issue6 再问一句，有人上新东方没？北京的，寒假

mack1983UID: 183345

这篇文章好像第三段有点乱，大家帮忙看看，谢过了。大家礼尚往来嘛，我有仇必报。
Issue6：The most effective way to understand contemporary culture is to analyze the trends of its youth.

How should we analyze our contemporary culture effectively, only by study the trend of its youth, as the speaker claims? I agree insofar as that the youth do represent one important noticeable aspect of culture; however, the otherwise groups that influence the trends should not be ignored as well.

First consider the youth, whom are portrayed as the symbol of tomorrow and passion. The youth worrying nothing about earthly affairs would always seek for new things which could manifest their identities as adolescents: the crazy fans of pop singers are always replete with students of my age; the best-sellers of disc shop are nothing other than rock, pop, and mental, which contain large amount of youth supporters; and the most exciting sports as climbing and skating are all fascinating challenges of the youth. In fact, these noticeable behaviors and attitudes could always be sound materials when studying contemporary culture, and therefore make us be inclined to believe the youth is the most effective, and even comprehensive, way to analyze contemporary culture. Nevertheless, other age groups, for example, adults who are now creating properties of society and retired people, should share the same attention.

As sophisticated and more educated people who have already experienced passion and impertinence in their early age, most of adults would choose a more peaceful life rather than continuing struggle. Galleries, museums, and Opera houses are resorts at which they call frequently. Furthermore, the economy and social security, which are the two mainly concerns of social welfare, are decided by this group of people, since they are the creators and designers of our society. Without analyze the trend of adults, I don't believe any analyst would get the appropriate results of contemporary culture. For supporting evidence, one needs to look no further than living style of different countries. The youth in these countries are always the same: they would rather to get hurt in the playground than sit uncomfortably in the classroom. Nevertheless, the different working and living habits reveal various cultures: adults in the US always dream of a live full of challenge and excitement, which determines their passion and longing for adventure; adults in Japan would consider diligence and endurance are the most precious fortune that man should process, thus their frequency of pace reach the top of the world; European adults with French romance and German preciseness prefer to sit in cafe to enjoy beautiful sunshine and think over philosophical issues. We could see from above that adults in different countries possess spirits of different culture, and the ignorance of this group would be a big mistake.

Finally, when it comes to retired people, the importance of analyzing their trend, as I believe, should not be of any underestimation. Take China's Beijing Opera for example. Neither adults who are running to make a better life nor the youth playing PS and computer games would be interested in this traditional art form. Nevertheless, it is the specific characteristic of one unique culture that takes root in, and therefore, should be preserved and maintained. As the lover of this kind of art, retired people reflect the otherwise hidden ideas of one culture, which contains history, tradition and convention.

In sum, as the reasons and examples listed above, I believe that all three groups- the youth, adults and retired groups- represent the contemporary culture, though in different aspects. In fact, only we form the age groups to an organic whole, can the contemporary culture manifests itself comprehensively.

mack1983UID: 183345

不行不行,自顶一把,水好大啊,免得被淹了

mack1983UID: 183345

看来还要顶一把，唉，郁闷，男的就是没有市场

mack1983UID: 183345

晕死，再顶

花之颜色UID: 187195

不行了,偶已经睁不开眼睛了,明天帮你看,今天先占个座~偶要去呼呼了~希望能梦见一支生花妙笔,明天作文能开窍,唉唉~

imongUID: 140258

好吧 睡觉之前我再接一篇 稍等

How should we analyze our contemporary culture effectively, only by study the trend of its youth, as the speaker claims?（如果开头是Should we这么写也还算能凑合 How should we后面还加only by难道不觉得别扭？还有only by study这样的错误-->好歹也是studying） I agree insofar as that the youth do represent one important noticeable aspect of culture; however, the otherwise groups that influence the trends should not be ignored as well.（vague TS。You should give an unwavering response to "is it the most effective way". So, Is it?）

First consider the youth, whom（who） are portrayed as the symbol of tomorrow and passion. （片断 好像没有主句SVO）The youth worrying （这个修饰这样用似乎有问题）nothing about earthly affairs would always seek for new things which could manifest their identities as adolescents: the crazy fans of pop singers are always replete with students of my age; the best-sellers of disc shop are nothing other than rock, pop, and mental, which contain large amount of youth supporters; and the most exciting sports as climbing and skating are all fascinating challenges of the youth. In fact, these noticeable behaviors and attitudes could always be sound materials when studying contemporary culture, and therefore make us be inclined to believe the youth is the most effective,（why？列举了上面的"现象"为何就得到这样的结论？Because they are noticable, therefore studying them will be effective？就算这样 行文下笔重点似乎应该在noticable上面 当然这一点姑且存疑 并未感到论证的有力） and even comprehensive, way to analyze contemporary culture. Nevertheless, other age groups, for example, adults who are now creating properties of society and retired people, should share the same attention.

文法上面不规范的地方就不少。行文的话 没感觉到response 这一点比较要命。而且先同意they are most effective，又说others should not be neglected，一幅if neglected then not as effective的潜台词的样子，让人摸不着头脑。

觉得很怪异呢！恐怕不好！

mack1983UID: 183345

一定好好参照imong的意见再修改，谢谢