issue3 小女子第一篇习作，请各位牛牛指正，谢谢哦

zhangsx_1982UID: 176926

Well, it is certainly important to allocate money for immediate, existing social problems. There do exist many problems to be solved to create a more enjoyful, harmonious, healthy world for all human beings to live. War between countries or groups and ethnical discrimination upon blacks or certain ethnic have been long existing problems, and have had caused too much unstable factors in society. If certain amount of money is allocated in these two aspects immediately, there then would be no hungry children dying in Africa, no vagrants in Iraq, no diseases in poor undeveloped countrys, and there would be less criminals. One more existing problem is pollution. Large amounts of money is needed to be put into planting trees, treating polluted waters and airs around us which is from human's unsuitable behavior, such as driving cars and discharging industrial waste directly into air or river.

Of course, I can barely place every immediate, existing social problems here. But it is clearly acknowledged that those problems should be solved as far as we can do to lead on a better life. And it seems wasting money to spend money on those long-term research which can not do us good at present.

Is it true? Progress in genes and cytology have revealed many myths about lives. Though it takes lots of money and lots of effort, it is quite promising that one day we can cure many genital diseases as well as those that could not be cured at our time.

Not only the promising benefits that our future generations are likely to enjoy, we are enjoying the benefits from the so called long-term research. Take tomatoes for example, tomatoes were once too soft to be conveyed to other places once they are harvested. Take the powerful basic study for granted, we can have tomatoes transported, stocked without them being deteriorating. That is the outcome of the magic gene transplantation! If there is no money been put into the long-term research, it is certainly impossible. Without those long-term research, we may still live in premevial state, with no computers, no internet, no electricitys even and so on.

Well, as we can learn above, it seems equal important to allocate for immediate, existing social problems and spend it on long-term research that might help future generations. They can do us equal benefits. In fact, solving the immediate, existing social problems will provide a better environment for scientists to make their efforts in long-term research, as you can hardly imagine a scientist delving himself in his research under war. And in return, long -term research will and have already helped solve the immediate social problems. Just take the gene-modified food for example, it has helped solve the immediate social problem, that is hungry. The two are interdependent, and should not be treated separately.

glassfrogUID: 170569

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It is more important to allocate money for immediate, existing social problems than to spend it on long-term research that might help future generations.
Well, it is certainly important to allocate money for immediate, existing social problems. There do exist many problems to be solved to create a more enjoyful, harmonious, healthy world for all human beings to live. War between countries or groups and ethnical discrimination upon blacks or certain ethnic have been long existing problems, and have had caused too much(R: many) unstable factors in society. If certain amount of money is allocated in these two aspects(R: problems) immediately, there then would be no hungry children dying in Africa, no vagrants in Iraq, no diseases in poor undeveloped countrys, and there would be less criminals.(C: are you joking? Money itself can solve them all, even “certain amount”?) One more existing problem is pollution. Large amounts(R: Lots) of money is needed to be put into(R: in) planting trees, treating polluted waters and airs around us which is from human's unsuitable behavior, such as driving cars and discharging industrial waste directly into air or river.(D)
(C: well, in my opinion you may further DEFINE long-term research.)

Of course, I can barely place every immediate, existing social problems here. But it is clearly acknowledged that those problems should be solved as far as we can do(D) to lead on(R: lead) a better life. And it seems wasting money(R: to be a waste of money) to spend money on(R: invest) those long-term research which can not do us good at present.

Is it true? Progress in genes and cytology have(R: has) revealed many myths about lives. Though it takes lots of money and lots of effort, it is quite promising that one day we can cure many genital diseases as well as(R: including) those that could not be cured at our time.

Not only the promising benefits that our future generations are likely to enjoy, we are enjoying the benefits from the so called long-term research(R: The long-term research is not only beneficial for the future generation but also for the current one. C: actually it doesn’t make sence, does it?). Take tomatoes for example, tomatoes were once too soft to be conveyed to other places once(R: when) they are harvested. Take the powerful basic study for granted, we can have tomatoes transported, stocked without them being deteriorating. That is the outcome of the magic gene transplantation(R: Fortunately, it is possible nowadays to produce anti-deteriorating tomatoes with the help of gene transplantation technology)! If there is no money(C: try some other words) been put into the long-term research, it is certainly impossible. Without those long-term research, we may still live in premevial state, with no computers, no internet, no electricitys even and so on(D).

Well, as we can learn above, it seems equal(R: equally) important to allocate(R: spend) for immediate, existing social problems and spend it on(D) long-term research that might help(R: be helpful for) future generations. They can do us equal benefits(D). In fact, solving the immediate, existing social problems will provide a better environment for scientists to make their efforts in long-term research, as you can hardly imagine a scientist delving himself in his research under war(C:? The example is not related to the opinion). And in return, long -term research will and have already helped solve the immediate social problems. Just take the gene-modified food for example, it has helped solve the immediate social problem, that is hungry(R: See the gene-modified food, which has fed the hungry a lot). The two are interdependent, and should not be treated(C: ?) separately.

glassfrogUID: 170569

zhangsx_1982，以后把题目加上好吗？
如果想吃红烧青蛙也尽管放火过来。

zhangsx_1982UID: 176926

谢谢glassfrog哦！很高兴哦，真的很感动！下次不会忘加题目的！