Issue183 学习类 随着知识越来越多，事情不是变得更好理解，而是变得更复杂

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Issue183
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183."As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and more mysterious."随着我们的知识越来越多，事情不是变得更好理解，而是变得更复杂更神秘
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Is it true that the more knowledge we obtain, accordingly, the more complex and mysterious we may face? The author believes so. However, I cannot accept this assertion. Truly, with the deep study of one problem, another several new questions may occur. But it does not mean that the things we become complex and mysterious about the problem. Just to the opposite, we will make comprehensible understanding owing to our efforts.

Admittedly, with the deep study of one problem, t seems that the whole situation become more and more troublesome. Numerous tough new-born questions and endless information need to be dealt with. So, why are things changing from simple to complicated when we study? On the one hand, this is because almost everything is a complicated organization with numerous variables, which is changing from time to time. If we want to make a clear understanding on how they operate accurately, with the study deep inside the problems, they will display much more information and puzzled relationship to trouble us. On the other hand, it is because if we find the solution to just one problems, probably, the issue may provide us with other more questions to answer. And this circulation seems endless for us limited-energy human beings. Thus, this does make us feel complex and complicated. For instance, in the ancient times, people may only have one question that what is the smallest particle that consists of all substance? The answer may be molecule or atom, very simple. But after discovering that a atom can be divided, and which is consisted by one atomic nucleus and several electrons. The previous one question has become two: Which particles consists of atomic nucleus and which consists of electrons? Even spending more than 60 years, we have discovered proton, neutron, mesotron, quark and so on, there seems no definite answer to this endless question. Thus, from those perspectives, we have to admit that things do become complicated when we make a deep study to some extend.

However, this phenomenon never imply that the study and knowledge is negative to discover the truth, oppositely, with the study deep inside the core of the problem, we may find the very truth, reach a comprehensive and accurate understanding of this matter and gain a lot of knowledge consequently. To begin with, we have to clear that solving one problems and produce several other questions never equates we become more and more complex and mysterious about this problem. With study, we get closer and closer to the real core of the problems and we still possible to find the answer to this question eventually. Secondly, with much new knowledge we gained, a new scientific knowledge system may probably replace the old one. And the new system has wider adaptation and stronger explanation, which will clarify much more unknown things. For example, before the theory of relativity and quantum mechanics established, lots of unusual phenomenon cannot be explained by Newton's laws, which is suit for only a small part in physics. But after people have composed those three theories into a new and perfect knowledge system, we can give an reasonable explanation to almost everything. Finally, with increased knowledge experience, we can create some sophisticated equipments for us to discover the world. For example, we human being always have a desire to travel in the universe and see how it really is? To get a accurate answer, people have tried for thousands of years. From the dream of flying in the sky to the launch of spacecraft into universe, people have solved, also produced numerous problems and obtained much valuable knowledge, which are all contributed to this historical moment. And when Neil Armstrong firstly landed on the moon and walk the first step, just like he said “That's one small step for (a) man, one giant leap for mankind” and the human beings' universe dream has made a great breakthrough eventually.

Furthermore, without such a complex and complicated process which solves and creates problems, we cannot get a simple and easy-understanding way to consider the other issues and learn them by heart easily. First of all, almost every systematic and completed discipline needs such process to rectify their knowledge system. Without this complicated process, the structure of knowledge within this discipline may be imbalanced and uncompleted. Take the development of physics for example. With such course of asking and solving problems, we get the knowledge from the easiest, such as why does the moon goes around the earth, to the most complicated, just as how do those 9 kinds of quarks in operation. And all this knowledge are acquired with the process of solving and producing questions. Secondly, without such irreplaceable and troublesome phase, the knowledge we have gained may be doubtable or have may exceptions, and some proceeding conclusion which based on them may be irrational and absurd. For instance, without any careful and accurate examinations, Aristotle thought the earth is the centre of the universe with only reasoning in his brain. And it is ridiculous that his thoughts had even ruled the western world for over two thousands years. If there is no body such as Copernicus or Galileo to point out this absurdity, how negative effect would this fallacy made on the development of science and technology .Therefore, from this point of view, this solving-and-producing-problems process cannot be ignored or even simplified, otherwise, people may reach some unreasonable conclusions.

In sum, with the deep studies of problems, we have gained knowledge and composed our system of knowledge, probably, the things may become more and more complex and complicated, however, we may still get to the core of the answer closer and closer. Just by continual solving and producing questions, we human beings obtain all kinds of knowledge bricks by bricks and then build such magnificent scientific and technology mansion.

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呵呵，你写的好多啊，容我先研究一下：）

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Issue183
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183."As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and more mysterious."随着我们的知识越来越多，事情不是变得更好理解，而是变得更复杂更神秘
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Is it true that the more knowledge we obtain, accordingly, the more complex and mysterious we may face? The author believes so. However, I cannot accept this assertion. Truly, with the deep study of one problem, truly放这里读起来更舒服些another several new questions may occur. But it does not mean that the things we become complex and mysterious about the problem这句意思？. Just to the opposite, we will make comprehensible understanding owing to our efforts. 主要观点是完全否定

Admittedly, with the deep study of one problem, it seems that the whole situation become more and more troublesome. Numerous tough new-born questions and endless information need to be dealt with. So,总觉得口语化，换个吧 why are things changing from simple to complicated when we study? On the one hand, this is because almost everything is a complicated organization with numerous variables, which is changing from time to time. If we want to make a clear understanding on how they operate accurately, with the study deep inside the problemswith the study mining the essence of problems 这样好点吗？, they will display much more information and puzzled relationship to trouble us. On the other hand, it is because if we find the solution to just one problems, probably, the issue may provide us with other more questions to answer. And this circulation seems endless for us limited-energy human beings. Thus, this does make us feel complex and complicated. For instance, in the ancient times, people may only have one question that what is the smallest particle that consists of all substance? The answer may be molecule or atom, very simple. But after discovering that a an atom can be divided, and which is consisted by consists of one atomic nucleusnuclear and several electrons. The previous one question has become two: Which particles consists of atomic nucleus and which consists of electrons? Even spending more than 60 years, we have discovered proton, neutron, mesotron, quark and so on, there seems no definite answer to this endless question. Thus, from those perspectives, we have to admit that things do become complicated when we make a deep study to some extend. 这段是从事物本身和事物的联系两方面展开说明复杂性，但我觉得第二个例子可能说明事物本身比较合适，因为这个问题并没有牵涉到别的领域的问题，而就是对于最小组成的继续深入研究，是事物本身的问题深化

However, this phenomenon never imply that the study and knowledge is negative to discover the truth, oppositely, with the study deep inside the core of the problem, we may find the very truth, reach a comprehensive and accurate understanding of this matter and gain a lot of knowledge consequently. 觉得这句太长了，在oppositely那里断开。Ts不要过长To begin with, we have to clear that solving one problems and produce several other questions never equates we become more and more complex and mysterious about this problem我们变得复杂和神秘？. With study, we get closer and closer to the real core of the problems and we still possible to find the answer to this question eventually.从质变到量变，引到第二点 Secondly, with much new knowledge we gained, a new scientific knowledge system may probably replace the old one. And the new system has wider adaptation and stronger explanation, which will clarify much more unknown things. For example, before the theory of relativity and quantum mechanics established, lots of unusual phenomenon cannot be explained by Newton's laws, which is suit for only a small part in physics. But after people have composed those three theories into a new and perfect knowledge system, we can give ana reasonable explanation to almost everything.讲到手段的改进 Finally, with increased knowledge experience, we can create some sophisticated equipments for us to discover the world. For example, we human being always have a desire to travel in the universe and see how it really is?. To get a an accurate answer, people have tried for thousands of yearsm这句话有点奇怪，try什么？. From the dream of flying in the sky to the launch of spacecraft into universe, people have solved, also produced numerous problems and obtained much valuable knowledge, which are all contributed to this historical moment. And when Neil Armstrong firstly landed on the moon and walk the first step, just like he said “That's one small step for (a) man, one giant leap for mankind” and the human beings' universe dream has made a great breakthrough eventually. 可是是否得到什么accurate的东西没有说呀，因为ts里说得到accurate的东西，说一下比较好

Furthermore, without such a complex and complicated process which solves and creates problems, we cannot get a simple and easy-understanding way to consider the other issues and learn them by heart easily. First of all, almost every systematic and completed discipline needs such process to rectify their knowledge system. Without this complicated process, the structure of knowledge within this discipline may be imbalanced and uncompleted. Take the development of physics for example. With such course of asking and solving problems, we get the knowledge from the easiest, such as why does the moon goes around the earth, to the most complicated, just as how do those 9 kinds of quarks in operation. And all this knowledge are acquired with the process of solving and producing questions. Secondly, without such irreplaceable and troublesome phase, the knowledge we have gained may be doubtable or have maymany exceptions, and some proceeding conclusion which based on them may be irrational and absurd. For instance, without any careful and accurate examinations, Aristotle thought the earth is the centre of the universe with only reasoning in his brain. And it is ridiculous that his thoughts had even ruled the western world for over two thousands years. If there is no body such as Copernicus or Galileo to point out this absurdity, how negative effect would this fallacy made on the development of science and technology .Therefore, from this point of view, this solving-and-producing-problems process cannot be ignored or even simplified, otherwise, people may reach some unreasonable conclusions.

In sum, with the deep studies of problems, we have gained knowledge and composed our system of knowledge, probably, the things may become more and more complex and complicated, however, we may still get to the core of the answer closer and closer. Just by continualcontinuous,continual会断的，如果没记错的话 solving and producing questions, we human beings obtain all kinds of knowledge bricks by bricks ［brick by brick　不知道是不是固定用法，但是一般by前后的词组都是单数］and then build such magnificent scientific and technology mansion.
条理很清楚，感觉象板书一样。啪啪怕的一条条。
用词上还要注意。另外一点是要在word里先把红杠杠去掉喔，好多都是a和an的错误。下次不帮你改了，自查先喔。
有些问题我都在段落里提出来了，
有点困了，坚持把你的文章看完：）认真看的：）
感觉这篇好长啊，可能是由于困的关系吧。呵呵。晚安了，加油！

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呵呵，研究ing

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Is it true that the more knowledge we obtain, accordingly, the more complex and mysterious 名词呢？we may face? The author believes so. However, I cannot accept this assertion. Truly, with the deep study of one problem, another several 这两个似乎不能一起用new questions may occur. But it does not mean that the things wewill? become complex and mysterious about the problem. Just to the opposite, we will make comprehensible understanding可以让人明白的理解。。？？ owing to throughour efforts.

Admittedly, with the deep study of one problem, t it seems that the whole situation become more and more troublesome. Numerous tough new-born questions and endless information need to be dealt with. So, why are things changing from simple to complicated when we study? On the one handon one hand, this is because almost everything is a complicated organization with numerous variables, which isare changing from time to time. If we want to makeachieve a clear understanding on how they operate accurately, with the study deep inside the problems, they will display much more information and puzzled relationship to trouble us. On the other hand, it is because if we find the solution to just one problemsproblem, probably, the issue may provide us with other more questions to answer. 感觉其实两点是一个问题，统一到一起反而清晰And this circulation seems endless for us limited-energy能这么说吗？ human beings. Thus, this does make us feel complex and complicated这两个不是我们的主观感觉，we should feel confused ect.. For instance, in the ancient times, people may only have one question that what is the smallest particle that consists of 反了。substance consists of particlesall substance? The answer may be molecule or atom, very simple. But after discovering that a atom can be divided, and which is consisted by one atomic nucleus and several electrons. The previous one question has become two: Which particles consists of atomic nucleus and which consists of electrons? Even spending more than 60 years, we have discovered proton, neutron, mesotron, quark and so on, there seems no definite answer to this endless question. Thus, from those perspectives, we have to admit that things do become complicated when we make a deep study to some extend. 观点和例子都没问题 感觉一定可以把这段表述得更简单，清晰

However, this phenomenon never imply that the study and knowledge is negative to discover the truth, oppositely, with the study deep inside the core of the problem, we may find the very truth, reach a comprehensive and accurate understanding of this matter and gain a lot of knowledge consequently. To begin with, we have to clear that solving one problemsproblem and produce several other questions never equates we become more and more complex and mysterious主语不对 about this problem. With study, we get closer and closer to the real core of the problems and we still possible we are likelyto find the answer to this question eventually. Secondly, with much new knowledge we have gained, a new scientific knowledge system may probably replace the old one. And the new system has wider adaptation and stronger explanation, which will clarify much more unknown things. For example, before the theory of relativity and quantum mechanics established, lots of unusual phenomenon cannot be explained by Newton's laws, which is suit for only a small part in physics. But after people have composed those three theories into a new and perfect knowledge system, we can give an reasonable explanation to almost everything. Finally, with increased knowledge experience, we can create some sophisticated equipments for us to discover the world. For example, we human being always have a desire to travel in the universe and see how it really is? To get a accurate answer, people have tried for thousands of years. From the dream of flying in the sky to the launch of spacecraft into universe, people have solved, also produced numerous problems and obtained much valuable knowledge, which are all contributed to this historical moment. And when Neil Armstrong firstly landed on the moon and walk the first step, just like he said “That's one small step for (a) man, one giant leap for mankind” and the human beings' universe dream has made a great breakthrough eventually.

Furthermore, without such a complex and complicated一个词就够 process which solves and creates problems, we cannot get a simple and easy-understanding way to consider the other issues and learn them by heart easily.learn by heart 是背的意思 First of all, almost every systematic and completed discipline needs such process to rectify their knowledge system. Without this complicated process, the structure of knowledge within this discipline may be imbalanced and uncompleted. Take the development of physics for example. With such course of asking and solving problems, we get the knowledge from the easiest, such as why does the moon goes goaround the earth, to the most complicated, just as how do those 9 kinds of quarks in operation. And all this knowledge are acquired with the process of solving and producing questions. Secondly, without such irreplaceable and troublesome phase, the knowledge we have gained may be doubtable or have may exceptions, and some proceeding conclusion which based on them may be irrational and absurd. For instance, without any careful and accurate examinations, Aristotle thought the earth is the centre of the universe with only reasoning in his brain. And it is ridiculous that his thoughts had even ruled the western world for over two thousands years. If there is no body such as Copernicus or Galileo to point out this absurdity, how negative effect would this fallacy made on the development of science and technology .Therefore, from this point of view, this solving-and-producing-problems process cannot be ignored or even simplified, otherwise, people may reach some unreasonable conclusions.

In sum, with the deep studies of problems, we have gained knowledge and composed our system of knowledge, probably, the things may become more and more complex and complicated, however, we may still get to the core of the answer closer and closer. Just by continual solving and producing questions, we human beings obtain all kinds of knowledge bricks by bricks and then build such magnificent scientific and technology mansion.

我的想法：
太长，观点和支持不够突出，我看了很久才大致跟上你的思路，水平有限，提不出具体建议，但是现在越发觉得表述简练，意思明确清晰，非常重要（看pooh的文章总感慨这点）。
我也去写写看，可能能体会多点！ :D

so猫UID: 148633

gosh~ so many words~~~~


Is it true that the more knowledge we obtain, accordingly, the more complex and mysterious we may face? The author believes so. However, I cannot accept this assertion. Truly, with the deep study of one problem, another several new questions may occur. But it does not mean that the things we what do u mean by the things we~~~who become complex on earth? become complex and mysterious about the problem. Just to the opposite, we will make comprehensible understanding owing to our efforts.
clear beginning~~~yet not my favorite kind~

Admittedly, with the deep study of one problem, it seems that the whole situation becomebecomes more and moreone more is enough troublesome. Numerous tough new-born questions and endless information need to be dealt with. So, why are things changing from simple to complicated when we study? strange logic~I can’t see anything with the relationship of cause-and-effect~~~ I guess what u mean is that the present world has shown that questions were born every second yet in ur opinion the world is getting simpler to some extent On the one hand, this is because almost everything is a complicated organization with numerous variables, which is changing from time to time. If we want to make a clear understanding on how they operate accurately, with the study deep inside the problems, they will display much more information and puzzled relationship to trouble us.strange sentence~~~ if we … , they… is it strange? The normal structure should be if we …, we have to(ought to) … On the other hand,on the one hand… on the other… u’d better not use it here. Generally it is utilized when you try to describe a fact from two opposite sides~~~ it is because if we find the solution to just one problems, probably, the issue may provide us with other more questions to answer. And this circulation seems endless for us limited-energyis it an adjective? human beings. Thus, thiswhat? Not so clear does make us feel complex and complicated. For instance, in the ancient times, people may only how do you know that is the only one? Take care of your words’ option have one question that what is the smallest particle that consists of all substance what consists of what?? The answer may be molecule or atom, very simple. But after discovering that a atom can be divided, and which is consisted by one atomic nucleus and several electrons. The previous one question has become two: Which particles consists of atomic nucleus and which consists of electrons? Even spending more than 60 years, we have discovered proton, neutron, mesotron, quark and so on,not to use coma here, they’re 2 separated sentences there seems no definite answer to this endless question. Thus, from those perspectives, we have to admit that things do become complicated when we make a deep study to some extend.
well, it’s hard to give an accurate comment to the paragraph above~~
my opinion:
The examples are so suitable, since u just mention that solving one question may lead to the birth of more-yet it is equal to make thing complex
Also, the logic between one sentence and the next one is not so clear as I expected. So I found a little plain in words and lack of nice organization

However, this phenomenon never imply that the study and knowledge is negative to discover the truth, well, if u truly love to put two sentences in one, I recommend u use ;, not ,oppositely, with the study deep inside the core of the problem, we may find the very truth, reachreaching a comprehensive and accurate understanding of this matter and gain a lot of knowledge consequently. To begin with, we have to clear that solving one problems and produceing several other questions never equates we become more and more complex and mysterious about this problem.aha~~~then why u talked so much in the last paragraph??? With study, we get closer and closer to the real core of the problems and we still possible to find the answer to this question eventually. Secondly, with much new knowledge we gained, a new scientific knowledge system may probably replace the old one. And the new system has wider adaptation and stronger explanation, which will clarify much more unknown things. For example, before the theory of relativity and quantum mechanics established, lots of unusual phenomenon cannot be explained by Newton's laws, which is suit for only a small part in physics. But after people have composed those three theories into a new and perfect knowledge system, we can give ana reasonable explanation to almost everything.good example actually Finally, with increased knowledge experience, we can create some sophisticated equipments for us to discover the world. For example, we human being always have a desire to travel in the universe and see how it really is? To get a accurate answer, people have tried for thousands of years. From the dream of flying in the sky to the launch of spacecraft into universe, people have solved, also produced numerous problems and obtained much valuable knowledge, which are all contributed to this historical moment. And when Neil Armstrong firstly landed on the moon and walk the first step, just like he said “That's one small step for (a) man, one giant leap for mankind” and the human beings' universe dream has made a great breakthrough eventually.
Here I think I found one of ur weakpoints-using the examples
Examples serve for ur theory. Thus it is not necessary for u to list all the fact related to the example which makes ur paragraph full of “waste”
Pick up the core, write them down and give some analysis.
It’ll be much better.~

Furthermore, without such a complex and complicated process which solves and creates problems, we cannot get a simple and easy-understanding way to consider the other issues and learn them by heart easily. First of all, how about changing into another type to spread out ur thinking and analysis~~~there’s not only one means to support ur idea~ almost every systematic and completed discipline needs such process to rectify their knowledge system. Without this complicated process, the structure of knowledge within this discipline may be imbalanced and uncompleted. Take the development of physics for example. With such course of asking and solving problems, we get the knowledge from the easiest, such as why does the moon goes around the earth, to the most complicated, just as how do those 9 kinds of quarks in operation. And all this knowledge are acquired with the process of solving and producing questions. Secondly, without such irreplaceable and troublesome phase, the knowledge we have gained may be doubtable or have may exceptions, and some proceeding conclusion which based on them may be irrational and absurd. For instance, without any careful and accurate examinations, Aristotle thought the earth is the centre of the universe with only reasoning in his brain. And it is ridiculous that his thoughts had even ruled the western world for over two thousands years. If there is no body such as Copernicus or Galileo to point out this absurdity, how negative effect would this fallacy made on the development of science and technology .Therefore, from this point of view, this solving-and-producing-problems process cannot be ignored or even simplified, otherwise, people may reach some unreasonable conclusions.
~~~~feeling like~~~~~
out of the topic~~~~~~
That knowledge makes thing complex is the results of the form of knowledge.
Complicated verifying process is another story~~~
The paragraph above is not so convincing~~~

In sum, with the deep studies of problems, we have gained knowledge and composed our system of knowledge, probably, the things may become more and more complex and complicated, however, we may still get to the core of the answer closer and closer. Just by continual solving and producing questions, we human beings obtain all kinds of knowledge bricks by bricks and then build such magnificent scientific and technology mansion.

Comprehensible~~~
I think you overlook this word in the topic
All the articles rarely analyze what it means, let alone make a contrast between comprehensible and complex, mysterious (which I think is the core of this topic~~~~)
The structure of whole article can be called clear, yet in single paragraph the sentences lack logical organization sometimes~~~
Remember that the existence of examples is to explain ur idea easier, not to make ur article long~~~Omit the useless part and save the useful one next time~~~
Adding some comment and analysis after each examples would be much better~~~yet not to make it complicated. Simplicity sometimes is perfect.
The language, to be frank, needs improvement. You can express what u mean easily, but sometime your expression is vague and deficient of variables.
Just keep on~~~
Fighting~~~~~~

flyingwindUID: 189320

这么多高人给你改了，提不出啥新意见了~~~~

鬼谷子UID: 159645

早就答应你的，今天仔细的给你改了一个。：）

183."As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and more mysterious."随着我们的知识越来越多，事情不是变得更好理解，而是变得更复杂更神秘
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Is it true that the more knowledge we obtain, accordingly, the more complex and mysterious【这两个都是形容词，face后面加的该是名词】 we may face? The author believes so. 【这句没什么用的说，可删】 However, I cannot accept this assertion. Truly, with the deep study of one problem, another several new【删掉another several或者用other questions。。比较好】 questions may occur. But it does not mean that the things we become complex and mysterious about the problem. 【不成话啊兄弟，就直接说it does not mean things become more complex and mysterious】 Just to the opposite, we will make comprehensible understanding owing to our efforts. 【这里还是也应该是more的，会更扣题一点】
【disagree的观点，开头很清晰，可惜细节错误出了不少啊】

Admittedly, with the deep study of one problem, t 【it】seems that the whole situation【这个词用的笼统】 become【becomes】 more and more troublesome. 【怎么现在流行在B1就让步吗？我不是很赞同的】Numerous tough new-born questions and endless information need to be dealt with. So, why are things changing from simple to complicated when we study? 【有点偏差，应该是As we acquire more knowledge然后事情变得容易/难以理解了，不是when we study啊？】 On the one hand, this is because almost everything is a complicated organization with numerous variables, which is changing from time to time. 【觉得variable已经说明问题了，后半句多余了】If we want to make a clear understanding on how they【指代不清啊，直接说就好了】 operate accurately, with the study deep【看到三个deep了，换换吧】 inside the problems, they【主语换了？】 will display much more information and puzzled relationship to trouble us. 【觉得有很大的问题，你的意思是因为每个问题都是复杂且变化的，内部关系复杂，所以complex and complicated。注意题目说的是我们的知识越多越怎么样，这个问题你没有提到啊，感觉你的意思是问题的本质导致越来越complex and complicated的，而不是因为我们的知识多了才变complex and complicated的，是否没有说到重点上呢？】 On the other hand, it is because if we find the solution to just one problems【这个。。汗。。要仔细一点啊，写了要检查的】, probably, the issue may provide us with other more questions to answer.And this circulation seems endless for us limited-energy human beings. Thus, this does make us feel complex and complicated. 【怎么成我们complex and complicated了啊？再汗。。还是没有扣到题目的we acquire more knowledge 上面去，而且，我觉得，应该是说目前的知识科技还不足以解决新的问题，所以复杂了，不应该说因为人类精力有限】For instance, in the ancient times, people may only【绝对了】 have one question that what is the smallest particle that consists of all substance? 【反了，consist of是“由。。组成”的意思】The answer may be molecule or atom, very simple. 【这个我不能同意的，对于那个时代不算是simple了】 But after discovering that a 【an啊，检查啊。。】atom can be divided, and which is consisted by【这里才应该是consist of啊】 one atomic nucleus and several electrons. The previous one question has become two: Which 【what】particles consists of 【还是那个问题，反了】atomic nucleus and which consists of electrons? Even spending more than 60 years, we have discovered proton, neutron, mesotron, quark and so on, there【大写，检查啊。。。】 seems no definite answer to this endless question. Thus, from those perspectives, we have to admit that things do become complicated when we make a deep 【几个deep了？】study to some extend. 【结论了，还是没有看到we acquire more knowledge的问题，我觉得make deep study不能等同于we acquire more knowledge的，只能算是we acquire more information about the problem】
【这段我个人觉得不用分成两个方面的，何况你第一个方面说的是问题本质的问题，跟题目没什么关系了，而且，写的太多了感觉有点拖沓了，重点不突出了。还有一个问题就是，你把让步的部分，你所不赞同的观点的部分写了这么多，那你后面得写多少才能突出你赞同的观点的正确啊？】

However, this phenomenon never imply that the study and knowledge 【终于发现knowledge了。。】is 【？are吧】negative to discover the truth, 【这里断开，另外，有be negative to do 这样的表达吗？没见过】oppositely, with the study deep 【第N次了，最好让语言有点变化】inside the core of the problem, we may find the very truth, reach a comprehensive and accurate understanding of this matter and gain a lot of knowledge consequently. 【可以再简练一点的】To begin with, we have to clear【？】that solving one problems and produce several other questions never equates we 【怎么又we become了啊，我们又变了啊。。。】become more and more complex and mysterious about this problem. With study, 【这个用法也N次了，换换句式吧】we get closer and closer to the real core of the problems and we 【are】still possible to find the answer to this question eventually. 【这个需要证明的，这么光说可不行，尤其看了你上段那么多的篇幅说新问题解决不了，这里凭什么就说最终能解决呢？】Secondly, with much new knowledge we gained, a new scientific knowledge system may probably【重复了吧】 replace the old one. And the new system has wider adaptation and stronger explanation, which will clarify much more unknown things. For example, before the theory of relativity and quantum mechanics established, lots of unusual phenomenon cannot be explained by Newton's laws, which is suit【suitable，检查检查。。】 for only a small part in physics. But after people have composed those three theories into a new and perfect knowledge system, we can give an reasonable explanation to almost everything. Finally, with increased knowledge experience, we can create some sophisticated equipments for us to discover the world. 【这个分论点不知道和论点有什么联系，新机器探索世界，然后就解决问题，然后问题变得容易了吗？你没说清啊】 For example, we human being always have a desire to travel in the universe and see how it really is? To get a accurate answer, people have tried for thousands of years. From the dream of flying in the sky to the launch of spacecraft into universe, people have solved, also produced numerous problems and obtained much valuable knowledge, which are all contributed to this historical moment. And when Neil Armstrong firstly landed on the moon and walk the first step, just like he said “That's one small step for (a) man, one giant leap for mankind” and the human beings' universe dream has made a great breakthrough eventually. 【看了例子大概明白你的分论点了，但是，这个例子明显不如上一个，证明了我们能上太空了，没证明什么问题变得越来越comprehensible了】
【如果B1不是那么多那么长的话，B2还是很好的，不过现在的感觉是，B2没有强于B1，而且，先入为主，看了那么多的B1了，你B2的力度就被削弱了，最好把让步的内容放在后面，你说呢？】

Furthermore, without such a complex and complicated process which solves and creates problems, we cannot get a simple and easy-understanding way to consider the other issues and learn them by heart easily. 【没太懂你的意思。复杂而又复杂的过程指的是什么呢？看起来这里的复杂不是指问题变得复杂。而我们获得了简单易解的方法，这个似乎跟问题有关了，至少是解决问题的方法。Other issue说的是什么呢？是说新出现的问题吗？这里是要解释为什么说新的问题能被解决吗？那为什么要用两个复杂强调process呢？】First of all, 【感觉。。。你是把每一段都当作一篇文章来写的，这样。。字数固然高了。但是，文章岂不是没有重点了】 almost every systematic and completed discipline needs such process to rectify their knowledge system. Without this complicated process, the structure of knowledge within this discipline may be imbalanced and uncompleted. 【又出现两次复杂过程，不过还是不太清楚你指的是什么，是科学研究的全过程吗？】Take the development of physics for example. With such course of asking and solving problems, we get the knowledge from the easiest, such as why does the moon goes around the earth, to the most complicated, just as how do those 9 kinds of quarks in operation. And all this knowledge are acquired with the process of solving and producing questions. 【是这样的过程啊，不过和题目有关系吗，题目是要比较结果，不是说过程，这里看你说的似乎是这个过程的作用？？】Secondly, without such irreplaceable and troublesome phase, the knowledge we have gained may be doubtable or have may【many？】 exceptions, and some proceeding conclusion which based on them may be irrational and absurd. For instance, without any careful and accurate examinations, Aristotle thought the earth is the centre of the universe with only reasoning in his brain. And it is ridiculous that his thoughts had even ruled the western world for over two thousands years. If there is no body such as Copernicus or Galileo to point out this absurdity, how negative effect would this fallacy made on the development of science and technology .Therefore, from this point of view, this solving-and-producing-problems process cannot be ignored or even simplified, otherwise, people may reach some unreasonable conclusions. 【彻底明白了，你整段都是要论述这个过程在科学研究中的作用。看你这样的布局，让我想到了正反散的布局，你这个应该是反正散的顺序，但是，散的太过了，这段完全是一个新的issue了，感觉是有点跑题了】

In sum, with the deep【。。哭了。。 thorough, profound, in-depth, embedded,……】studies of problems, we have gained knowledge and composed our system of knowledge, probably, the things may become more and more complex and complicated, however, we may still get to the core of the answer closer and closer. Just by continual solving and producing questions, we human beings obtain all kinds of knowledge bricks by bricks and then build such magnificent scientific and technology mansion. 【完了完了，又写回去了，只见你同意了越来越复杂和复杂，缺不见你同意more comprehensible，这B2不是白写了吗？】
【总的来说，感觉是费了很大的工夫写的，字数也真是不少。可是B1一出场就把反方的基调挑的那么高，使得B2虽然不错，也无法赶上并挽回，何况B3又跑了。结尾也有不足的地方。
另外就是语言的问题，一个就是不认真啊，小错误太多了，另一个就是用词单一啊，句式也可以再多变一点的，然后就是不要为了长句而长句。
等着你的新作文！
加油啊兄弟！】

nickaaronleeUID: 183378

这么多人都帮楼主改了，呵呵，都不好意思发表自己意见了：）

fengboallanUID: 157405

naiba，我超级想尽一份力，不过这篇人太多了。呵呵，我等你下一篇文章

delta496UID: 193816

幸福的人啊！
羡慕ing！
我也down下来研究ing.

山坡羊UID: 169978

naiba369,  我一直在看你的，看了一个多小时了。
呵呵，作文水平比你差，但说过要回拍的，咬牙也要争取找点意见出来，呵呵！

语法和结构方面都被高人快挑完了，我找些小语法错误，但后来看看实在太小，就不贴了。

说意见吧，层层论点分论点，层层例子，真的很佩服。

但是，真的太长了。看的人容易头晕，我想有的论点不用分那么细，例子也可以说简单一点，不知对不对？：）

山坡羊UID: 169978

呵呵，等下一篇文章我再尽绵薄之力，开心！