请教几句话的翻译，救命啊

dannylUID: 121665

请原谅我在作文论坛和这里发了两遍，因为我真的快急疯了
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( t$ H! z3 A+ J这两个意思我用英文文表达不清：
  C' \/ a# `2 \) X: a: D1 E1.婚姻只能建立在互相信任的基础上。
2.尽管男人常说男女平等，但他们觉得自己放纵理所当然的，却不允许妻子的背叛。（也许这一句该拆成好几句来写才能表达清楚意思吧。）

, p# e  T  t2 A( C% H第二句我写的是：Although some men often say the equality of the genders,they think them indulge naturally,actually do not permit wives' betrayal.
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但老师给的评语看得我都想收拾包袱回中国了：
8 L3 u- }. f6 J3 r% Z# |Your thesis statemnet is so ungrammatical, I can barely make sense of it. Please try again, putting your idea into idiomatic English.




; E3 e4 R/ V2 y% ]这学期刚拿了一门english literature course（第一次拿这种正经英文课，慌~~~~~~~~~~以前都是上过家家一样的ESLl课）,老师叫我们读I.B. SINGER的短篇小说The Third One,有哪位好心人读过了，可以给点好建议啊？有关thesis statement 的，或者别的什么都行。先谢谢了

KaliUID: 110664

1.婚姻只能建立在互相信任的基础上。
Marriage can only be built upon the foundation of mutual trust.

2.尽管男人常说男女平等，但他们觉得自己放纵理所当然的，却不允许妻子的背叛。（也许这一句该拆成好几句来写才能表达清楚意思吧。）
Although men often pay lip service to the idea of gender equality, they tend to feel that while it is natural for them to indulge themselvs outside of marital bonds while denying the same indulgence to their wives.

$ K$ c( g+ F$ w% z4 {% y/ hBy the way, personal suggestion: Your thesis statement is too one-sided. Better qualify it with "some".

whimsy1115UID: 145577

1.Marriage can only be established on the basis of mutual trust.

, w0 _( f0 m% F# L4 u' V& W/ u# f7 w2.Men,more than often,hail feminism,but they tend to take their own overindulgence
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6 r5 p5 g# L# d# S3 V个人意见,仅供参考.版权所有,仿冒必究.
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2 i: m5 b; A% [$ A: w: E+ n' q个人认为你的老师的评语算是很客气的了,没必要动不动就想回家.如果是我,就算老师骂我是白痴,我也不会回家的.我会留下来,我要证明给他看,他才是真正的白痴.当然现实生活中不大可能出现这种事的,打个比方而已.
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0 a# a6 H% Q2 F( t我现在还在中国,所以我希望每个留学的同胞都能珍惜留学的机会.如果实在觉得很辛苦,不妨想想还有那么多中国学生在为一个留学机会而奋斗,或许你会觉得自己还是挺幸福的.对我来说,留学是一种享受,享受困难,享受艰辛,享受孤独,享受成功,享受失败,享受笑容,享受泪水.真想出去好好享受一下阿......
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btw,我没看过The Third One，也没有什么关于thesis statement的好建议，只有三个字：Practice makes perfect.

whimsy1115UID: 145577

最初由 Kali 发布
Although men often pay lip service to the idea of gender equality, they tend to feel that while it is natural for them to indulge themselvs outside of marital bonds while denying the same indulgence to their wives.
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; m: X. ?- Y' i+ [+ A& j. t以下省略...... [/B]

个人认为要把第一个while删掉，不知道对不对？

KaliUID: 110664

Oh yeah you are right. I revised that sentence but forgot to take out all the old parts. :P