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发表于 2005-1-18 17:00:17 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
issue138 'Only through mistakes can there be discovery or progress.'


The speaker claims that only through mistakes can there be discovery or progress. I concede that mistake is an important role that leads to discovery or progress .However, in my view, there are other equally necessary factors as I will discuss below

admittedly, on the way to success, mistakes play an important part because mistakes is in a sense another kind of knowledge and experience which always can tell a person more than he could learn from books or classes. when we were an infant, we learn how to walk by falling down again and again , when we gradually grow up, we gain social experiences by committing all kinds of errors .It is just through the endless mistakes that we are growing to a strong man. Thus ,in this means, I would rather point out that without mistakes, we cannot achieve great success.

However, it is not enough just to learn from mistakes if one want to succeed. It is too often that we see persons make mistakes again and again and yet make little progress until he grows too old. What's the reason? The answer is in each endeavor, some basic requirements should be satisfied besides mistakes, either in science or in political arena. In science, an academic atmosphere and tradition as well as the instrument for experiment is the two fundamental demand which sometimes is more important than mistakes. This can be easily understood if we take a look at the list of Nobel prize receiver, most of them come from famous labs which bears a good condition. In politics and government, a basic morality standard are always in need. Take Nixon, the former American president, for example, before he carry the election, he failed twice, yet he learned from his mistakes and finally succeeded. Ironically, he was forced to abdicate for his dishonesty in the water gate scandal. This aptly illustrated how other equally important factors influence the achievement of discovery and progress.

Furthermore, if not so strictly confined, discovery and progress can also be achieved by accident. This can be readily observed if we just take a rough look at the human history and especially the development of science. See how x-ray is discovered, see how continental drift theory was formed ,see how the element periodic table was set up, see how the penicillin was successfully obtained, see how the structure of benzene is established. Though it is quite possible that they had made mistakes before, no one can deny that their last success has litter bearing with their former failures and errors. Instead, they own their accomplishment to opportunity and chance.

In sum, from what we have discussed above, we come to the conclusion that besides mistakes ,there are other necessary factors such as the that affect the final result.Only we take accound all of them can we make real discoveries and progress.otherwise,it is quite likely we make the same mistakes again and again without any improvement.
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发表于 2005-1-18 21:19:05 |只看该作者
issue138 'Only through mistakes can there be discovery or progress.'


The speaker claims that only through mistakes can there be discovery or progress. I concede that mistake is an important role that leads to discovery or progress .However, in my view, there are other equally necessary factors as I will discuss below.(表明是让步的立场,但是还是具体提出观点好一点。)

admittedly, on the way to success, mistakes play an important part because mistakes is in a sense another kind of knowledge and experience which always can tell a person more than he could learn from books or classes.(这句话连接的好像不是太好because in a sense, mistakes is another kind of knowledge and experience which can always tell a person something more than he could learn from books or classes.) when we were an(去掉) infant, we learn how to walk by falling down again and again , when we gradually grow up, we gain social experiences by committing all kinds of errors .It is just through the endless mistakes that we are growing to a strong man. Thus ,in this means, I would rather point out that without mistakes, we cannot achieve great success.(这段话写出了mistake 的好处,比较诚恳,但是辩论的不够紧密。)

However, it is not enough just to learn from mistakes if one want to succeed. It is too often that we see persons make mistakes again and again and yet make little progress until he grows too old. What's the reason? The answer is in each endeavor, some basic requirements should be satisfied besides mistakes, either in science or in political arena. In science, an academic atmosphere and tradition as well as the instrument for experiment is the two fundamental demand which sometimes is more important than mistakes. This can be easily understood if we take a look at the list of Nobel prize receiver, most of them come from famous labs which bears a good condition. In politics and government, a basic morality standard are always in need. Take Nixon, the former American president, for example, before he carry the election, he failed twice, yet he learned from his mistakes and finally succeeded. Ironically, he was forced to abdicate for his dishonesty in the water gate scandal. This aptly illustrated how other equally important factors influence the achievement of discovery and progress.

Furthermore, if not so strictly confined, discovery and progress can also be achieved by accident. This can be readily observed if we just take a rough look at the human history and especially the development of science. See how x-ray is discovered, see how continental drift theory was formed ,see how the element periodic table was set up, see how the penicillin was successfully obtained, see how the structure of benzene is established. Though it is quite possible that they had made mistakes before, no one can deny that their last success has litter bearing with their former failures and errors. Instead, they own their accomplishment to opportunity and chance.

In sum, from what we have discussed above, we come to the conclusion that besides mistakes ,there are other necessary factors such as the that affect the final result.Only we take accound all of them can we make real discoveries and progress.otherwise,it is quite likely we make the same mistakes again and again without any improvement.



这是一篇不错的文章。如果是在限时之内完成的话就更好。但是本人愚见有如下:
1、 总的立场是明确的,部分同意的观点,在第一段就提出观点,但是不够明确,应该明确提出。
2、 辩论不够紧密,理由不够充分,但是例子到位。
3、 语言一般,句子表达不够准确。


动笔就是进步,你的文章比我的好多啦!欢迎批改我的文章。
https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=242410
https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=242967

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发表于 2005-1-18 21:31:11 |只看该作者
写的很好,语言上的功底很佩服
第一遍看完觉得很有道理,但是越看觉得越不对。
题目的意思是 发现和进步免不了要犯错误,不是说错误是进步的唯一决定因素。
所以反对题目,可以举没犯错误就获得成功的例子,而不是举除了mistake之外获得进步的原因吧。估计没人会觉得犯了错误就一定会进步吧

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发表于 2005-1-19 11:42:06 |只看该作者
谢谢楼上两位

beilongzhuhai,你的文章我马上去看
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我理解 的题目的意思是  ‘只有通过犯错误才能进步“  因为题目中'Only through mistakes can there be discovery or progress有一个only,所以我举出其他可以导致discovery or progress的原因。你的文章我也看过了,感觉我们两个的理解有偏差
到底题目是什么意思呢???

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发表于 2005-1-19 14:48:09 |只看该作者
issue138 'Only through mistakes can there be discovery or progress.'

The speaker claims that only through mistakes can there be discovery or progress. I concede that mistake is an important role that leads to discovery or progress有点绝对了,最好说明在某种情况下如此 .However, in my view, there are other equally necessary factors这种模糊的句子最好不要做中心句,我觉得应该具体写出是什么,作为整篇文章的统领 as I will discuss below

admittedly, on the way to success, mistakes play an important part because mistakes去掉 is in a sense another kind of knowledge and experience which always can always tell a person more than he could learn from books or classes. when we were an infantinfants, we learn how to walk by falling down again and again , when we gradually grow up, we gain social experiences by committing all kinds of errors上面几句时态有问题阿 .It is just through the endless mistakes that we are growing to a去掉 strong man. Thus ,inby this means, I would rather point out that without mistakes, we cannot achieve great success.without great achievements of human beings today.

However, it is not enough just to learn from mistakes if one want to succeed. It is too often that we see persons make mistakes again and again and yet make little progress until he grows too old. What's the reason? The answer is in each endeavor, some basic requirements should be satisfied besides mistakes, either in science or in political arena. In science, an academic atmosphere and tradition as well as the instrument for experiment is the two fundamental demands which sometimes is more important than mistakes. This can be easily understood if we take a look at the list of Nobel prize receiver, most of them come from famous labs which bears a good condition. In politics and government, a basic morality standard are always in need. Take Nixon, the former American president, for example, before he carry the election, he failed twice, yet he learned from his mistakes and finally succeeded. Ironically, he was forced to abdicate for his dishonesty in the water gate scandal. This aptly illustrated how other equally important factors influence the achievement of discovery and progress.为什么不直接针对题目中的only? 这样不是更有说服力么?

Furthermore, if not so strictly confined, discovery and progress can also be achieved by accident. This can be readily observed if we just take a rough look at the human history and especially the development of science. See how x-ray is discovered, see how continental drift theory was formed ,see how the element periodic table was set up, see how the penicillin was successfully obtained, see how the structure of benzene is established. Though it is quite possible that they had made mistakes before, no one can deny that their last success has litter bearing with their former failures and errors. Instead, they own their accomplishment to opportunity and chance.这段感觉有点跑题了,偶然性和mistakes有什么关系呢?

In sum, from what we have discussed above, we come to the conclusion that besides mistakes ,there are other necessary factors such as the that affect the final result. Only we take accound all of them can we make real discoveries and progress. otherwise,it is quite likely we make the same mistakes again and again without any improvement.
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发表于 2005-1-20 00:29:35 |只看该作者
谢谢LSD

因为我想说除了mistake 还有其他的可能导致discovery and progress 的因素呢,偶然性也是其中之一吧,这样可以吗?

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发表于 2005-1-20 13:57:54 |只看该作者
我也觉得原题从逻辑上讲只是在说mistake 是success的必要条件,并没有说是充分加必要条件
而你论述其他必要条件,给人感觉和题目在逻辑上没有冲突,但好像和题目本身关系不密切
可能有点多余
呵呵,只是个人意见

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