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13) Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

回顾一下前天的issue 15 根据lucrative career来选专业的提议我提出的反对理由包括未必能实现lucrative career以及这样做的后果即没兴趣等等也就是说针对题目提出的的proposal  我指出这个proposal本身的问题（比如不切实际）或者可能导致的后果

今天这一篇我的思路不太一样因为是要支持这个proposal 所以从三方面讨论这样做的好处分别是对学习的好处对公民发展的好处以及对职业发展的好处  这里的技巧是需要想出三个和题目的主题相关的方面这道题的主题是大学教育我们就要考虑大学关注的问题是什么大学的价值在哪里  这里提出的学业公民和职业都是大学教育价值的体现
如果在这三方面有好处这个proposal就值得支持

要求还是一样的按照范文的思路限时写作

In today’s competitive world, holding a college degree can no longer guarantee good job placement or  career success.  Some people argue that students should be required to take courses outside their major area to broaden their perspectives and better prepare for future careers.  Others believe that such requirement is not necessary as courses outside students’ field will not be helpful for future jobs.  In my opinion, taking courses outside one’s speciality can benefit one’s academic study, development of citizenship as well as future career.

一开始先介绍背景提出这个建议可能的动机是就业问题
提出某些人的观点
再提出另一些人相反的观点
最后提出自己的观点注意分三方面赞成

对于只求4分的同学未必需要花时间在介绍背景上


To begin with, taking courses from other field can help students to study their own majors more effectively by introducing the students different perspectives and methods from other disciplines.  Take the students majoring in English and linguistics as examples. By taking courses in computer science, English majors can learn basic programming skills and latest technologies in natural language processing which can help them to explore interesting issues in English and linguistics based on corpus.  Through courses on psychology, English students can also study how learning efficiencies were affected by different factors and better understand the issues in second language acquisition.  As the examples clearly illustrate, taking courses from related disciplines can help student to study their own majors more effectively.

主题句是强调其他课程可以介绍不同的视角和方法这个观点在不同的题目里都有用到
举例指出英语和语言学的学生可以受益于计算机的学习
再谈学习心理学的好处  还是英语专业学生
最后从例子总结出前面的观点
这是中间段的基本套路

Courses in other fields can also help students become more responsible citizens capable of making informed decisions on different social issues.  Arts and humanities students can gain more insights into how technologies transformed the society and what ethical and political issues we have to deal with by taking some courses in science and engineering.  Science and technology majors can also better understand the current debates on different political issues by taking courses in history, economics and political science.  The effective operation of our democratic society depends on the collective wisdom of well-educated citizens.  The proposed requirement of courses from different fields can contribute to cultivating better citizens for the society.

教育的目的不仅是学业还包括公民的培养
从人文学生和理工科学生两方面展开讨论  （这是一个简单分类讨论的框架，由此可见分类讨论不仅可以用在全文的框架安排，也可以用于段落的构建）
最后总结

Some people may argue that no courses should be required unless such courses are beneficial for students’ future jobs.  In fact, many courses outside one’s discipline can be helpful for students’ career development.  Taking writing-intensive courses in history and philosophy, for example, can help business students to sharpen their writing skills, which are essential for effective communication in any jobs they may take.  Programming skills that math students can develop through computer science courses will also enable the math graduates to apply their math models to big data in their workplace by developing appropriate computer programs.  On the other hand, it is rather short-sighted to focus on the direct benefits for jobs that students may gain from courses.  After all, universities are not merely vocational training schools.  Students should be encouraged to pursue goals that are not career-oriented.

回应题目要求关于挑战
回应挑战
举例说明
继续举例说明
批评挑战背后的假设
跟进批评
进一步总结

In conclusion, I believe that requiring students to take courses outside their fields is beneficial for their academic studies as well as their development of citizenship. While it is also helpful for their future career development, this concern should not be the only consideration when we make decisions.

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请王老师批阅，自评稍后附上，感觉写的更上手了。谢谢老师！辛苦了！

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发表于 2015-7-15 12:45:06 |只看该作者

另外，希望老师把每周的练习放在一个帖子里，让大家能方便的查阅，怕有些考友找不到这个任务。我是翻阅了考友的习作时发现后面的帖子里有老师4天以前就留下的作业。觉得把这个任务放在主题贴里更方便一些：https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1826310-1-1.html

现在这个帖子已经被我顶起来了，大家就能看到了。