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Famous people-----POP STAR, JAYCHOU

My favorite pop star is Jaychou, he is a really talented musical composer and singer born in Taiwan. I followed him since i was ten, I love him because his every song is FABULOUS! The melody and the specially chinese style of his songs are really amazing. For example, from the point of the style, he is the first one to combine chinese ancient instrument and the ancient beautiful poems into most of his songs, so we can not only listen to the classical melody, but also can imagine how the poems discribe. I have to say this feeling is fantastic!
Besides, some of his lyrics are telling us to be good children, such as the song called” follow your mother’s words” ,in this song he tell us how difficult a mother rise her child alone, and we should be greater and greater to make our mothers be proud of us. It is really special to write something we should do in a pop song.
And despite of his songs, his charicteristic is also appealing to me. He is a really dogged man on his hobbies and career. Although his parents devorced when he was very young, which also made him upset, he didn’t give up his music, years later, he becomes the most populer singer in China. I’m really appreciate this kind of spirit.
So this is all about my favorite famous people.


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