issue54 现时完成，但之后语言上作了大改动。

gototeresaUID: 174496

History teaches us only one thing: knowing about the past cannot help people to make important decisions today.

Outline:
1, History helps to form decisions today
2, History prevent us from repeating mistakes
3, History helps to predict future state.


How do people make decisions at present days if they do not refer to the history for assistance? Just based on the assumptions of future would-be effects? Or what? In this issue, I disagree with this statement as there are good reasons to believe that the past plays an essential part in forming one's decisions and also contributes to other aspects as well.

Firstly, history assists people to make paramount decisions in different aspects of our life. As history is like a massive data base containing solutions to various matters, we should always refer to the past to unravel any complication encountered. To illustrate this point, take the British legal system for instance. The conviction of a misconduct made by judge and jury is largely based on precedents; in other words, what the judge tend to do is quest analogous cases taken place in the past and by assessing the prior resolutions to those cases, a conclusive verdict would be agreed on the present proceedings. Furthermore, not only do consequential decisions need historic backup, minor ones do as well. It can often been observed in businesses that as managers encounter any dilemma concerning, say, whether or not investing a certain project, the very first thing they would do is sail through past cases for any comparable ones that would guide them to identify any possible success or failure in order to reach a fair decision. Therefore, the past definitely plays a tremendous role in today's decision making scenario.

Not only could the past help in formulating decisions, they are used more and more in preventing people from collapsing on the same matter years later. The history alerts us that certain affairs would lead to some destructive consequences that should be watched out. For example, in western Europe, the society are very concerned about the election and which party dominates in their parliament which is due to the awareness that by involving a large number of ultra-right party members in the parliament would likely to cause detrimental influences to the world; and this is what the history has taught the populace by the second world war. Thus, history does aid people to be clear and not to make mistakes repeatedly.

Finally, the past also contributes to foresee the likehood of the occurrence of any particular event in future. Earlier in time, the American president Lincoln once said: "we know nothing about what will happen in future, but by the analogy of past experience." The point is by delving the patterns and outcomes of erstwhile events can people infer the penchant of the future. For example, in the field of economics, all the economics models are built up based on historic data and specialists, say, the Federal Reserve, tend to review the models and anticipate the overall well-being of the forthcoming economic state in terms of inflation, unemployment and so on which would further influence the private sectors’ invest plan and the public spending. Thus, only by interpreting and learning from the historic data could people get a clue of what is possibly to happen in the prospective sense.

To sum up, it is certainly erroneous to assume that history is irrelevant in forming people’s judgment since the history alone tells a lot about what should be taken into account and which should not. Accordingly, one should study history heedfully, and only in this way the hazardous mistakes can be avoided and relatively predictive information may be inferred.

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第一次限时完成超高兴，但之后一看语言上一塌糊涂，然后又坐下来改了2个小时，现在贴上来，大家请砸！

RikkuUID: 170558

这个，先看

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RikkuUID: 170558

How do people make decisions at present days if they do not refer to the history for assistance? Just based on the assumptions of future would-be effects? Or what?[有这样的用法吗？] In this issue, I disagree with this[the] statement as there are good reasons to believe that the past plays an essential part in forming one's decisions and also contributes to other aspects as well.[第一段比较好，观点明确，但有个别字句还需要斟酌]

Firstly, history assists people to make paramount decisions in different aspects of our life. As[since是不是比较好，我看老外基本很少用as作为“因为”的] history is like a massive data base containing solutions to various matters, we should always refer to the past to unravel any complication encountered[这个always和any用得太绝对了把]. To illustrate this point, take the British legal system for instance[没主语]. The conviction of a misconduct made by judge and jury is largely based on precedents; in other words, what the judge tend to do is quest[questing] analogous cases taken place in the past and by assessing the prior resolutions to those cases, a conclusive verdict would be agreed on the present proceedings[整个一句话读起来比较别扭]. Furthermore, not only do consequential decisions need historic backup, minor ones do as well. It can often been observed in businesses that as managers encounter any dilemma concerning, say, whether or not investing a certain project, the very first thing they would do is sail through past cases for any comparable ones that would guide them to identify any possible success or failure in order to reach a fair decision. Therefore, the past definitely plays a tremendous role in today's decision making scenario.[英国法律的例子不错，但那个商业的例子没有展开，泛泛而谈，可以改进一下。还有，最好不要用太多any这样很绝对的词]

Not only could the past help in formulating decisions, they are used more and more in preventing people from collapsing on the same matter years later. The history alerts us that certain affairs would lead to some destructive consequences that should be watched out. For example, in western Europe, the society are very concerned about the election and which party dominates in their parliament which is due to the awareness that by involving a large number of ultra-right party members in the parliament would likely to cause detrimental influences to the world[这句话没读懂]; and this is what the history has taught the populace by the second world war. Thus, history does aid people to be clear and not to make mistakes repeatedly.

Finally, the past also contributes to foresee the likehood[这个词拼错了] of the occurrence of any particular event in future. Earlier in time, the American president Lincoln once said: "we know nothing about what will happen in future, but by the analogy of past experience." The point is[这3个词应该不要] by delving the patterns and outcomes of erstwhile events can people infer the penchant of the future[我觉得这个地方用倒装是个语法错误]. For example, in the field of economics, all the economics models are built up based on historic data and specialists, say, the Federal Reserve, tend to review the models and anticipate the overall well-being of the forthcoming economic state in terms of inflation, unemployment and so on which would further influence the private sectors’ invest plan and the public spending. Thus, only by interpreting and learning from the historic data could people get a clue of what is possibly to happen in the prospective sense.

To sum up, it is certainly erroneous to assume that history is irrelevant in forming people’s judgment since the history alone tells a lot about what should be taken into account and which[你上一句用的what，这句应该和上句一致用what] should not. Accordingly, one should study history heedfully, and only[太绝对化了！！] in this way the hazardous mistakes can be avoided and relatively predictive information may be inferred.[从题目看，这个issue是讨论的decision，最后一段也应该提一下把，点题嘛]

[你的思路是：递进，认为历史可以帮人们做重大的决定，然后说历史可以使人们不会重蹈覆辙，
最后说历史可以predict未来，我感觉这样写不是很贴题，还有，你的语言用得太绝对了，any用得尤其多，这样反而会使你的文章说服力下降。你写的很多长句我读起来都很别扭，有很多语法错误，我语法也不好，但一读就觉得有问题，这样的话还不如用短句。最后，欢迎讨论，我说的不一定都对。一点建议：最好用置顶的那个“倒计时作文练习v2”写，并附上提纲。]

gototeresaUID: 174496

TO Rikku

首先，我觉得我在围绕着历史可以帮人们做重大的决定在论啊，然后反驳history only tells us one thing,这样都不贴题吗？越来越不明白怎样才算扣着题在写了。。。puzzled

还有，最后一段我也点题了阿，只是没用他的原话，我说。。it is certainly erroneous to assume that history is irrelevant in forming people's judgment .那个forming people's judgment就是make deceion的同义吧。

其他我都同意，谢谢你帮我看作文。：）

RikkuUID: 170558

这个我是觉得没有跑题，

个人觉得这样写不是很保险哦（个人意见哈）

这个需要讨论嘛