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==========Issue 207题目==========
Rituals and ceremonies help define a culture.Without them, societies or groups of people have a diminished sense of who they are.
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The speaker claims that rituals and ceremonies help define a culture, for the reason that without them, societies or groups of people have a diminished sense of who they are. I agree with the speaker insofar as that rituals and ceremonies help define a culture. However, the arguer overrates the effect of rituals and ceremonies.
First of all, it is true that rituals and ceremonies of a society can help define a culture, since these ceremonies have their particular characteristics, which can show a society's unique culture. For example, the wedding in western countries and in China is quite different. As all of us know, in western countries bride and groom will go to church, they will eat wedding cake with all of their relatives and friends, and their clothes is usually white and black; however, in china, most of the wedding is at home or in restaurants, the foods is traditional Chinese foods, and red is regarded to be a happy color in this day. Moreover, in some religious countries, their many ceremonies, especially their clothes are quite different from any other societies. Therefore, rituals and ceremonies play a very important role in defining a society's culture.
However, is it true that without rituals and ceremonies, societies or groups of people have a diminished sense of who they are? Of course, not, because many other culture will help people to define their status. Language, for instance, while today English is becoming a worldwide language, different society has their unique language. As long as person speaks their mother tongue, they can understand where they are from, they can remember the culture only possess the society they live. Similarly, by foods a society and groups of a people can easily realize who they are. A large group of American people, for instance, when they eat their special food, they will know they are Americans, regardless of where they are, doing business in China or traveling in Japan.
If some people think with the similarity of food and language-that is, English has become many countries' official language and more and more begin to speak it. There is still a very significant factor to define a country's culture-that is, the history. Although with the development of society, many things in the world tend to become similar: some of Chinese bride and groom begin go to church in their wedding day, American McDonald's, KFC are so popular in China, all of these can not affect the thousands years' history of China. Therefore, except for ritual and ceremonies, many other aspects of a society can benefit for people to define themselves.
To sum up, it is true that rituals ceremonies will help define a culture, however, however, rituals and ceremonies only a small part of culture. Many other aspects of a society, such as its history, its conventions and so on will also useful for a society or a groups of people to define who they are.

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机井题目，感觉有一点乱，大伙给看看！
==========Issue 207题目==========
Rituals and ceremonies help define a culture. Without them, societies or groups of people have a diminished sense of who they are.
============正文===========
The speaker claims that rituals and ceremonies help define a culture, for the reason that without them, societies or groups of people have a diminished sense of who they are.有点重复了，最好换一种表达方式啊 I agree with the speaker insofar as表示到这个程度范围; 在...情况下; 在...范围内; 只要... 楼主在这里用的什么意思呢？ that rituals and ceremonies help define a culture. However, the arguer overrates the effect of rituals and ceremonies.

First of all, it is true that rituals and ceremonies of a society can help define a culture, since these ceremonies have their particular characteristics, which can show a society's unique culture. For example, the wedding in western countries and in China is quite different. As all of us know it is well known that, in western countries bride and groom will go to church, they will eat wedding cake with all of their relatives and friends, and their clothes is usually white and black; however, in china, most of the wedding is at home or in restaurants, the foods is traditional Chinese foods, and red is regarded to be a happy color in this day. Moreover, in some religious countries, their many ceremonies, especially their clothes are quite different from any other societies. Therefore, rituals and ceremonies play a very important role in defining a society's culture.最后只用这一句话概括整段的论述似乎有点单薄了，应该再将Rituals and ceremonies同culture结合起来谈谈

However, is it true that without rituals and ceremonies, societies or groups of people have a diminished sense of who they are? Of course, not, because many other culture will help people to define their status？？这句和论题有什么关系呢？. Language, for instance, while today English is becoming a worldwide language, different society has their unique language. As long as person speaks their mother tongue, they can understand where they are from, they can remember the culture only possess the society they live. Similarly, by foods a society and groups of a people can easily realize who they are. A large group of American people, for instance, when they eat their special food, they will know they are Americans, regardless of where they are, doing business in China or traveling in Japan.如果能结合Without them, societies or groups of people have a diminished sense of who they are.谈谈是不是会更切题？

If some people think with the similarity of food and language-that is, English has become many countries' official language and more and more begin to speak it. There is still a very significant factor to define a country's culture-that is, the history. Although with the development of society, many things in the world tend to become similar: some of Chinese bride and groom begin go to church in their wedding day, American McDonald's, KFC are so popular in China, all of these can not affect the thousands years' history of China. Therefore, except for ritual and ceremonies, many other aspects of a society can benefit for people to define themselves.最后的例子说服力不强啊！

To sum up, it is true that rituals ceremonies will help define a culture, however, however, rituals and ceremonies only a small part of culture. Many other aspects of a society, such as its history, its conventions and so on will also useful for a society or a groups of people to define who they are

这个题目很抽象，不太好写啊！以上意见仅供参考！

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谢谢，LSD！开头是缺乏新意，不过，限时写时间有些紧张， 考虑来考虑去，选择了简化开头和结尾。正文第三段我自己也觉得力度不够，非常感谢你的建议， 我会再好好考虑这篇文章的。还有一周的时间，我会努力的，但不知会不会有点提高。Sigh.......

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相信你，肯定有提高！！！ ;)

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谢谢blur13_0！很受鼓舞哦！