issue 136, 写的第一篇issue, 居然不超时，是不是看过范文的关系阿

pastryyangUID：185913

ISSUE 136
136"The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare."

I fundamentally agree with the author's contention that the absence of choice is a very rare circumstance. In my view, only in some extreme and rare conditions, people are truly deprived of the freedom of choices; in most conditions, people are free to make their own choices irrespective of the possible consequences.

In only extreme conditions, people forfeit the freedom of making choices. One such example is when one has been severely injured or suffered from grave diseases that let him/her in a comatose state. In such situation, one truly loses the right to make conscious choices. Another telling example is that humans by nature cannot choose their parents, sexes, nationalities, races and the like that are determined before their birth and beyond their control. Apart from the above examples, even a young baby, or a person under incarceration, can still possess the right of making limited choices to a certain extent, such as crying to attract their parents in terms of the babies or making physical movements or protests for the prisoners.

It is the fact that everyone of humans in most cases can make their own choices irrespective of the results of their choices. A aspiring young person can choose to be a student majoring in music in spite of his/her parents' desire for him/her to be a lawyer major or pursue some other professional careers. Though the consequence of such choices might annoy the parents and lead to the broadened generation gap between that young person and their parents, the right of choice is still in the hands of the young person.

In fact, many people confuse the lack of the right of choice with the lack of the right of agreeable and pleasant choice, the former of which is determined by the will and volition of an individual while the latter of which depends largely on the realistic conditions.  One apt illustration of this contention involves the voting rights of citizens, which is a basic right in any democratic society for the citizens over a certain age limit. The citizens of course own the rights of determining which candidate they will vote for according to their own will. However, it is possible that none of these candidates seem to be qualified for them, which renders them cannot make a vote that satisfies themselves and most reflect their true attitudes. From such example, we can see that people really enjoy the freedom of making choices, while the consequences of their choices would be limited by the exterior conditions.

The contention that everyone in most cases has the freedom of making choices accords with the spirit of democracy.  The main responsibility of democratic society is to protect the freedom of their people to behavior according to their own choices and any attempt to circumvent such right of free choices in fact  serves to undermine the foundation of democratic society. In this sense, the author makes a sound and sensible contention that the absence of choice is a very rare circumstance.

In sum, the author's contention is consistent with the fact of the society and with the spirit of democracy. It is true that people own the freedom of choices in most cases and only in some rare exceptional situations that people are in a comatose state due to various reasons or over some issues which are determined before the birth, people cannot exert the right of choices for themselves.

大家多多批评一下吧

pastryyangUID：185913

为什么没有人帮我看看呢

不怕开水烫的猪UID：187893

第一篇就能不超时，而且思路和语言都挺好的，真的太强了！

提不出什么太大的意见了，不过有一个地方想和大家讨论一下

比如文章的倒数第二段，题目是说没有选择的情况是不是很少，这一段是说民主国家应该保证人们有充分的选择权。所以这一段不能算论点，只能算是对题目的引申吧

那么这样的引申会成为加分点，还是会被ETS认为是跑题呢？疑惑中....

pastryyangUID：185913

多谢楼上的意见，
我是昨天看过别人的文章才写的，而且之前写过提纲，写起来快一点
我也觉得倒数第二段和主题有点脱节，但是觉得好像没话说了，就瞎写了一段凑数，：）

xiaoheUID：162707

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