思考如何影响自己的立场。你的文章中陈述了三个机器无法超越人类思维的方面，相当于对题目中的陈述的一个肯定。我的问题是，难道不是一定要从反面讨论一下题目的观点吗？不是必须要谈谈什么情况下机器优于人类思维呢？然后将这正反两方面整合起来才算是对题目完整的回答，不是吗？期待你的解答。谢谢。

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guoguo100011 发表于 2015-1-25 16:47
你好，你的范文给我很大启发，那些论点和例子也都十分让人信服。然而我对于题目要求有一个疑问。题目要求 ...

64) The human mind will always be superior to machines because machines are only tools of human minds.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

题目要求中用的是or 也就是说可以全盘肯定或否定原命题 你所说的正反论述也是可以的 但必须强调在不同的具体情况下命题是否成立 不能笼统的先肯定再否定 这样容易导致自相矛盾的情况

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tesolchina 发表于 2015-1-25 17:48
64) The human mind will always be superior to machines because machines are only tools of human mi ...

多谢指点。我可能是受“正反正”的思路毒害太深了。

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53. The following appeared in a health magazine.

"The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles. Their responses to a recent survey show that in their eating habits they conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago. Furthermore, there has been a fourfold increase in sales of food products containing kiran, a substance that a scientific study has shown reduces cholesterol. This trend is also evident in reduced sales of sulia, a food that few of the most healthy citizens regularly eat."

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.


The article makes the argument that Forsythe citizens’ lifestyles have become more healthful based on a recent survey and sales records of two types of food. To evaluate this optimistic conclusion, we need more evidence about how the survey was designed and conducted and the reasons why the sales of different food have changed.

We need more information about the survey to decide if the results can support the conclusion. For one thing, how the survey was designed and conducted would affect the reliability of the data collected. Did the survey ask the respondents about their eating habits now as well as ten years ago? For their current eating habits, did the survey designers include questions phrased in different ways to check the consistency of the respondents? For the eating habits of people ten years ago, did the survey ask the respondents to recall their eating habits or consider the data collected a decade earlier? Answers to these questions would provide evidence for us to decide if the survey itself was well-designed and could produce useful and reliable data. Another issue is the representativeness of the respondents. We need to evaluate the sampling methods of the survey critically to see if the respondents sampled can truly represent the Forsythe citizens. If the respondents were mainly from a particular socioeconomic class or age group, for example, the survey results could not be generalzed to the entire population in Forsythe.

More information is also required to understand the nature of Kiran and the reasons why the sales have increased. According to the magazine article, Kiran can help reduce cholesterol. But that does not mean the substance is necessarily healthful. Maybe it is a mood booster that can help the people to feel good but may become addictive in the long term. We need more information about Kiran to determine whether having more of this is healthful. Also, we need to consider the food products that contain kiran. Maybe the food products, in addition to having kiran, also have other unhealthy ingredients such as sugar or grease. This is related to another question: why are the food products so popular? Maybe they are popular for reasons unrelated to kiran such as the delicious taste as a result of sugar or grease or effective marketing strategies of the manufacturers and retailers. If this is the case, the data would not support the claim that Forsythe citizens are leading a more healthful life.

Similarly, we need more information about sulia and why its sales has been reduced. It is not reasonable to assess the health value of sulia simply based on the eating habits of the most healthy citizens. The citizens’s health conditions may or may not relate to their habits of eating or not eating a particular food. We need more data about why the “most healthy citizens” are so healthy to decide if it is related to not eating sulia. Of course, information about sulia itself such as its nutrition value and impact on people’s health would be very helpful. Meanwhile, it is also useful to know why the sales of sulia has declined. It could be caused by factors that are completely unrelated to people’s lifestyle and health, Maybe the sales were reduced because the change of global market that increased the price of sulia as raw materials. With the increase of the price, people would certainly buy less of the food. If this is the case, we would then need to consider the substitute of sulia that people turn to and see if the substitute is healthful or not.

Overall speaking, evaluating the healthfulness of people’s lifestyles is an important but complcated undertaking. Looking at the eating habits and the sales of particular food products is helpful but may not lead to comprehensive and reliable data that is required to make any valid conclusion. To evaluate the argument, we need more information about the survey designs, the nature of the food products and why the sales have changed.

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10) Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.

Human activities since Industrial Revolution have brought enormous impact to the natural environment of the earth. The size of wilderness areas worldwide has declined dramatically over the last few centuries. It is understandable that many environmentalists call for legislation to preserve the remaining wilderness areas. I believe that such policies are not suitable for nations where people are still fighting against poverty or struggle to meet the basic demands of their citizens such as housing. On the other hand, for more developed nations, a policy focusing on conservation and sustainable development is more desirable than the proposed preservation legislation.

The preservation program would be neither sensible nor feasible in least developed countries where people suffer from poverty and other related social problems. Consider the opportunity costs of implementing such a policy. The land of the wilderness area could be used to build manufacturing factories that can provide jobs for the local people who lack the opportunities to create value via economic activities.  Development economists agree that unemployment is the root problem that causes poverty, lack of education, malnutrition and high fertility rates among women. Any policy that would exacerbate unemployment should not be implemented. In fact, it would be politically impossible for the governments to develop such preservation programs that would deprive the people of valuable job opportunities. The democratically elected government officials have to consider the consequences of introducing a massively unpopular policy.

The preservation policy is not helpful for nations or regions where the supply of land is particularly limited. Take Hong Kong as an example. Due to the grave shortage of land for housing, the people in Hong Kong have to deal with outrageously high property prices and uncomfortably small living space. The preservation policy  for wilderness areas in Hong Kong would take away the land that could have been used for housing and related infrastructure construction projects. Again such a policy would not receive public support and the government officials and the legislators have to consider the public opinions when making decisions on this issue.

Even for nations that do not have problems of poverty or housing shortage, the governments should probably consider a conservation program rather than the proposed preservation program. The difference between preservation and conservation is that the former provides absolutely no opportunities for any human activities in the wilderness areas whereas the latter policy allows development in a sustainable manner. For example, under a conservation program, the wilderness areas could be developed for low-pollution industry such as tourism.  Low-density hotels may be built in the areas to attract visitors all over the world. Efforts would be made to minimise the impact on the environment without compromising the opportunities of future generations to benefit from the resources in this area. I think conservation policies are more likely to win support of the public as it can strike a balance between the need for development and the protection of the environment.

In conclusion, for nations where poverty, unemployment or shortage of housing are major problems, the proposed policy should not be adopted for the sake of the livelihood of the citizens. Even for more developed countries, a conservation policy focusing on sustainability is more reasonable and politically sensible for the legislators.

for nations where people are fighting against poverty, this policy should not be adopted

for nations where people need more land for basic needs such as housing, this policy is not sensible

for nations which are well-developed, a conservation program rather than preservation program should be introduced

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tesolchina 发表于 2014-11-22 21:16
有版主提醒我不要让组员在版面上发全文，否则可能会被ETS索引而导致被判抄袭。对于这个问题，我其实有点怀疑 ...

最后的结果呢？老师，会被检索吗？

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肖攀 发表于 2015-2-1 13:46
最后的结果呢？老师，会被检索吗？

结果是会的

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tesolchina 发表于 2015-2-1 17:58
结果是会的

不能用其他的方式来进行吗？比如用google doc，邮件，dropbox等等。我马上要考了，还希望王老师能帮着看看作文呢。

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低调的庆祝一下
我和HJ版主合作投的会议摘要被接收了
http://caes.hku.hk/facesofenglish/
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guoguo100011 发表于 2015-2-2 08:57
不能用其他的方式来进行吗？比如用google doc，邮件，dropbox等等。我马上要考了，还希望王老师能帮着看看 ...

你可以发Google doc和我共享 hswanghk@gmail.com

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嗯，来分享我的一篇issue和一篇argument，请王老师审阅一下。

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tesolchina 发表于 2015-2-2 22:55
低调的庆祝一下
我和HJ版主合作投的会议摘要被接收了
http://caes.hku.hk/facesofenglish/

我来memo一下，一月前写了一篇不成人样的issue正在改革中，发现该issue涉及艺术科学领导人，现在还在头疼中。
BTW，今天在QQ上有幸得到王老师指点，遇到不熟悉的题型容易产生不熟悉的表达和语法，和我的阅读面有直接关系，因此写出了那篇不成人样的文章，argument的部分内容上暂时定是稍许扩充，先将issue提升到有脸见人的状态。
THX A LOT ~~~

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tesolchina 发表于 2014-12-3 08:24
北美范文的issue可以看看
李建林的5.5千万不要看 里面各种硬伤  
凡是讲argument如何攻击谬误的书或者 ...

12年出的《新GRE写作官方题库与范文》怎么样呢？