Issue10 第二篇。大家多多提提意见吧

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Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive, because it is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
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The author asserts that the major cities should receive the financial support they need to thrive for that it is chiefly in cities where a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated. I agree with the speaker that it is necessary to support major cities to survive. Nonetheless I do not think that it is major cities that preserve a nation's cultural traditions. Instead I believe that rural places play a much more important part in preserving a nation's cultural traditions.
Major cities are often not only the economic centers of a nation but also the cultural political even atistic center of a nation, so it is undoubted that a nation should ensure the development of major cities. As we all know, major cities have much more opportunities than other places in a nation to attract the elites of a nation, investment form foreign counties and even the interest of artists who need to feel the pulse of the times to inspire them to create. In this case, major cities have more advantage over other places to thrive and would play a more important role in the taxation of a nation, which is indispensable to ensure a nation advance steadily.Take Beijing as an example. As the capital of China, Beijing enjoys a much faster rate of development in economics than in other parts of China. And when foreign artists choose a place to set exhibition, they would automatically choose Beijing first, as the exhibition in Beijing where is the political center of China can attract more attention from the whole nation than just set up it in Hainan.
However, as the economic globalization in the world, major cities become more and more alike with each other, no matter which nation they are. When we go shopping in the hall, we would find that the commodities in the shop are almost the same. The development in transportation ensures that the products in any places on the Earth reach those major cities as soon as they come out. When you travel in a big cities, you even would find that the style of the architecture appears so much alike each others. As in major cities, whether such buildings are practical in use is the most essential problem against aesthetics and historical value. And the dress of people even look the same, because the program of dressing are always on the television, which lead to the trend in the whole world are exactly the same with such big cities, as Paris New York and Hongkong.
It is rural places where the outside world does not change the dialect, custom, even religion so much as major cities, that preserve our traditions. When the major cities enjoy the rapid development in economics and absorb the tradition of other countries, rural places remain much undeveloped for several reasons. First, the transportation in rural places have not developed as completely as in major cities, which result in that the newest information and products could not reach such places. People in rural places may learn the trend of dress several years later than major cities, especially some villages in China locate in the mountain, where people may not go to town all their life. Secondly, the economy in such rural places is in a undeveloped state which limit the capabilities of buying and selling. People would be easier to prefer to remain the old habits of traditional trading. Thirdly, much more old people would like to live in rural places where the air is much fresher than in big cities, noise caused by vehicles is much less than in major cities and moreover they would have much more friends than in major cities, as people in rural places have more chances to have chat out of yard after meals while people living in major cities often lead a fast life and do not have enough time for just chatting. On psychological level, old people are more likely to preserve the tradition which they have from an early age while young people would like to change their lives with the change of the world.
In sum, I agree with the speaker's opinion that the major cities should be supported by a nation to survive as they always reflect the prosperity of a nation. But in my view, it is rural places that preserve the most of our tradition as reasons I have mentioned above but not major cities.

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kkytUID: 188814

看后感：
1语言没问题，写的字数，内容都还挺好的。
2仅就本题思路与你再探讨以下：我的思路是（1）政府应该保护大城市，无可否认有些大城市具有悠久的历史和文化传统和历史文物，象中国的北京，英国的伦敦，不仅仅因为大城市具有悠久的文化传统，有着众多的名胜古迹，还有经济，政治等其他原因。（2）并不是所有大城市都具有文化传统，有些更具有现代气息，象深圳等，这些城市也应该保护和发展。（3）有些小城镇和农村也有这悠久的文化和传统，这些传统是在全球化背景下，一个国家的特色，失去就不再来，因此必须加以保护。可能和别人思路差不多吧，提供给你参考。
3感觉你的思路跟我的有一样的地方，值得商榷的地方就是：在论证小城镇和农村作用是，你好象在论证的是rural places remain much undeveloped for several reasons.的原因，其实我觉得你可以把这句话去掉，只保留first second 和third 就可以是一篇很好的文章了。

玉面小狐狸UID: 188981

------题目------
Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive, because it is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
------正文------
The author asserts that the major cities should receive the financial support they need to thrive for that it is chiefly in cities where a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated. I agree with the speaker that it is necessary to support major cities to survive. Nonetheless I do not think that it is major cities that preserve a nation's cultural traditions. Instead I believe that rural places play a much more important part in preserving a nation's cultural traditions.
Major cities are often not only the economic centers of a nation but also the cultural political even atistic ？center of a nation, so it is undoubted that a nation should ensure the development of major cities. As we all know, major cities have much more opportunities than other places in a nation to attract the elites of a nation, investment form foreign counties and even the interest of artists who need to feel the pulse of the times to inspire them to create. In this case, major cities have more advantage over other places to thrive and would play a more important role in the taxation of a nation, which is indispensable to ensure a nation advance steadily.Take Beijing as an example. As the capital of China, Beijing enjoys a much faster rate of development in economics than in other parts of China. And when foreign artists choose a place to set exhibition, they would automatically choose Beijing first, as the exhibition in Beijing where is the political center of China can attract more attention from the whole nation than just set up it 去掉itHainan.这段好像只在讲大城市的好，作为让步段似乎没说为什么大城市有被资助的必要性，有点远
However, as the economic globalization in the world, major cities become more and more alike with each other, no matter inwhich nation they are. When we go shopping in the hall, we would find that the commodities in the shop are almost the same. The development in transportation ensures that the products in any places on the Earth reach those major cities as soon as they come out. When you travel in a big cities, you even would find that the style of the architecture appears so much alike each others. As in major cities, whether such buildings are practical in use is the most essential problem against aesthetics and historical value. And the dress of people even look the same, because the program of dressing are always on the television, which lead to the trend in the whole world are exactly the same with such big cities, as Paris New York and Hongkong.
It is rural places where the outside world does not change the dialect, custom, even religion so much as major cities, that preserve our traditions. When the major cities enjoy the rapid development in economics and absorb the tradition of other countries, rural places remain much undeveloped for several reasons. First, the transportation in rural places have not developed as completely as in major cities, which result in that the newest information and products could not reach such places. People in rural places may learn the trend of dress several years later than major cities, especially some villages in China locate in the mountain, where people may not go to town all their life. Secondly, the economy in such rural places is in a undeveloped state which limit the capabilities of buying and selling. People would be easier to prefer to remain the old habits of traditional trading. Thirdly, much more old people would like to live in rural places where the air is much fresher than in big cities, noise caused by vehicles is much less than in major cities and moreover they would have much more friends than in major cities, as people in rural places have more chances to have chat out of yard after meals while people living in major cities often lead a fast life and do not have enough time for just chatting. On psychological level, old people are more likely to preserve the tradition which they have from an early age while young people would like to change their lives with the change of the world.这个分论点稍微有点长了，与前面不是很相称，看起来有点像托福作文，hoho
In sum, I agree with the speaker's opinion that the major cities should be supported by a nation to survive as they always reflect the prosperity of a nation. But in my view, it is rural places that preserve the most of our tradition as reasons I have mentioned above but not major cities.

这么长的作文可以这么快写完，佩服！
论证比较完整
建议下次段落之间空一行，这样看得我晕晕的