ISSUE34 我的第一篇，3.22要考拉，求批！

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ISSUE 34
题目：
Instead of requiring students to take courses in a variety of disciplines—that is, courses ranging from the arts and the humanities to the physical and biological sciences—colleges and universities should allow students to enroll only in those courses that will help prepare them for jobs in their chosen fields. Such concentration is necessary in today's increasingly work-oriented society.



正文：
What courses should colleges and universities allow students to enroll?

    Should colleges and universities allow students to enroll only in those courses that are related with their future jobs? The author claims so. However, I find it will do more harm than good to students.

    Defenders may point out that by dong so colleges and universities can better prepare students for their future career. Admittedly, this is one of the important aims of universities. However, can a student be a good worker enrolling only in those courses that will prepare them for future jobs? It is quite doubtful. First, it is hard to determine which courses will helpful for future jobs, for the society is changing faster and faster, and the information or knowledge that seem to be useful or correct today may be useless tomorrow. Perhaps it is more important for us to command the way of learning through taking different kinds of courses. Secondly, many first-year students may have not finally decided what kind of jobs they want to do in the future so enrolling different kinds of courses may help them to find out what they are really interested in. In short, enrolling in limited courses is not enough for preparing for future jobs.

    Another important reason for my viewpoint is that the speaker may overlook another important value of taking courses in a variety of disciplines. Many disciplines are interrelated, and we may benefit a lot form the knowledge, which seems, at first glance, have no relation with our future jobs. A doctor may benefit a lot from the knowledge of humanity which allows him or her communicate more easily with the patients. A teacher may benefit a lot from the knowledge of psychology which allows him or her understand the students better. A computer seller may also benefit a lot from the knowledge of computer science, which allows him or her to make more profits. In short, it is hard to determine what kind of knowledge will be helpful in one’s future job.

    In addition, preparing students for their future jobs is not the only aim of colleges and universities. They serve more--such as teach students how to cooperate with each other, how to tolerate with different ideas, how to express one's own ideas and feelings, how to persuade people to take their advices, and how to appreciate the work of arts. All of these may be useful in one’s future life, and may be achieved by taking different kinds of courses, such philosophy, anthropology, history, ethics, and art. In short, another more important aim of colleges and universities is to develop a student into a whole man, which may require students to take courses in a variety of disciplines.

    Those who still oppose my viewpoint may further point out that there are so many courses which no one can command all even though they seem to be useful. However, I do not mean that we should learn every subject thoroughly and completely, and nobody can achieve that. What I mean is that we may try to understand something in a variety of field, and then we may be able to excel in one field easier. In today’s society, we call for people who are able to see not only the trees but also the whole forest.

    In sum, taking different kinds of courses may better prepare a student for his or her future life or career because the changing society, the interrelated knowledge, and the uncertain careers. The aim of a university is not only to prepare a student for his or her future career but also to develop him or her into a whole human being.

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What courses should colleges and universities allow students to enroll【有enroll courses的说法么？】?

Should colleges and universities allow 【allow和require还是有区别的】students to enroll only in those courses that are related with their future jobs? The author claims so. However, I find it will do more harm than good to students.

Defenders may point out that by dong so colleges and universities can better prepare students for their future career. Admittedly, this is one of the important aims of universities. However, can a student be a good worker enrolling only in those courses that will prepare them for future jobs? It is quite doubtful. First, it is hard to determine which courses will helpful for future jobs, for the society is changing faster and faster, and the information or knowledge that seem to be useful or correct today may be useless tomorrow. Perhaps it is more important for us to command the way of learning through taking different kinds of courses. Secondly, many first-year students may have not finally decided what kind of jobs they want to do in the future so enrolling different kinds of courses may help them to find out what they are really interested in. In short, enrolling in limited courses is not enough for preparing for future jobs.【建议多用用长句哦】

Another important reason for my viewpoint is that the speaker may overlook another important value of taking courses in a variety of disciplines. Many disciplines are interrelated, and we may benefit a lot form the knowledge, which seems, at first glance,【这两个分句不太通顺】 have no relation with our future jobs. A doctor may benefit a lot from the knowledge of humanity which allows him or her communicate more easily with the patients. A teacher may benefit a lot from the knowledge of psychology which allows him or her understand the students better. A computer seller may also benefit a lot from the knowledge of computer science, which allows him or her to make more profits.【三个benefit a lot from，是不是可以变一下？】 In short, it is hard to determine what kind of knowledge will be helpful in one’s future job.【这句再写的丰富些比较好】

In addition, preparing students for their future jobs is not the only aim 【换个词吧】of colleges and universities. They serve more--such as teach students how to cooperate with each other, how to tolerate with different ideas, how to express one's own ideas and feelings, how to persuade people to take their advices, and how to appreciate the work of arts. All of these may be useful in one’s future life, and may be achieved by taking different kinds of courses, such philosophy, anthropology, history, ethics, and art. In short, another more important aim of colleges and universities is to develop a student into a whole man, which may require students to take courses in a variety of disciplines.

Those who still oppose my viewpoint may further point out that there are so many courses which no one can command all even though they seem to be useful. However, I do not mean that 【一般不用这种说法】we should learn every subject thoroughly and completely, and nobody can achieve that. What I mean is that we may try to understand something in a variety of field, and then we may be able to excel in one field easier. 【建议and不要用太多用用倒装，动名词等等】In today’s society, we call for people who are able to see not only the trees but also the whole forest.

In sum, taking different kinds of courses may better prepare a student for his or her future life or career because 【of】the changing society, the interrelated knowledge, and the uncertain careers. 【少了连接词】The aim of a university is not only to prepare a student for his or her future career but also to develop him or her into a whole human being.
总的来说很通顺可是用词变化和句型变化都太少了，加油！

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ISSUE 34
题目：
Instead of requiring students to take courses in a variety of disciplines—that is, courses ranging from the arts and the humanities to the physical and biological sciences—colleges and universities should allow students to enroll only in those courses that will help prepare them for jobs in their chosen fields. Such concentration is necessary in today's increasingly work-oriented society.



正文：
What courses should colleges and universities allow students to enroll?一般来说，不要一段只有一个句子，这句应该跟下面连在一起组成一段

Should colleges and universities allow students to enroll only in those courses that are related with their future jobs？ The author claims so. However, I find it will do more harm than good to students.

Defenders may point out that by dong so colleges and universities can better prepare students for their future career. Admittedly, this is one of the important aims of universities. However, can a student be a good worker 谁说以后都要当工人？ enrolling only in those courses that will prepare them for future jobs? It is quite doubtful. First, it is hard to determine which courses will helpful for future jobs, for the society is changing faster and faster, and the information or knowledge that seem to be useful or correct today may be useless tomorrow. Perhaps it is more important for us to command the way of command the way of 怎么理解？ learning through taking different kinds of courses. Secondly, many first-year students may have not finally decided what kind of jobs they want to do in the future so enrolling different kinds of courses may help them to find out what they are really interested in. In short, enrolling in limited courses is not enough for preparing for future jobs.

Another important reason for my viewpoint is that the speaker may overlook another important value of taking courses in a variety of disciplines. Many disciplines are interrelated, and we may benefit a lot form the knowledge, which seems, at first glance, have no relation with our future jobs. A doctor may benefit a lot from the knowledge of humanity the humanities 才指人文科学 which allows him or her communicate more easily with the patients. A teacher may benefit a lot from the knowledge of psychology which allows him or her understand the students better. A computer seller may also benefit a lot from the knowledge of computer science, which allows him or her to make more profits. 这个computer seller的例子不太合适，实际上很多作computer seller的都是cs毕业的，最好举个别的例子，比如program designer 要学习音乐，美术，等艺术类的知识In short, it is hard to determine what kind of knowledge will be helpful in one’s future job. 这几个例子不错

In addition, preparing students for their future jobs is not the only aim of colleges and universities. They serve more--such as teach students how to cooperate with each other, how to tolerate with different ideas, how to express one's own ideas and feelings, how to persuade people to take their advices, and how to appreciate the work of arts. All of these may be useful in one’s future life, and may be achieved by taking different kinds of courses, such philosophy, anthropology, history, ethics, and art. In short, another more important aim of colleges and universities is to develop a student into a whole man, which may require students to take courses in a variety of disciplines.

Those who still oppose my viewpoint may further point out that there are so many courses which no one can command all even though they seem to be useful. However, I do not mean that we should learn every subject thoroughly and completely, and nobody can achieve that. What I mean is that we may try to understand something in a variety of field, and then we may be able to excel in one field easier. In today’s society, we call for people who are able to see not only the trees but also the whole forest.不知道老米是否也能明白这个意思

In sum, taking different kinds of courses may better prepare a student for his or her future life or career because the changing society, the interrelated knowledge, and the uncertain careers. The aim of a university is not only to prepare a student for his or her future career but also to develop him or her into a whole human being.
思路比较清晰，各个方面基本都照顾到了，语言驾驭能力也不错。第一篇吗，呵呵，很不错了，加油！

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真是太感谢大家了，我继续努力!