issue同主题写作-第一类 8月8日-9日

MargueritexyUID: 3788684

1.As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

我的提纲采用了第二种方式构建框架，从不同角度或内容思考。

提纲如下：

开头段
Although people intend to use technology to solve problems, I think the ability people think for themselves will never deteriorate, in reverse, it will improve. Actually, sometimes people may be lazier with help of technology, but it doesn’t mean that people become more foolish. By technology, people can save their time from mechanical labor, get more information through all over the world and inspire innovation to solve problems technology also causes.

TS1: People use technology to get more information and communication from others all over the world, broadening the horizon and considering more about themselves.
e.g. Computer and Internet make a close connection to people on the Earth. People can use search engines like Google, Wikipedia and Baidu to get things they want to know quickly, and also, they can share their thoughts with others via social networks or apps like Facebook, Twitter and so on.

TS2：With the development of technology, people can spare much time which used to spend on doing repetitive and mechanical work to learn by themselves better.
e.g. Some machines and robots replace people as workers so that we can save much time wasting on those repetitive and boring work and we can have enough time to think about ourselves and learn more.

TS3：As the technology develops, people will have much challenges and problem which must be solved, and thus it will push people to learn more, think more and improve more. In this process, our capacity for thinking will improve.
e.g. If we want to improve a machine’s capacity and performance, we need to improve the core technology used on its so that it can provide more service.

关于这个提纲的写作我有以下感想或困惑：
我想的这几个点感觉有重复，举例的时候对应该怎么举例子比较困惑。而且运用不太熟练， 还需要多练，相信会越来越好。


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楼层： 45
1）____网友提纲的框架是否合理？
合理，从自热科学，社会科学和前沿发展三个方面展开
2）____网友提纲所用的例子是否合适？
合适，对于我来说第二个主题下的例子还是比较抽象，是否可以多写几个关键点？
3）____网友开头段语言方面有哪些问题？  
Although many scientists find the world are becoming more and more complexed with the deep learning of it, many engineers produce more powerful tools to help us live a more convenient life with the help of advanced and comprehensible theory found by the scientists.
这一句我不太理解逻辑关系，就是觉得这个让步转折有点牵强。

仅个人意见，欢迎交流。

wanghaitao199391UID: 3704441

完整题目
NO.93 Unfortunately, in contemporary society, creating an appealing image has become more important than the reality or truth behind that image.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

我写提纲时搭建框架所用的方法是第3种，把情况分三类讨论，围绕吸引人的外表要为内在服务，经营内在才是根本展开。

我的提纲如下开头段全文：
In online celebrity age, when I surfing the Internet, the most attractive images are of  the beautiful ladies and men who are leading an ideal life with their good-looking friends as if the god-kissed appearance is the key of happiness. In a way, the celebrities win, because they successfully catch my eyes, but I always know: no matter how hard they create their images, lacking of truth will dispel my favor in one minute. The Internet shortens the process of making idols, we have less time to know a person’s reality before attracted by his or her images. Once the appealing images belie the thought to be reality, we feel deceived. Those who have no appealing images do achieve admiration by their resourceful truth and reality.

主题句1The Internet shortens the process of making idols, we have no time to know a person’s reality before attracted by his or her images.
具体例子或细节 many online celebrities make money by doing plastic surgery to attract fans.

主题句2Once the appealing images of celebrities belie the thought to be reality, we feel deceived.
具体例子或细节 nowadays in China,young, handsome actors, called “little fresh meat” are criticized that they have no ability to accomplish great works commensurate with gorgeous appearances.

主题句3Those who have no appealing images do achieve admiration by their resourceful truth and reality.
具体例子或细节 Jack Ma win welcome around the world by his creative thought not his appearance.

关于这个提纲的写作我有以下感想或困惑 
我用了不少第一人称，写起来比较顺手，但是会不会显得不客观？

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楼层： 46楼Margueritexy

1）____网友提纲的框架是否合理？
合理 不过就像他自己提到的，这三个方面有点像，找例子比较麻烦。

2）____网友提纲所用的例子是否合适？ 
TS一例子充分，后TS两个具体的例子有点少。

3）____网友开头段语言方面有哪些问题？  
让步之后显得不够果断，反而弱化了主题。
总体来说棒棒的。

ChiuChiKwanUID: 3828648

完整题目

Issue 61
People should undertake risky action only after they have carefully considered its consequences.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

我写提纲时搭建框架所用的方法是第2种，把情况分类讨论，分别是1.情急的情况 2.情况可以缓的时候

我的提纲如下开头段全文：

As an old saying goes, look before you leap. It is universally acknowledged that we should carefully consider before taking a risk. However, when an emergency occurs, chances are that only making the decision quickly can the problem be solved, which means there is no enough time to considerate in a   comprehensive  way. Thus, under such circumstance, idea needs offering without hesitation. Thus, whether people should undertake risky action only after they have carefully considered its consequences.before risking depends on the circumstance.


主题句1   When some urgent circumstances happen, there is no time to considerate the consequences in a comprehension way.
具体例子或细节
Sima Guang broke the water vat to save his friend's life.

主题句2  If time is enough, carefully consideration is necessary before undertaking risk action.
具体例子或细节
Both Napoleon and Hitler failed to consider the severe winter in Russia, they were too audacious to conquer Russia.  

主题句3 Sometimes considering  all consequences seems will worsen the result.
具体例子或细节
When soldiers considers all consequences  before risking, it probably will demoralize them and some of them will be afraid of death and combats.

关于这个提纲的写作我有以下感想或困惑
感觉第三个情况有些并列的感觉，但觉得也在理，该怎么办呢,还有就是不知道中国的典故可以作为例子吗，感觉会不会看出来是中国学生？（还是多虑了？）

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楼层： 47楼wanghaitao19939

1）____网友提纲的框架是否合理？
合理 不过自我感觉更加像第一类？其实也算事第三类

2）____网友提纲所用的例子是否合适？
第一个主题句的例子感觉不太恰当？主要是no time貌似没有体现？如果是某些明星因为颜值而迅速火会不会更好呢？
第二个主题句 不知道是不是我理解的内在偏了，相比才华，个人觉得内在是不是也可以指向心灵的善恶显得更加直接？或者应该这么说，就是他或她并没有看上去那么有才华或人畜无害。。。感觉这个例子说不出的感觉。。

3）____网友开头段语言方面有哪些问题？  
个人比较喜欢一些名言比如A book cannot be judged by its cover. 能加上就再好不过啦
总体来说超级厉害啦，感觉句型用的6到飞起
渣渣再问多一句，是不是稍微的补上 其实外在意识的崛起也是有好处的会不会偏题？

powerfulbeanUID: 3829312

Margueritexy 发表于 2017-8-10 11:20
1.As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for t ...

感谢！觉得建议很有道理！

WhiplashUID: 3759911

 
Unfortunately, in contemporary society, creating an appealing image has become more important than the reality or truth behind that image.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.


我写提纲时搭建框架所用的方法是第2种: by considering an issue from different perspectives or in different contexts,具体来说，

T：在短期，appealing image更重要，但在长期来看，reality更重要。下切三个方面：1Personal life 2Company 3Government

我的提纲如下

开头段全文（TS）：

The appealing image, from my perspective, outweighs the reality or truth behind that image in the short run, but the reality or truth is of greater importance than appealing image. I will illustrate my point of view from three aspects.


主题句1(pt1)
具体例子或细节
First and foremost, the appealing image can help one to make more friends quickly, but if you want to own a long last friendship, you need to have some virtual merits.

主题句2(pt2)
具体例子或细节
Besides, the appealing image can help one to get an job offer easier, especially for some special vocations like host, singer. However, if you don’t have your own strength in the area, you cannot get a higher position.

主题句3(pt3)
具体例子或细节
Last but not least, primary leaders of the government represent the image of the government, so the appealing image is necessary, but if you don’t have your leadership and management experiences, you cannot be a good leader.

关于这个提纲的写作我有以下感想或困惑

比较容易展开，但是很多表达写的很糟糕，感觉是自己积累的表达还不够。

我写的全文 （建议在修改提纲后再写）

Jan_EarthUID: 3713352

tesolchina 发表于 2017-8-7 14:01
1, 26, 33, 43, 64, 91, 132

33) As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and mysterious.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
我写提纲时搭建框架所用的方法是第2种，从不同领域角度展开论述

我的提纲如下
开头段全文：
I strongly agree that things become more complicated and intricate instead of being easier to comprehend when we gain more knowledge. This statement holds true in almost every aspect of human activities, ranging from abstruse nature scientific research, the fluctuation of economy to plain investigation of political scandals.

TS1: Science of nature is never simple to fully comprehend, since what we’ve learned about it is only a small glimpse of the iceberg. Our limited resources of knowledge, underdeveloped tools and equipment, personal biases refrain us from getting the whole picture of the science of nature.
example：Unsolved mysteries like the formation of the earth, the extinction of dinosaurs, black holes, how human brain works.

TS2: Economy result directly from human activities, that is to say, no matter how unnoticeable or irrelavant our activity seems to be, we’ll always somehow exert an impact on economy. Even our learning process and interpretation about the economy themselves are already influential, thus the more we learn about it, the more unpredictable and mysterious it becomes.
example：stock market, the outburst of financial crisis

TS3: As we dig deeper to uncover the truth behind political scandals, the more information we obtain, the more perplexed we get. We cannot discern the credibility of the information, since these information largely come from oral investigation, which is susceptible to biases and exaggeration.
example：Princess Diana’s death, the espionage of Soviet Union, the Cuba missile crisis
关于这个提纲的写作我有以下感想或困惑：
如果只列出两点会不会也更好，因为感觉有些TS有包含关系。

EvelynnnnnUID: 3764728

完整题目
91 The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

我写提纲时搭建框架所用的方法是第2种： by considering an issue from different perspectives or in different contexts,

我的提纲如下
开头段全文：
Seemingly, with the more advanced technology, we will be free from the repetitive and dull work. Yet, it is a question whether the time saved by technological advancement would be leisure time. There is no doubt that many machines like computer bring us convenience and improve  efficiency, but it will make us live  a fast-paced life because the work is endless.

TS1:(+)
Technology give people power over their environment that change take place faster than ever before.
example：Automobiles washing machines ---save time, increase efficiency

TS2:(-)
Sometimes leisure time is not about whether you finish your work or not, it depends on your desire to relax and your inner world. When you complete one task, you will get another new one.

example：programmer

TS3:(-)
People in developed countries live a life totally different from their grandparents or great-grandparents. It is difficult to say which life is more relaxed with more leisure time.

example：my grandma, myself, two different way to relax

第一次，写得太烂了。框架搭构混乱，噗噗噗

DesertRiverUID: 3829528

完整题目
1.As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

我写提纲时搭建框架所用的方法是第3种：through classification of key term(s) in  the issue statement。具体来说，把 the ability 划分为the ability to think critically,  fast learn, creative think.

我的提纲如下

开头段全文：I am disagree with the statement that the ability of humans to think for themselves will be weak with people become more and more rely on technology to solve problems. Because the ability of humans such as to think critically, learn fast and think creatively would be strengthened.


主题句1
具体例子或细节
In order to filter unnecessary and useless information, the ability of humans  to think critically will be improved. Such as overwhelming webpages listed by internet search engine, news on Weibo or  Twitter, some of which are faked.

主题句2
具体例子或细节
People become to learn new knowledge quickly,because they can easily get knowledge by technology. Learn some subject by MOOC such as Edx, Coursera, etc.
主题句3
具体例子或细节
At last, the ability to think creatively  has been enhanced because of new method and materials could be reached by technology. They way to trade (Alibaba, Ebay), to pay (Alipay, Applepay) .

关于这个提纲的写作我有以下感想或困惑
其实有个困惑，不太确定这道题用第三种思路合不合适，我的分类是不是合适...

浩二UID: 3810858

Some people believe that our ever-increasing use of technology significantly reduces our opportunities for human interaction. Other people believe that technology provides us with new and better ways to communicate and connect with one another.（132）

Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.

我用的是第三种分类的方法 分类  公司领导下属之间，陌生人之间，朋友之间

开头
While in my opinnion, I think technology strengthen the relationship between modern people. although, some people may play their phones all the time when go out to eating, in general it tight the relationship between people.

主题句1
In company the leader always use email to contact with the staff it is a more convenient way if thereis no such way, it will be difficult for them to discuss the only way is through face to face which will waste a lot of time and the leader will cancel some converence which will do bad to the company, and in wechat the leader can deliver red packets to the staff which can make them happy

2
while between the strongers they can get in touch through social app like nearby people which there is a chance for them to be good friends and even fall in love with each other , and people can go online to find someone to talk with which will help them relax which will do good to the relationship between people

3,
while as we can see now we can use video chat with our family and even we are far away from we can talk and see each other on the video  when it in the old days there are only letters

感想，挺好用的提纲，然后 要展开写还是有难度，我认为还是应该加强全文练习。

amber_123UID: 3830001

完整题目
1、As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

我写提纲时搭建框架所用的方法是第3种  classification

我的提纲如下

开头段全文：
It’s true that more and more people have relied on technology. When taking a subway, we always see people staring at their cell phones walking, sitting, even running. Everyday things like communicating with colleagues, buying merchandise online can’t successfully go on without wireless fidelity. However, relying on technology doesn’t inevitably lead to the deterioration of humans’ ability to think for themselves. Cell phone engineers spend much time on phones to improvise the applications. Scientists use super computers to solve repetitive and onerous work. Learners find useful information on internet and organize study groups.

主题句1
具体例子或细节
As we know, cell phone engineers spend a lot of time trying and testing cell phone applications in order to correct the errors and improve the feeling of using them.

Example: My friend contrives an educational application. He takes several moths to continuously use it and try to find every error and imperfection before putting it to use.

主题句2
具体例子或细节
What’s more, scientists are good at applying computers to solve simple but onerous work.

Example: Goldbach’s Conjecture: Before the invention of super computer, no one is sure about Goldbach’s Conjecture. Later, mathematicians did the exhaustive calculation by it and the conjecture was proved to be true. It kindled many mathematician’s interests again to study the philosophy of the conjecture and other related fields.

主题句3
具体例子或细节
Besides the examples of professional people like cell phone engineers and mathematicians, normal people also think further and deeper through technologies. Learners find new information through internet and electronic devices as well as peers to form a learning group.

Example:  website: coursera

关于这个提纲的写作我有以下感想或困惑
全部采用正面立场的例子（科技不会降低人类的思考能力）是否会使文章立意太简单？

amber_123UID: 3830001

26The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

我写提纲时搭建框架所用的方法是第1和2种  new concepts and different perspectives

我的提纲如下

开头段全文：
Contemporary life is filled with luxuries and conveniences. We can see women wearing Chanel and Dior in the street. Domestic appliances are welcomed in most homes. That whether luxuries and conveniences stop people from being strong and independent depends on how people use them. An online learning website named Coursera makes learners more independent to learn new knowledge. It’s convenient for people to keep healthy by taking vitamin tablets regularly. The demanding for luxuries would push people to work harder.

主题句1
具体例子或细节
What to begin, coursera, an online website, makes it possible for learners in every corner of the world to learn from the top professors regardless of time and position.
(compare traditional study and coursera, independent from place and time)

主题句2
具体例子或细节
What’s more, vitamin tablets, which contain many essential vitamins for human, make it convenient for people to stay healthy by absorbing enough vitamins in several small pills and avoid eating much food.
(life before vitamin tablets, life after, convenient to be healthy)

主题句3
具体例子或细节Besides the examples of coursera and vitamin tablets, the desire for luxuries pushes people to work harder and be more powerful. However, if the desire is too strong to handle, people would be confused and lose the balance between life and work.
(luxury bag, borrow money, lose balance)

RACHanonymUID: 3536975

Issue 33

As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and mysterious.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

我写提纲时搭建框架所用的方法是第3种。

我的提纲如下

开头段全文：
We gain solid knowledge from book learning and life knowledge from various experiences. The knowledge acquired in the course whereas may lead to opposite consequences. Book knowledge enables us to understand arts and science more clearly while life knowledge brings people complexity in application and even leaves people perplexed that the unknown part of life is still mysterious.


主题句1
Getting educated, people become to be able to comprehend history, literature, science, etc. more easily as they learn knowledge from books and at school.
e.g. The knowledge of a second language opens a new window for people to understand other cultures.

主题句2
In addition to book learning, life experience is a another approach to acquire intangible knowledge in regards to life. Yet life knowledge might be lost on some people because they feel it too complex to apply.
e.g. When you meet a new friend, you probably still don't know what to say to him/her although you know the technique to start a conversation.


主题句3
Despite the fact that life knowledge enlightens some people to leave their comfort zone where life knowledge is limited, embracing a new world to acquire life knowledge can be a problem. Once they are blase with status quo, they seek an another dream place to start again. The fleeting transitions make their future become mysterious.
e.g. A lot of post-90 generations have tremendous big dreams, yet they fail to stick to one consistently. Now they are confused.

关于这个提纲的写作我有以下感想或困惑 
第二个ts的例子有一些逻辑上的问题，没有解释清楚但短时间内我想不到更好的例子。第三个ts也有同样的问题，好像说的都比较空，没有很深入。

cc271793784UID: 3779694

完整题目

64.
The human mind will always be superior to machines because machines are only tools of human minds.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

我写提纲时搭建框架所用的方法是第3种  划分题目中关键词，具体来说，将machines划分成三种，工厂体力劳动劳动类， games类，类人型思考类。


我的提纲如下


开头段全文：
With the fast development of artificial intelligence,  worries about smarter and more intelligent AI have triggered heated discussion over whether we should further promote its development which may destroy human civilization. Although up to now humankind govern the whole world that no other creatures could compare, but machines with continuous update and automatic learning capability pose great threat hardly ignored, in terms of physical work, playing games, and thinking like a real human.




主题句1
By applying massive huge machines in manufacturing products, replacing labor,  machines take obvious advantages over weak and inefficient labor.

具体例子或细节
Foxconn: replace most workers by machine, enhancing the effectiveness and lowering costs. 



主题句2
for the games within specific rules and frame, nearly could humans have edge over artificial intelligence calculating quickly and accurately.

具体例子或细节
AlphaGo win Kejie and Li Shishi, who are ranking the top of the list of the game of Go.


主题句3
After simulating human’s brain, artificial intelligence will automatically learn new algorithm and knowledge, and develop itself on a regular basis, eventually exceeding human beings.

具体例子或细节
Microsft and other technology company currently promote investment in machine learning algorithm and optimize AI similar to human’s brain. We cannot imagine what they will become in the future.




关于这个提纲的写作我有以下感想或困惑 
机器和人类的比较确实比较麻烦，例子有限，大家都会写阿尔法狗啊这些，会不会显得很重复？




我写的全文 （建议在修改提纲后再写） 





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1）____网友提纲的框架是否合理？
前两个地方是合理的，将knowledge进行了划分，但是第三个主题句的插入段感觉有些突兀，和前面的逻辑不是很衔接。



2）____网友提纲所用的例子是否合适？
 第二个和第三个例子都没怎么体现knowledge这一点诶。



3）____网友开头段语言方面有哪些问题？ 
 语言整体还好，没有大问题~

AngelyyyUID: 3625119

我来补之前的啦，希望能够进入文档啦~
1.As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

我采取了

1.As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

我采取了第二种方法，从不同的角度去考虑
TS：With the development of technology and the popularize of network information,the daily life has changed a lot comparing to several years ago.

ts1:There’s no doubt that progress of technology brought many advantages and offer us convenience.
-advantage convenient
-AliPay free us from the material money and make the virtual pay into reality
-people don’t need to bring the heavy purse out to buy the small things.
-The computers become thinner and smarter
-involve every area we could imaged
-restaurant
-guiding
-finding partners
-travel
-Without these breakthrough,we can’t consider about the future,and we won’t meet so many problem today.

ts2:However,every coins have two sides.Technology also led to potential danger.
-cyber attack which lately,a fast spreading virus attacked a large scale of computers contains crucial  document,caused a worldwide defense which also raised a serious conversation within the global citizens-Where we are going now?

Ts3:When comes to the ability that people think themselves,as for the people who lack the thinking and the diligence to solve things,technology would makes them rely more and more on the convenience for solving problems and enjoying the creations at home.But there are so many independent people always curious to find news and solve problems,the technology would no more deteriorate their intelligence than assist them think further.
-no need to step out of home
-do not need to think the basic problems
-won’t think further
-so deteriorate
In conclusion,the technology breakthrough explored a brand new world full of challenges to the people who are energetic to solve the problems and always curious about the unknown.However,for the people lack the diligence of don’t have the habit to critical thinking,it’s unfortunate deteriorate of their thinking ability at some degree.Anyway,I considered that it is the creativity and the brave to find the new things that make the position of our humankind beings today.