issue185,[color=#ff00bf]昨天发着烧写的,今天发着烧改的

xqmelissaUID: 140370

Issue 185
Scandals—whether in politics, academia, or other areas—can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.


The scandal, always regarded as having negative effect on a person, sometimes could induce more attention on ordinary people and generate related discussions about problems engendering the scandal, while the result is difficult to be produced by speakers or reformers. As for the function of scandals, I think it is a two-side sword which have both positive and negative to the whole society.

Scandals, whether in politics or academia realms, always focus more public attention on related problems and produce discussions in ways that speakers and reformers have difficulties to achieve. Although there is propaganda about the conduct of plagiarism should be condemned in many years, especially in China, most people do not really pay attention on it because they took this idea into account that it is a common sense that has no special value to be overemphasis. As a consequence, this problem has not really been recognized until recently when the scandal has been revealed by media that a famous professor of a top Chinese university plagiarized a foreign paper in order to attain his academic achievement. If there had not been this scandal, the field of academia, even the whole society, would not have impetus on reconsidering the style in academia, which concentrates on pursuing reputations and high social states, rather than doing researches. Another example in politics field is Nixon's Watergate scandal. After the exposure of this scandal, one result was president's abdication. Another outcome, regarding as an important effect on this scandal, was an intensive discussion about personal credit, which was seemed as a general accepted conduct by the speaker and reformer's propaganda, but not fully executed by the masses. Therefore, it is scandals that could induce more attention and rethinking on some social problems.

Although the scandal might not be considered as a positive effect on single individual, it sometimes has advantages to the whole society. Take scandals in political fields as an instance. Since the basic responsibility of politicians is to make more welfare and rapid economic development, their behaviors are important. If they abuse their own rights to snatch benefits for themselves, such as corruption, it would bring a loss for the whole society. As a result, the exposure of scandals about corruptions in time is an impetus to promote politician’s conducts more scrupulous and prevent misconducts. Similarly, in academic field, scandals also have some positive effects. The exposure of plagiarism will improve the academic style. The reveal of falsifying data will promote more precise behaviors in experiments. Hence, scandals always indicate some problems and promote the whole society to develop toward a more valuable way.

Admittedly, it is true that scandal, a two side-sword to both single individuals and the whole society, has negative effects. The scandal of Clinton is a good example to support this view. Although public forgave President Clinton in the end, since it was only a misconduct in his personal life, the investigation of the personal scandal wasted tax-payer a huge amount of money without contribution to the society or people. Therefore, scandals sometimes may negative to the society and people. However, if we can effective utilize the positive side of scandals while avoid the negative effects of them, scandals can be useful.
       
To sum up, it is important to people reconsider some existing but always being neglected problems through the exposure of scandals. People should also learn to tell positive effects from negative effects and make social progress through the reconsidering. (575 words)


melissa重出江湖后的第一篇,50分钟写的,不过发烧,晕!
今天又用了1个小时改文法,继续发烧,更晕!
:mad:

大家掐!

gdhdannyUID: 125843

The scandal, always regarded as having negative effect on a person, sometimes could induce more attention on ordinary people and generate related discussions about problems engendering the scandal, while the result is difficult to be produced by speakers or reformers. As for the function of scandals, I think it is a two-side（two-edged） sword which have both positive and negative to the whole society.
开头不错

Scandals, whether in politics or academia realms, always focus more public attention on related problems and produce discussions in ways that speakers and reformers have difficulties to achieve. Although there is propaganda about the conduct of plagiarism should be condemned in many years, especially in China, most people do not really pay attention on（to） it because they took this idea into account that（take into account that?后面又是个定语从句，晕） it is a common sense that has no special value to be overemphasis. As a consequence, this problem has not really been recognized until recently when the scandal has been revealed by media that a famous professor of a top Chinese university plagiarized a foreign paper in order to attain his academic achievement. If there had not been（Had it not been） this scandal, the field of academia, even the whole society, would not have impetus on reconsidering the style（？） in academia, which concentrates on pursuing reputations and high social states, rather than doing researches. Another example in politics field（in the field of politics或者in politics） is Nixon's Watergate scandal. After the exposure of this scandal, one result was（the） president's abdication. Another outcome, regarding as an important effect on this scandal, was an intensive discussion about personal credit, which was seemed as（seemed） a general accepted conduct by the speaker and reformer's propaganda, but not fully executed by the masses. Therefore, it is scandals that could induce more attention and rethinking on some social problems.
分析得很好，意思连贯

Although the scandal might not be considered as a positive effect on single individual, it sometimes has advantages to the whole society. Take scandals in political fields as an instance. Since the basic responsibility of politicians is to make more welfare and rapid economic development, their behaviors（behavior可数么？我也记不大清了） are important. If they abuse their own rights to snatch benefits for themselves, such as corruption, it would bring a loss for the whole society. As a result, the exposure of scandals about corruptions in time is an impetus to promote politician’s conducts more scrupulous and prevent misconducts. （写得好，分类讨论后面还有总结，结构完整）Similarly, in academic field, scandals also have some positive effects. The exposure of plagiarism will improve the academic style. The reveal of falsifying data will promote more precise behaviors in experiments. Hence, scandals always indicate some problems and promote the whole society to develop toward a more valuable way.

Admittedly, it is true that scandal, a two side-sword（？） to both single individuals and the whole society, has negative effects. The scandal of Clinton is a good example to support this view. Although public forgave President Clinton in the end, since it was only a misconduct（word里这里是绿线） in his personal life, the investigation of the personal scandal wasted tax-payer a huge amount of money without contribution to the society or people. Therefore, scandals sometimes may（be） negative to the society and people. However, if we can effective（effectively） utilize the positive side of scandals while avoid the negative effects of them, scandals can be useful.（例子和分析很漂亮，观点到位）

To sum up, it is important to（for） people（to） reconsider some existing but always being（不用being） neglected problems through the exposure of scandals. People should also learn to tell positive effects from negative effects and make social progress through the reconsidering. (575 words)

最近生病的人比较多，大家都注意身体呦。
如果题目只有前半句，这篇文章是相当出色的。看看后半句话，为scandal的讨论范围作了限定：focus our attention on problems。这样一来，第二个body的讨论就有问题了。如果把丑闻让政治家廉洁改称让人们意识到腐败问题，就落到点子上了。还有后面的学术领域也是同样的问题。
Keep on working and take care!

lovebrianUID: 157127

我现在很不清醒~~~先去吃饭 再吃药~~看看回来能不能把坑填上

九月爱上乒乓球UID: 151821

melissa要注意身体, 不要趴在桌上睡,不要在教室睡.
熬夜要喝热水
平时要多喝水
少吃油荤!

xqmelissaUID: 140370

最初由 九月爱上乒乓球 发布
[B]melissa要注意身体, 不要趴在桌上睡,不要在教室睡.
熬夜要喝热水
平时要多喝水
少吃油荤! [/B]

谢谢九月
我不是在教室睡觉,就是在宿舍的桌子上睡的
:(
懒得爬上床了
结果,结果,唉!

你也快考了,千万注意身体啊!

xqmelissaUID: 140370

谢谢gdhdanny!

恩,帮我改的语言问题都很对,谢谢!写的时候太着急,想不起来怎么把句子写的漂亮
:(

如果题目只有前半句，这篇文章是相当出色的。看看后半句话，为scandal的讨论范围作了限定：focus our attention on problems。这样一来，第二个body的讨论就有问题了。如果把丑闻让政治家廉洁改称让人们意识到腐败问题，就落到点子上了。还有后面的学术领域也是同样的问题。

这个问题嘛,我是认为题目中的两句话,更重要的是前面一句,所以重点放到了第一句上,而focus our attention on problems在BODY1中提了一下就过去了
不过,你的建议不错,我再去想想

sniper613UID: 147372

先挖坑,一会来填

sniper613UID: 147372

JJ，注意身体啊，为了ETS不值得哈。希望快好起来，一起杀G去
Issue 185
Scandals—whether in politics, academia, or other areas—can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.


The scandal, always regarded as having negative effect on a person, sometimes could induceattract 不好吗？ more attention onfrom ordinary people and generate related discussions about problems engendering the scandal, while the result is difficult to be produced by speakers or reformers. As for the function of scandals, I think it is a two-side sword which have both positive and negative to the whole society.

Scandals, whether in politics or academia realms, always focus more public attention on related problems and produce discussions in ways that speakers and reformers have difficulties to achieve. Although there is propaganda 〔口语〕宣传；宣传计划；宣传方法；传播。 about the conduct of plagiarism should be condemned in many years, especially in China, most people do not really pay attention on it because they took this idea into account that it is a common sense that has no special value to be overemphasis. 不对噢，作弊者通杀无论，很多学校都这样的，怎么会不重视呢？ As a consequence, this problem has not really been recognized until recently when the scandal has been revealed by media that a famous professor of a top Chinese university plagiarized a foreign paper in order to attain his academic achievement. 意思错了，应该是学术腐败，我记得国外有个人伪造试验数据被曝光，名字我一会查查先 If there had not been this scandal, the field of academia, even the whole society, would not have impetus on reconsidering the style in academia, which concentrates on pursuing reputations and high social states, rather than doing researches. 不要从反面说，给人的感觉是false dilemma，从正面说scandal的作用加强了什么什么的就可以了 Another example in politics field is Nixon's Watergate scandal. 呵呵~~几乎写这篇的都用了这个例子噢 After the exposure of this scandal, one result was president's abdication. Another outcome, regarding as an important effect on this scandal, was an intensive discussion about personal credit, which was seemed as a general accepted conduct by the speaker and reformer's propaganda, but not fully executed by the masses. Therefore, it is scandals that could induce more attention and rethinking on some social problems.

Although the scandal might not be considered as a positive effect on single individual 你并没有阐述啊！跟你的上段几乎没有联系 , it sometimes has advantages to the whole society. Take scandals in political fields as an instance. Since the basic responsibility of politicians is to make more welfare and rapid economic development, their behaviors are important. If they abuse their own rights to snatch benefits for themselves, such as corruption, it would bring a loss for the whole society. As a result, the exposure of scandals about corruptions in time is an impetus to promote politician’s conducts more scrupulous and prevent misconducts. Similarly, in academic field, scandals also have some positive effects. The exposure of plagiarism will improve the academic style. The reveal of falsifying data will promote more precise behaviors in experiments. Hence, scandals always indicate some problems and promote the whole society to develop toward a more valuable way. 你不觉得和上段重复吗？除了加入了一个corruption

Admittedly, it is true that scandal, a two side-sword to both single individuals and the whole society, has negative effects. The scandal of Clinton is a good example to support this view. Although public forgave President Clinton in the end, since it was only a misconduct in his personal life, the investigation of the personal scandal wasted tax-payer a huge amount of money without contribution to the society or people. 美国人可不这么看，这里面牵涉的问题太多了，司法独立，个人诚实，媒体炒作，没你说的那么简单就是浪费钱的事 Therefore, scandals sometimes may negative to the society and people. However, if we can effective utilize the positive side of scandals while avoid the negative effects of them, scandals can be useful. 例子不好，Clinton and Monica Lewinsky的事情，很多人还是认为调查是有必要的。你应该举一些诽谤之类的丑闻，对当事人造成的损失无法弥补。并且你这段应该放在正文第一段

To sum up, it is important to people reconsider some existing but always being neglected problems through the exposure of scandals. People should also learn to tell positive effects from negative effects and make social progress through the reconsidering. (575 words)
把文章的段落顺序得换换，例子也不太合适

xqmelissaUID: 140370

谢谢sniper613！

意思错了，应该是学术腐败，我记得国外有个人伪造试验数据被曝光，名字我一会查查先

你说的是BELL实验室，不过我说的是北大的教授抄袭，不是一码事啊

不要从反面说，给人的感觉是false dilemma，从正面说scandal的作用加强了什么什么的就可以了

就是正面说不出来才写的反面的啊
:(

不觉得和上段重复吗？除了加入了一个corruption

第一段我写的是题目的第二句话，现在转为第一句话的阐述了，是As for the function of scandals, I think it is a two-side sword which have both positive and negative to the whole society.
的扩展啊

美国人可不这么看，这里面牵涉的问题太多了，司法独立，个人诚实，媒体炒作，没你说的那么简单就是浪费钱的事

这个就是我在国外待了好几年，基本西化了的GG给我改的话

不过这篇的确写的很一般，唉！
状态找不回来了！