issue同主题写作-第一类 8月8日-9日

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As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

结构第三种：Through classification of key terms in the issue statement

TP:
Nowadays we can see numerous people on the subway playing with their cellphone, or working with the PC in the cafe.As technology impedes gradually into our life, people sometimes worries about ability will deteriorate. However, I suppose we need to consider this issue on a case-by-case basis. While I agree that people who let technology solve every problems for them, their capacity will deteriorate, I don’t think people who treat own actions most important and technology only a helper will deteriorate their capacity.

PT1:People who let technology solve every problems for them.
   They regard technology as a problem-solver in all without considering anything by themselves.Then their capacity of doing things independently will deteriorate.
Eg.lazy students who want to use calculator to compute in stead of doing by themselves.
   ——losing their ability of computing.

PT2：Yet, people who treat own actions most important and technology only a helper won’t deteriorate their capacity.
     They concentrate on practicing their own capacity on solving problems, making technology only a assistant factor
Eg. Researchers use technological equipment to get the data they need, while observe the data to see the relationship in their own brain.

PT3：To a great degree, technology still enhance the ability of human.
     It extends the limit of people’s capacity.
Eg.The spacecraft allow people to discover the universe.
   The high-tech treating toward severe diseases survive so many people.

    In a nutshell, it’s not the technology that count for the deterioration of human’s capacity. Virtually, using the technology as well as thinking and taking actions independently are the key to the problem.

疑问：虽然想分情况写，但突然感觉也分不出三类人来，因此PT1/PT2写了两类人，PT3写科技还是会促进人类能力发展，不知这样行文是否可以？
还是一战小白，最近也是第一次写outline，还请各位大神不吝赐教！


点评22楼
1）____网友提纲的框架是否合理？
个人认为结构很合理。关于层主说的想写反，不知道如果用前两段写正的两类人，然后最后一段写反，这样是否可以？当然这样开头可能就不是按三类人分了。个人觉得，第三段可以说有人觉得conveniences和luxuries不好，简述一下，然后用例子进行反驳，这样不知是否可行？

2）____网友提纲所用的例子是否合适？
个人觉得层主的例子非常出彩，第一个例子很有时事感，且如果在细节中加上数据应该是评分人喜闻乐见的；第二三个例子是具体人的实例，可见层主积累深厚。这是我想学习的部分。

3）____网友开头段语言方面有哪些问题？  
个人认为整体很好~但是也许可以积累一些复杂表达（语法）和同意表达（词汇）来再提高一下？比如说“The conveniences like a tool to make the life easier and the luxuries also like a tool to make the spirit healthier.”这个句子也许可以写成“The conveniences is like a tool to make the life easier，while the luxuries make our spirit healthier.”虽然我改的也不怎么样233但是感觉替代了“and”，也不用让“like a tool to”出现两次会比较好一点~

遠子wUID: 3788646

26.The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

方法：
Method 3: 根據social role對people進行分類

開頭：
As the contemporary world becomes increasingly prosperous, people on average enjoy a more luxurious and convenient life. Due to technology advancement, people now can rely on abundant information in making decisions about their purchase, voting, and investment. While the majority of the public tend to accept the information they gain uncritically and without reasonable doubt, business and academic elites screen and utilize useful information to enhance their decision-making process. Therefore, whether people lose their critical thinking and independence due to technology improvement actually depends on their social roles.

TS 1: Technology advancement, for example the invention of social media, considerably affects and alters consumers’ purchasing behaviors, beguiling them with fancy but deceivable advertisements and celebrity endorsement.
e.g
-Exploring women’s obsession with beauty, advertisement about cosmetic products usually exaggerate their functions.
-Celebrity endorsement urge consumers to purchase cloths that may not suitable for them.

TS 2: Likewise, information presented on media also influences people’s voting and political behaviors, instigating irrational political activities.
e.g
- During refugee crisis, some news pieces on social media associate all of refugees with terrorists, prompting people to discriminate all the refugees, thus leading to a serious of protests over accepting refugees and the rise of extreme conservative parties in many European countries.

TS 3: However, unlike the indiscriminate public, business and academic elites critically examine the information that they obtain from the Internet. And availability of data enables them to perform objective analysis.
e.g
- They utilize empirical data to analyze stock markets and thus make better predictions
- Rather than critically accept data, they take the reliability of data into consideration and independently make interpretation over the results from data analysis.

点评231楼
1）____网友提纲的框架是否合理？
结构ok。理由沒有太大的問題，很標準的分類不同種people的寫法。

2）____网友提纲所用的例子是否合适？
關於ts1的例子，我覺得students具體一下會不會好一點？比如說是primary school students。
focus一下在early development上面。
calculation如果早期沒有培養好會對之後的數學計算和分析能力造成很大的影響。
在小學和中學一般數學課都要求訓練學生的calculation，做很多複雜的calculation的訓練，但是到大學之後很多時候都是用calculator和excel去解決複雜的算數問題，大家都很“lazy”，也沒必要手算了。
關於ts3，會不會強調具體的capability和skill比較好點？
至少說說enhance astronomers’ ability to discover important findings of universe
or capability to understand the universe and conduct independent researches
強調一下ability 和 independence

3）____网友开头段语言方面有哪些问题？  

我覺得語法有點問題。。。很多句子不太通順，而且用詞也有點簡單。
多練練寫句子和積累用詞會不會好點。 加油啦～～

Dover999UID: 3808377

26. The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

According to above statement, the development of modern science and technology do harm to (or erosion) the capacity of human beings. In my review, it is how we use the advanced technology that counts. More specifically, the appropriate and effective utilization  of high-tech products can help us fulfill a task that is beyond our capacity. However, an abuse of such a product can not enhance or even weaken our capacity. Let me discuss it in detail.
PS1
The services aroused by the modern technology, such as online food ordering, express delivery,  bring great convenient to our life and save a lot of time. However, exceed depend on these services may help us develop a bad habit that makes us more lazy.
PS2
The engineering software, ANSYS for example, can help us solve a lot of problems in the engineering field. Whereas, if one doesn’t understand the mechanism of the software, he or she can not enhance ,even waken, his or her brain capacity though solve complex problems using the software.
PS3
The accessible to Internet almost everywhere makes it possible for us to acquire knowledge freely. However, if everybody depend on existing  knowledge, we would not beyond our ancestors.

困惑，
逻辑上不知道说的通不，还有写作时经常纠结一些语法问题，比如是否该用复数，是否该加定冠词。

kxyCynthiaUID: 3795856

91 The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

The speaker asserts that the increase of people’s efficiency and leisure time is the original goal of technological advancement. My view is that this assertion is true only in some cases. There are various of targets of the development of technology, which means that the target that increase of people’s efficiency and leisure time is just one aspect.

TS1:
Sometimes technology does can offer people more free time because there are some methods currently provided by advanced technology replace human being do mechanical works.
example：Industry revolution, domestic robot
TS2:
On the other hand, technological advancement diminishes leisure time. People use additional leisure time for work rather than rest.
example：The booming of communication software and office software leads to a trend that people can work whenever and wherever, even in weekends.
TS3:
There are far more problems that technology can deal with.
example：disease, education, communication
自己的问题：希望楼下的小伙伴点拨一下语言，我的语法和句型不太好
评价楼上33楼：
1.很认同topic
2.但是三个分论点本质上是同一个意思，只不过是按照不同的三个领域展开的，因此可以归为一段来说，之后以三个领域举例
3. 我个人的意见是可以按照第一段让步说明科技给人们带来的便利，第二段说明虽然有便利但不便更多并且说第一个原因，第三段说第二个原因
（个人意见啦不一定对）

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完整题目

1. The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

提纲如下：
开头段：
speaker认为当今时代的人们在现代舒适安逸的生活之中已经无法成为强大独立的个体，诚然，现代科技的发达确实给现代人带来了许多“富贵病”，但是不能否认的是科技的发展对人类而言有着更为意义重大的作用，在更大程度上让每个个体更加强大和独立。

主体第一段：
现代科技和高度组织化社会使人在精神和肉体上退化。
1.“旧世界”
2.现代社会

主体第二段：

科技作为现金生产力的重要标志，对于推动社会发展有着重要作用。

第三段：
从大局范围上看，每个时代都有得有失，大体上，科技给人类带来的便利从目前看来还是利大于弊，有利于每个个体的生存和发展。

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1. As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.


Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

我写提纲时搭建框架所用的方法是第1种  添加原题中没有的新概念，具体来说，定义了ability to think. 并根据定义将人群分成thinker与follower，证明科技只是改变了人们思考的内容，而非方法和能力，并且由于科技的进步，人们可以从事自己擅长的领域，做个更好的thinker；科技使获取教育更加容易，提供机会让更多的follower变成thinker。


我的提纲如下
首段全文：

Everyone thinks. The one perpetual thing I could recall is the restless human minds, regardless of whether it is in ancient times or in the twenty-first century. When we evaluating the ability of humans to think, I figure we are referring to whether the thinking delivers results, whether it provides new perspectives or ways to solve problems. I regard people with those abilities as thinkers, and the others followers. Technology, as the result of thinking, has changed the world utterly. Nowadays we astonishingly rely on technology to solve problems, that one might say it would deteriorate our abilities to think.（TS） Yet I believe, technology has only changed the subjects of thinking, but never thinking itself. Instead, it enables more followers evolved to be thinkers via providing opportunities in vast new area and variety forms of education, which are only possible because of technology.


ts1: The technology advancements only changed the subjects of what people think, not how and absolutely not how well. People’s mind never stops. It is the nature of human minds and the primary incentive of the emergency of science and technology.
Example：
from how to hunt the biggest deer to how to eat balanced and healthy;
from wondering what’s the other side of earth looked like to what’s the other side of universe looked like;
from how to send the massage to another city to how to avoid the junky massages from all over the world.
……
ts2: People are unique individuals born with different strength. Technology frees men’s time from tedious repetitive work, gets men’s minds off the struggle of living, and provide the infinite kinds of specialties for each individual’s mind to flourish.
Example:
Career choices old times with nowadays: farmer, craftsman etc compared to designer, IT engineer, doctors of dozens different specializations, consultants, lawyers, etc.

ts3: Great thinkers are needed to be nurtured. The ability to think is highly affected by education, which become more and more accessible due to the progress of technology.
Example:
tutorial from youtube
khan academy
lectures from world renowned universities 




关于这个提纲的写作我有以下感想或困惑 


提纲用了很久，但仍然觉得有些混乱，没讲清楚，还请王老师和大家指正。





我来点评其他网友  评价楼层 楼上 35 
楼层： 



1）_35楼_网友提纲的框架是否合理？
总体评价：提纲仅重复陈述了观点，无对观点的分析和证明。
首先架构未采用王老师推荐的某一种架构，从论证角度讲，开头段提出观点，但只做了观点陈述，并未给出支持观点的理由。


主体段 1 提出科技使人退化，由于未列出具体例子，例子是否合适无法判断，此段与文章观点相反，并没体现出让步段的作用
主体段2 论证科技对推动社会发展有重要作用，此处有些偏题，观点是科技对个人发展的优劣，而非社会发展，若想通过社会发展进而论证个体发展，需要增加内容说明
主体段3 仍然是重复陈述观点，并未对观点进行说明或者证明



2）____网友提纲所用的例子是否合适？ 

无具体例子



3）____网友开头段语言方面有哪些问题？  
中文框架

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As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.


Framework
我写提纲时搭建框架所用的方法是第1种  定义了人的不同种类，具体来说，......

我的提纲如下

开头段全文：
The development of human society is indispensable to the advance of technology. Some socialists contend that technology is a dual sword, which limits our ability to think for ourselves despite of the convenience and efficiency it provides for us. However, in my opinion, it is the user of technology that matters. Adolescent people totally rely on technology, but conservative people tend to rely on themselves to make a decision. Different from the two types, rational and pragmatic people know how to think for themselves better with the help of technology.

主题句1 When encountering difficulties, indolent people may resort to the Internet to find a possible answer without evaluating the effect of the solution.  
具体例子或细节
Some people believe in rumors in the friend circle in WeChat without examining their reliability.

主题句2 Conservative people dislike popular techniques. They rely more on themselves instead. As a result, they practice their mind to be more efficient.
具体例子或细节
Nolan, the famous movie director, hates cellphones and abandon the use of them during the shooting of a movie. Without the disturb of unnecessary technology, he produces fabulous works.

主题句3 Rational and pragmatic people know how to efficiently use technology to help him make up a better mind.
具体例子或细节
When playing with AlphaGo, Ke Jie realizes self-improvement. The development of computer technology helps Ke break though his limit.

关于这个提纲的写作我有以下感想或困惑
写得有点不太扣题，例子没有想到特别合适的。需要增加积累以便考场brainstorming。



我写的全文 （建议在修改提纲后再写）



我来点评其他网友
楼层： 7楼

1）____网友提纲的框架是否合理？
P2和P1有重合，可以更加明确一下不同的好处。

2）____网友提纲所用的例子是否合适？
P2的innovative ways感觉用FB，Twitter等作例子更合适，手机等通讯工具可以用来论证技术突破了人与人之间空间时间的界限。

3）____网友开头段语言方面有哪些问题？  
TS段首句用现在完成时。中间断句。As we step in the technology age, our communication methods have been greatly transformed. Apart from letters and post offices, efficient social networks such as Facebook, skype and Gmail have been introduced into our life
Thus, a heated debate arise→Therefore, a heated debate arises.
Personally speaking, I believe the pros that technology provided us in communication outweigh its cons. →Personally speaking, I believe the pros that technology provides us with more opportunities in communication outweigh its cons.
P1 三单
P2 过去时与P1P3时态不一致。
P3 三单
Technology never reduce (reduces) opportunities for human interaction , rather , it (is) conducive to the accumulation of communication 反
-we communicate with strangers on twitter through write (writing) comments on events
建议写完后检查，避免细小失误

Joker—XYZUID: 3508086

33) As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and mysterious.


Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.



我写提纲时搭建框架所用的方法是第3种  进行分类 基础知识 新科技知识 专业知识

我的提纲如下：
With the developing of technology and science,knowledge updates more and more quickly than it did before. By using internet, we can find answers of any kinds of problems. However,people may be confused when they are exposed to such a large quantity of information. In my opinion,this phenomenon does not mean things become more complex and mysterious.

开头段全文：


主题句1
People can acquire common knowledge even more easily then before. With the help from technology.
Example:Teachers can help students understand new knowledge with visualized pictures or cartoons.

主题句2
New technologies may be hard to learn ,but them can help improve living quality obviously.
Example:senior people try hard to learn how to use internet,then online shopping is timesaving.And disabled people can shopping without leaving their house.


主题句3
Scientists explore every conner of the world. After solving superficial problems,scientists have to do deep researches to explain the basic rules in different subjects.  
Example:mathematicians try to prove 1+1=2,but it is common sense to children.


关于这个提纲的写作我有以下感想或困惑
举例是否不够具体以及缺乏说服性。
单词过于简单 欢迎指导




我来点评其他网友
楼层： 37

1）____网友提纲的框架是否合理？
定义了人的不同种类可能接近于第三种方法


2）____网友提纲所用的例子是否合适？
第一个 主题是懒人依赖互联网解决问题，不考虑效果，但是例子是轻信朋友圈谣言，可能有点牵强，或者观点变化一下，断网就失去了能力，可能方便举例。



3）____网友开头段语言方面有哪些问题？  
很棒！没有发现。

GoldenStringUID: 3787185

91 The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

我写提纲采用第2种方法，从不同方面角度分析。
我的提纲如下：
TS：It's not wise to bruskly say that the primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time. Just as the words of Joanne Kathleen Rowling: there are 1000 Harry Potters in the brain of 1000 readers.There are various primary goals of technological advancement for different people, such as employers, employees and the goverment.

ts1;For most of emoyers, efficiency means more products, and more products means more money.So the primary goal of technology advancement ,for businessmen, should be to increase wokers efficiency so that they can produce more goods in the same woke-time, which undoubtly Increases the staff's working intensity.
Eg: Foxconn corporation

ts2:For a lot of common employees who have to shoulder heavy burden of mortagage or car loans,the improvement of efficiency contributed by technologyment advancement signifies that they will have more leisure time when they can earn no money to pay their loans and there are more possibilities that they will be unemployed because the corporations don't need a number of employers.
Eg.(感觉有好多例子，但是说不出具体的典型案例）

ts3: For the goverment, the primary goal of tech advancement should emphasise not only the efficiency, the sign of social progress, but also the low unemployment rate which corresponds to the National happiness index.
Eg.(暂时想不到一个比较适合的例子）

困惑：1。写着写着突然又冒出其他角度，比如从教育机构的角度来说，科技进步的首要目标是提供更加完善的教育服务，可以为学生不受时间，地点的限制提供优质的教育服务。但是又觉得教育机构这个角度和前面两个（employer& employee)不相关，太突兀了。
      2。目前还没有积累足量的论据例子干货，说不出具体的典型例子材料。

点评：34楼
一）TS大纲主要是说：科技进步的目标是提高效率和增加人们休闲时间只是一个方面。科技进步有很多不同目标。
ts1:具体论证科技进步可以提高效率。
ts2:科技进步会减少人们的休闲时间！！！
ts3:科技进步还有其他作用，医疗，教育，聊天等方面。

这篇Issue 题目是说科技进步的主要目标是提高效率从而使人们有更多休闲时间。然后问你是否认同这一观点。作者的观点似乎是科技进步有许多不同目标。这样我觉得没有直接回复问题，感觉有点模糊！！


作者大纲已经说了科技进步可以使人们休闲时间增多，可是ts2又反驳了这点！！自相矛盾啊。
二）作者例子挺不错的！
三）觉得作者所用句式挺丰富的。

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33) As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and mysterious.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.


109)Some people believe that scientific discoveries have given us a much better understanding of the world around us. Others believe that science has revealed to us that the world is infinitely more complex than we ever realised.

Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.



开头段：
科技和教育业的发展让我们更容易获得知识，应用这些知识我们能够让我们的生活更智能更方便，我们也能更好的理解世界.但有些人认为即使获得了更多的知识，世界却变得越来越复杂和神秘。我则持相反观点，让世界复杂的是我们自己，并不是我们获得的知识
With the advance of technology and education, we can attain knowledge more easily. By applying those knowledge we acquire, we manage to understand the world better. Artificial intelligence facilitates our daily life and free other time from troublesome housework and inefficient decision making. However, considerable number of people argue that we human being is enslaved by our knowledge which turn simple into complex, clear into unsolved mystery. However, I hold the opposite point of view.------what complex our lives is ourselves
rather the knowledge we acquired. World is becoming more and more comprehensible than ever in the history.
TS1：
Knowledge from different field does solve problem. enable us to broaden horizon and solve confusing problem few years before.
Example: 排比 不同领域/不同时代的知识
Doctor ： invent vaccine to prevent flu and liver disease。 patients needn’t to suffer from the pain; Also, explore the main cause of disease to kill it in the coddle. In contrast, ancient people or people from merely few years ago, always treat severe disease as the curse of devil
Engineer &Astrnomy : people used to think the earth is the center of the universe and the world is flat-----the development of astronomy and increasing number of non-academic individual come to learn about astronomy;
flying like a bird has been beyond humanbeings’ imagination until dynamic physic is well known to citizen. The wright brothers become the first to view the world 全景
TS2: 学到新的知识的时候，我们也变得更聪明。the whole meaning of us learning knowledge is to enlighten us to confront with next challenge. The essence of the knowledge is to offer the thought and conception of science and life. In other world, by instilling the brandly new knowledge continually, we tend to be more intelligent and insightful.  
TS3:我们懂的更多的时候，会解决就问题产生新问题。但这并不代表事情更加复杂了。发现新问题其实代表着，思路和事情变得更清晰。
至少我们不再会把信仰记挂在虚无的东西上Admittedly, with the old mystery is solved by knowledge we learned, more and more new ones generated. Whereas, it doesn’t necessary mean things are becoming convulted. Actually，when The mystery are discovered, we approach to the truth more   
Astronomy : the milky river     

WhiplashUID: 3759911

Issue 132：

Some people believe that our ever-increasing use of technology significantly reduces our opportunities for human interaction. Other people believe that technology provides us with new and better ways to communicate and connect with one another.

Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.


我写提纲时搭建框架所用的方法是第2种: by considering an issue from different perspectives or in different contexts,具体来说，

T：支持后者，表明科技给我们提供了new and better ways to communicate，然后下切三个方面：1学习中，科技使得学生能access to 世界各地的知名教授老师，从他们那学习知识2工作中，让跨国公司更好地经营3，生活中，使得人们与自己的亲朋好友更好地联络感情。


我的提纲如下

开头段全文（TS）：

The technology, from my perspective, provides people with new and better ways to communicate and connect with one another when people are studying, working and connecting with family and friends.


主题句1(pt1)
First and foremost, technology helps students to access to lots of excellent teachers around the world. As we all know, students today can access to many good study resources through some studying websites such as MOOC.

主题句2(pt2)
具体例子或细节
Besides, many employees in global companies need to negotiate with each other to make sure the whole company run well. Many employees nowadays would like to use Skype to have a video call so that they can communicate with each other.
主题句3(pt3)
具体例子或细节
Last but not least, people always need to contact their family and friends around the world. People can have a video call frequently to keep a good relationship with each other. Or they can talk to their lovers face to face by taking a plane. It won’t be possible without the help of technology.


关于这个提纲的写作我有以下感想或困惑

比较容易展开，但是很多表达写的很糟糕，感觉是自己积累的表达还不够。

我写的全文 （建议在修改提纲后再写）

小人物JoeUID: 3807614

1. As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.


Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

我写提纲采用的是方法2，从过去现在和将来三个时间层面来分析问题

开头段：
  The ability of manipulating tools separates human from animals. At the very beginning, ancient human beings used arrows made of woods to hunt, made  clothes from fur to keep warm and used fire to communicate in the dark. As technology develops, more machines and facilities are created to fill our demanding needs. We create concrete cities to trade not only food but everything we need,we hold fashion shows all around the world to exhibit colorful and comfortable clothes of all kind to keep  warm and out of aesthetic requirements as well and we have  devices like computers and mobile phones to communicate via the information highway transferring diverse information at the light speed through silicon-bridge. Tools to solve problems are  ameliorating,becoming more intelligible and portable , so as the ability of human to solve problems. We are always becoming more capable as we

主题句1：In ancient times, human spent most time to solve problems concerned with fundamental  surviving needs. 古人耕种，大部人不需要学习，大脑利用率少。

主题句2：Now, we pay more attention to science and arts.现在人花很多时间在教育和艺术上，我们解决越来越复杂的科学和社会问题。

主题句3：In the future, artificial intelligence and machine learning will solve most basic problems so we can make decisions more considerately and figure out harder and deeper questions. 人工智能帮助

结尾： 总结一下。Our ability of thinking is actually approving rather than deteriorating.

关于这个提纲的写作我有以下感想或困惑
第一次写，完全不知道该怎么去分析问题，把问题分方向感觉选择很多，自己的时间分法感觉说服力一般，总感觉自己论点没有阐述清楚，没有抓住问题的核心。还有一种第一段把话说完了，后面三段不知道bla bla了些什么。很多意思也表达不出来，有些词汇都是现场查的。


我来点评其他网友
楼层： 37楼

1）____网友提纲的框架是否合理？
框架挺好的，把人分为两类，我也是看了他/她的忽然有灵感把文章分为几类去写，但我觉得作者类别有点少，不够多元，最关键的是，这样会很难写够字数。而且没有结尾，应该只是没写出来，结尾有一句话也会让我这个强迫症舒服一点。

2）____网友提纲所用的例子是否合适？
第一个例子不是很恰当，作者用少数人的例子来论证大类别。当然我觉得主要问题出在分类上，为什么把青少年就归为无脑，这样很难自圆其说的感觉，自己把自己逼上绝路。

3）____网友开头段语言方面有哪些问题？
开头段某些句子太过于绝对，我觉得题目里的问题就出现在过于绝对，所以需要修正。（虽然我没有选择修正，而是取了反，但就是觉得看起来会觉得别扭）开头句子有点不通顺，我觉得这样的问题出现在开头容易给人不好的印象，个人看法，不是打击//

最后，因为第一次写，评论也是第一次写，请多多指教，这位同学非常不好意思，因为今天时间很紧，马上十二点了，我只写了几个批评性的问题，我觉得还是有很多亮点的，下次一定给你一个仔细的评价，非常对不起啦。

PtisenbonandrabbitUID: 3666884

33)As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and mysterious.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

我的提纲采用第2种方法架构  by considering an issue from different perspectives or in different contexts
T：在不同的情况下，知识的获取会带来不同的效果—1对非专业人士来说，科普知识的获得让情况变得更加简单明朗，2对某一领域的专业人士来说，知识获得让他们得以深入地思考，提出更多的疑问，3对于可能进入某一专业领域的学生来说，学习知识一方面让他们对事情有了更加清晰的认知，另一方面，如果他们善于思考的话，也能够发现更多的秘密有待揭开。

开头段全文：
The acquirement of knowledge may have various impacts on people, which mainly depend on the cognition stage where they are and knowledge base they have. Unlike bricklaying, which is a traditional metaphor for learning, the accumulation of knowledge is totally another story. Rather, it is more like building a boat: even the simplest one can float on water, but you can always appreciate farther scenery as you add new parts to it.

TS1: For a layman, the attainment of basic knowledge in a certain field contributes to a better understanding of the situation.  
例子
For those who are not major in medical science, the basics of medical knowledge can provide them with a better understanding of their physical situation and health care they receive. For example, a rough explanation of how a vaccine works usually offers people confidence in vaccines and ultimately encourages positive prevention against illness.

TS2: When it comes to professionals, the acquirement of knowledge usually leads to a deeper thinking about specific questions and these experts are likely to come up with new doubts as well.
例子
The new results of physical experiments may cast doubt on classical physical theories.

TS3: The acquisition of knowledge may also lead to a combination of classification and mystery, as far as students are concerned.
例子
知识的学习一方面解答了学生的疑惑，一方面又给他们带来了新的问题，如果他们仔细思考的话。

关于这个提纲的写作我有以下感想或困惑
3个主要论点，我把人群分为三类，外行人（普通人）、专业人士、以及处于中间阶段的学生。我不太确定这个区分，尤其是把学生这一群体特意拎出来的分法，是否界限清晰？在GRE issue的写作中，对人群的分类是否需要非常清晰的界限，也是让我困惑的地方。

我点评的其他同学：25楼
1）架构合理，这位同学将知识分为三类：科学技术，来自经验的知识，方法

2）举例方面，这位同学将来自经验的知识对应于情感，我觉得或许对应于人与人之间的交往会更为准确。将科学技术对应于学校里得到的知识可能有些不够全面，可能因为我自己主要写的是科技的部分，我会觉得科学知识对不同人差别也很大，所以我觉得，你可以写“除了非常少部分的科学家，科学知识的获得对于大部分人来说，是为了解决实际的问题，所以知识越多，越能够顺利解决问题，让情况变得简单。这样会不会更加全面一些？

justiceklUID: 3803056

33) As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and mysterious.


Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.



我写提纲时搭建框架所用的方法是第3种  进行分类 基础知识 新科技知识 专业知识

我的提纲如下：
With the developing of technology and science,knowledge updates more and more quickly than it did before. By using internet, we can find answers of any kinds of problems. However,people may be confused when they are exposed to such a large quantity of information. In my opinion,this phenomenon does not mean things become more complex and mysterious.

开头段全文：


主题句1
People can acquire common knowledge even more easily then before. With the help from technology.
Example:Teachers can help students understand new knowledge with visualized pictures or cartoons.

主题句2
New technologies may be hard to learn ,but them can help improve living quality obviously.
Example:senior people try hard to learn how to use internet,then online shopping is timesaving.And disabled people can shopping without leaving their house.


主题句3
Scientists explore every conner of the world. After solving superficial problems,scientists have to do deep researches to explain the basic rules in different subjects.  
Example:mathematicians try to prove 1+1=2,but it is common sense to children.


关于这个提纲的写作我有以下感想或困惑
举例是否不够具体以及缺乏说服性。
单词过于简单 欢迎指导




我来点评其他网友
楼层： 37

1）____网友提纲的框架是否合理？
定义了人的不同种类可能接近于第三种方法


2）____网友提纲所用的例子是否合适？
第一个 主题是懒人依赖互联网解决问题，不考虑效果，但是例子是轻信朋友圈谣言，可能有点牵强，或者观点变化一下，断网就失去了能力，可能方便举例。



3）____网友开头段语言方面有哪些问题？  
很棒！没有发现。

powerfulbeanUID: 3829312

33) As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and mysterious.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

我写提纲时搭建框架所用的方法是第3种  从不同的角度分析关键词

我的提纲如下
开头段全文：


As we all know, the nature and the universe are difficult to fully understand, it is because that they are mixtures composed of millions of components. Although many scientists find the world are becoming more and more complexed with the deep learning of it, many engineers produce more powerful tools to help us live a more convenient life with the help of advanced and comprehensible theory found by the scientists. So we can see that, to the scientists the world are becoming more difficult to understand which is the engine that motivates the scientific research and to those people who apply the theories in technics, the world are becoming more comprehensive because the theories are much more advanced.

主题句1
The theories of natural science help people better understand the nature.
具体例子或细节
A. In the past, people were confused when they should deal with the relation between weight and mass, but after the gravity theory found by Newton, they can fix a lot of problems.
B. In the past, people believed that thunder happened when they did the wrong thing, but actually it is just because of the friction of cloud

主题句2
Not only the natural science, but also the social science.
具体例子或细节
A. The formation of modern society and country
B. The generation of financial tools which help improve the redistribute of properties.

主题句3
But people who are working on the frontier of their researching area are facing lots of challenges.
具体例子或细节
A. although the IT industry are developing fast day by day, but software developers are still facing a lot of fatal problems which can destroy their past work.
B. the natural science still have many phenomenon which cannot be answered.


关于这个提纲的写作我有以下感想或困惑
关于这个提纲，参考了大家的和老师的范文，感觉写起来思路还是比较清晰，但是好久没写了，有可能词不达意，错字连篇，haha。


我写的全文 （建议在修改提纲后再写）



我来点评其他网友
楼层： 44

1）justicekl [/url]网友提纲的框架是否合理？
     
    感觉具体问题具体分析，从日常到科学家，很有道理。

2）justicekl [/url]网友提纲所用的例子是否合适？
   
    也许每段关键句要再扣一扣观点？