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beilongzhuhaiUID: 175441

Topic:  The most effective way to understand contemporary culture is to analyze the trends of its youth.
Point of the view: It is right in the most common situation.


1.        短暂的文化可体现在年轻人的身上。
2.        但是有时候体现的可能只是一种表面的、甚至是错误的导向。
3.        不能盲目的就是从年轻人身上分析.


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In our modern era, there are many different kinds of culture in the different course of our society. And those different contemporary culture represent different course of the developmental character of our society. Therefore, that is very important to analyze the whole developmental trend of our society through the analyse of the  contemporary culture. Naturally,  we can get the correct effect mostly through the analyse to the youth of that time. And you can get to know why I say that after you read the following argument.


   On the one hand, the youth is the representative of contemporary culture of that time. Because the youth is the most activity of the society to accept the newest and the most forth information and masses which come from all over the world. They have the ability and skills and the important thing which is the interesting to get them. And after they receive the masses,  they will express it which they think useful and interesting all , whether they will do it through the special ways of themselves or not. Consequently, and step by step, they can form their particular contemporary culture through the social contemporary culture which affect them mostly. That is like to let the social culture to be imitated by the young culture. So, we should inspect the youth in order to get to know the social cultural trend.


     For example, I once was told by my college professor( I paraphrase it by myself ) you want to know which cloth culture will be popular this summer, you should aim at the young dressing when you walk to the street and analyze it, and you will get the answer soon.  And this is also the guidance of the designer to design which kinds of cloth they should plan to design to keep on the popular and the consumers’ digest. It is to say to form their special cloth culture according to the youth . And also the hand phone is the same phenomenon to the professional maker, such as the Panasonic, the Motorola and the Nokia companies, they change the phone form and colour in order to construct the phone culture to absorb the youth to buy and use it. And so, we can get to know which kinds of hand phone is popular this time through the inspecting of the youth. And that is also the hand phone culture which we can get to know from the youth.


  On the other hand, even we can understand the contemporary culture from the youth mostly. But sometimes the representative is only the superficial phenomenon and even more is the wrong aspect. Because the youth easily to accept the contemporary culture(that is the reason why we can get the contemporary culture through them), but they always easily copy the contemporary culture and can not analyze carefully and correctly. Therefore we should not easily analyze the youth in order to get to know the contemporary culture correctly in all the situation. We should combine the other aspects which can also affect the culture to analyze it. Including the professional analyse by the specialist and the technological research by the scientists about some significant affairs. And we can understand it from some historical political examples. There are always because the youth who own the easily thinking and easily to be guided to a wrong way. Consequently, we inspect the youth, but we can not forget to accept them carefully.


  To sum, we can get to analyze the youth in order to get to know the contemporary culture in most common situation. But we can not only do this and ignore the other aspects which also can affect that we make a correct decision. That is also very crucial to our social educational culture to care and educate the youth more carefully and patiently in order to guide them to analyze and accept the masses which come from all over the world correctly.

不怕开水烫的猪UID: 187893

你的语言功底很不够，很多句子结构不对，而且一些词的词性也不是很清楚。建议多读读标准的英文文章，学习一下怎么写标准的句子

beilongzhuhaiUID: 175441

谢谢你的指导，动笔就是进步，大家都有过这个阶段。希望你能具体帮我指出有哪里不够，好让我知道清楚。谢谢！