issue 59 与xiaohe 观点相反的，欢迎拍砖

foreverlovesUID: 166930

最近比较忙，好久没自己写了，只是看大家的帖子，看issue 59讨论的比较热烈，就写了一篇观点相反的，大家对比着看吧。

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Too much emphasis is placed on role models. Instead of copying others, people should learn to think and act independently and thus make the choices that are best for them.
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In the long human history, quite a number of outstanding people appear in almost all areas.They set a good example for us. We should learn from them but at the same time we should alsoLearn to think and act independently and make the choices of our own.

To learn from role models helps us make progress both in spirit or in our devoted career. If we look back upon the human history, it is not difficult for us find so many examples as to give us strength when we are confronted with troubles. Helen Keller, a deaf and blind woman who enjoyed so little beauty of the world, struggled with the unfair fate and achieved great success. Stephen Hawking, paralyzed at his early age ,didn't give up to overcome the difficulties in his following days and make great contribution to the physics; Martin Luther King, born a negro and looked down upon at his times, become the leader in the fought for the liberty and the equality of the black man.

However, to learn from role models does not necessarily mean we should copy them. Instead, we should learn from their merit and essential virtue, and combine them into our own characters, because of the following reasons.

In the first place, to think and act independently is helpful to the variety of the world. No two persons have the same character. Everyone in the world have different personality which was formed in the process of their growing up. Different person was born in different families, undergoes different experience, has relation to different person around, thus is bound to behave and think differently. This also makes our world more colorful. If the people of the world all follow the actions of a limited number of the role models, it is easy to imagine that the world must become very dull and monotonous.

In the second place, only the decision made according to one's own experience and circumstance can have the best effect. we are often facing such problems as what major should I take, which company should I join in after graduation, which city should I choose to live in, and even who should I marry? The best one is the suitable one. Take one of my classmates for example, when he entered the university, he chose chemistry as his major, though at that time computer was very popular and Bill Gate was a role model then. We were all confused at his choice but he explained that he was interested in chemistry. Now, he is an outstanding student in his chosen field. He has published many articles in SCI .he gives speech in international conferences. The most important may be that he lives happily as he loves what he engages in. Therefore, when we are making decisions, we had better not follow role models, because after all we have different background and experience.

In sum, everybody is a unique creature. we are living in world because we are different from each other. Though we should learn from the role models, we should emphasize more on ourselves.

aupreshUID: 185592

文章总体挺好的。就是不太确定第五段的例子是不是合适。即使copying others，也不一定是role models从事哪一行，自己就干哪一行呀。而且classmate也可能根本没把Bill Gates当自己的role model呢。
欢迎交流。

aupreshUID: 185592

嘻嘻，你和我一样，忘了把issue和题号连起来。dezhi要来找你了^_^

RikkuUID: 170558

In the long human history, quite a number of outstanding people appear in almost all areas.
They set a good example for us. We should learn from them but at the same time we should also
learn to think and act independently and make the choices of our own.

To learn from role models helps us make progress both in spirit or in our devoted career. If we look back upon the human history, it is not difficult for us find so many examples as to give us strength when we are confronted with troubles. Helen Keller, a deaf and blind woman who enjoyed so little beauty of the world, struggled with the unfair fate and achieved great success. Stephen Hawking, paralyzed at his early age ,didn't give up to overcome the difficulties in his following days and make great contribution to the physics; Martin Luther King, born a negro and looked down upon at his times, become the leader in the fought for the liberty and the equality of the black man.举了这么多例子，最后是不是再议论一下比较好，突出一下这段的主题？

However, to learn from role models does not necessarily mean we should copy them. Instead, we should learn from their merit and essential virtue, and combine them into our own characters, because of the following reasons.

In the first place, to think and act independently is helpful to the variety of the world. No two persons have the same character. Everyone in the world have different personality which was formed in the process of their growing up. Different person was born in different families, undergoes different experience, has relation to different person around, thus is bound to behave and think differently.前面这几句话是不是有点累赘了？ This also makes our world more colorful. If the people of the world all follow the actions of a limited number of the role models, it is easy to imagine that the world must become very dull and monotonous.

In the second place, only the decision made according to one's own experience and circumstance can have the best effect. we are often facing such problems as what major should I take, which company should I join in after graduation, which city should I choose to live in, and even who should I marry? The best one is the suitable one. Take one of my classmates for example, when he entered the university, he chose chemistry as his major, though at that time computer was very popular and Bill Gate was a role model then. We were all confused at his choice but he explained that he was interested in chemistry. Now, he is an outstanding student in his chosen field. He has published many articles in SCI .he gives speech in international conferences. The most important may be that he lives happily as he loves what he engages in. Therefore, when we are making decisions, we had better not follow role models, because after all we have different background and experience.这个例子应该可以用，但第一句话不要太绝对，有时人们自己的决定不一定是有效的

In sum, everybody is a unique creature. we are living in world because we are different from each other. Though we should learn from the role models, we should emphasize more on ourselves.

总的来看，没什么大问题，语言方面我没怎么琢磨
论证，例子都不错，继续努力把！

xiaoheUID: 162707

“模范应该学习，但学习的同时应保持自己独立的思想和行动。”

你这个论点切入的角度比较好，应该不容易被怀疑偏题。

B1 同意Rikku的意见，最好加一句类似于These eminent figures undoubtedly set role models to all human kind.之类的话。

B2我觉得角度说反了。世界的多样性是个客观规律，顺应规律则行得通，反之则行不通。因此我觉得不能说“对世界多样性有帮助”。
建议改成：The variety of the world decides that every individual is unique, thus nobody can actually be copied or copy others.(可举类似于“东施效颦”意义的例子，说明模仿没有好处)

B3的TS，Rikku说得对，太绝对了，破绽太大。如果改成：“结合自身的经验和所处的环境进行独立的思考，会更明智。”应该会好些。

另外语言方面有些错误，如果再注意一些会使文章更流畅。

以上观点仅供参考，欢迎讨论。

最后还得感谢你写这篇文章。否则我钻到自己的牛角尖里都不知如何拐弯了。

foreverlovesUID: 166930

大家辛苦了
认真看过了，这些意见都很中肯哦
大家多讨论吧，共同讨论才能共同进步