Kssandra-5月作文练习

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tesolchina 发表于 2015-5-8 14:01
你有没有看我博客276楼的思路 感觉这道题分领域不太行得通 因为这里的教育应该是泛指而非专业学科的训练  ...

嗯嗯开始写之前看过的，但是分教育的阶段写的话还不知道要找什么样的例子（其实好像三种写法都不知道要找什么样的例子。。。）

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Kssandra 发表于 2015-5-9 06:22
嗯嗯开始写之前看过的，但是分教育的阶段写的话还不知道要找什么样的例子（其实好像三种写法都不知道要找 ...

我昨天想这道题感觉可以从formal education的几个特点来支持原命题
第一正式教育是一种大规模的标准化教育 不同于home schooling 因此面临不同的背景、兴趣、特质的学生接受同样的训练的问题  这不利于个人的发展  

第二正式教育尤其是到了大学之后是一种专业的训练 导致分工过细 见树不见森林 将人异化为工具

第三正式教育往往反映主流意识形态 是统治阶级巩固和合法化其政权的工具  对人的独立思考是一种威胁  

感觉这个思路好像比较好展开 你可以试试

另外 278楼增加了一些句型分析 一定要看看哦 ~~~~   

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帮你加了权限 免得被ETS检索了

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tesolchina 发表于 2015-5-14 10:02
帮你加了权限 免得被ETS检索了

王老师，ETS检索是怎么回事？他们是会搜网上的文章然后列为抄袭库里面？？

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Issue 17

Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

这个题目想了好些天，觉得入手的难点就在于题目很宽泛，而文章需要有一个重点；并且很多可以展开的思路其实并不好写。借鉴了王老师的思路，但是觉得第一段的展开还是有些不够具体和有说服力。


我在想另外一个思路，可以部分同意这个观点，认为formal education本身是没有问题的，本意是为了set minds free，但是问题是formal education采取了考试制度，而考试制度极大地restrain minds。相当于把目前这个提纲的第二段展开为两个部分，然后第一段写formal education保证了所有的公民都能收到基本的教育，学会质疑和批判的精神，而不容易被歪理邪说蛊惑。

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tesolchina 发表于 2015-5-14 10:02
帮你加了权限 免得被ETS检索了

太好啦，谢谢您！我之前开贴的时候想设置一个阅读权限来的，但是好像是我的用户组不能设置

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无敌浩克One 发表于 2015-5-14 10:39
王老师，ETS检索是怎么回事？他们是会搜网上的文章然后列为抄袭库里面？？

好像是会的，会检索网上的资源然后和考试文章比对

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Issue 18

The well-being of a society is enhanced when many of its people question authority.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

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Issue 19

Governments should focus on solving the immediate problems of today rather than on trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

这个题目基本上没什么问题~
准备例子的过程中学会了很多天天见到但是不知道英语该怎么说的词儿，比如 能源危机~

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Kssandra 发表于 2015-5-14 12:16
Issue 19

Governments should focus on solving the immediate problems of today rather than on tryin ...

好奇怪 我设了权限 然后你回复之后又没有了

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tesolchina 发表于 2015-5-14 12:19
好奇怪 我设了权限 然后你回复之后又没有了

好像我第一次回复之后还有的。。。

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Issue 20

Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. Others believe that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.

Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.


这篇和issue15一样，例子直接照搬了，最后一段的主题句做了一些修改。

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Issue 21

Laws should be flexible enough to take account of various circumstances, times, and places.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

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Kssandra 发表于 2015-5-15 11:11
Issue 20

Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and int ...

个人觉得似乎有些和题目内容脱离，题目问的是和field of study有关 但是看了你的主旨句 好像都是在谈工作

我的想法是：
1. The interest to a certain subject is helpful for students to focus on the study they choose;

2. With talent, students are more likely to succeed in the field they choose to study;

3. In addition to interest and talent, availability of jobs is also an important factor that students should take into consideration as they choose field to study in college.  For one thing, for the students who do not have too much talents and interest in study and need a job after graduation, whether the field of study they intend to choose is related to future working opportunity is significant.   

另外 这个题目我也想讨论一下 因为题目说倾向哪个观点 所以在分论点上是不是用2个分论点来照顾自己倾向的view 会不会也有对于题目所谓的倾向性要求的呼应呢？

重新修改了一下

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sokiller 发表于 2015-5-15 21:34
个人觉得似乎有些和题目内容脱离，题目问的是和field of study有关 但是看了你的主旨句 好像都是在谈工 ...

你的2和我的提纲里面的第一段是一个意思，不过我好像不太确定你的1和3具体想表达什么意思。。

我写的时候是1,2在讲第一个点，3在讲第二个点。我想表达的态度是更加支持前一个观点，但是我认为前后两个观点并不矛盾，可以兼容。我觉得这种题目态度肯定是要表明的，但是如果两个观点都同意也应该是可以的吧？只要两个观点不是互相矛盾，可以自圆其说就好？