挺好的啊~还有看到楼主问关于开头的问题,以前外教上作文课时教了我们一种开头的方法:hook(一个小例子或者提出问题等,目的是吸引读者)+ general idea(作文主题,在托福中我想就是要表明立场了)+specific ideas(即下面body段的分论点),因为外国人可能喜欢直观一点的东西,希望对楼主有帮助:D
哈哈太感谢你啦还来帮我改~~~么么大
1.Nowadays, there [are] thousands kinds of profession for people to choose, undoubtedly, people [will choose choosing,最好分成两句] the most suitable job in view of the work environment, the company’s reputation, characteristic of the boss and the salary. 这里改的不是很懂。。。are括起是删掉还是?后面choosing是怎么改?然后分成两句咋分。。?