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98. Colleges and universities should offer more courses on popular music, film, advertising, and television because contemporary culture has much greater relevance for students than do arts and literature of the past.
大学应该在流行音乐、电影、广告和电视上开设更多的课程,因为现代文化比过去的艺术文化对学生更适合。

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1,大学课程如何开设成为教育学家和教授的难题。那种方式更加的适合。课程的目的就是教授学生知识,而在什么方面开始课程要适合于学生的发展。
2作为现代文化,他的影响力和吸引人的注意力值得人们去思考。对于大部分年轻人现代文化跟有吸引力。现代文化代表着未来文化的发展方向,值得去研究学习
3 传统文化,是历史积累下来的精华。虽然经典,能够经得起推敲,但是,现实意义并不大。除了几个特殊学科:考古,文学研究,或者古典音乐的研究。其他的学科不用太深究
4合:针对学生的兴趣和专业和未来发展的方向制定现代文化和未来文化的课程的比重。大学实行选课制度!

It is no longer an academic argument that colleges and universities should offer more courses on popular music, film, advertising, and television because contemporary culture has much greater relevance for student than do arts and literature of the past. More people argued which culture would be more excellent for college students. But in this education field, the aim of colleges and universities is to offer suitable courses to cater to the profit of students learning, no matter which kind of culture is better. It is necessary to distinguish different majors of students, because their orientations are different. To design a good curriculum, colleges and universities should offer different kinds of courses which are alternative for students.

More and more modern culture like pop music, Hollywood movie and ESPN TV shows are alluring young people's eyes and ears. Even some of scientists and old professors like enjoying the coziness of modern convenience. It is true that modern art and culture are much easier to accept. Modern culture delegates future orientation of art and culture. Universities and colleges are necessary to offer more courses on pop music, movie, TV, and etc. Thus, students who will graduate in future are much easier to face to the society. No educators would like to see any students get in trouble after they graduated. Supposed that a boy has no interest in modern things like music or movie, how can he affiliate with others when he began his life and future after he graduated. He would have no friends, because friendship is constructed by the same interest. Even I can’t image that how bill gates lead MICROSOFT if he only enjoys art or literature. In that way maybe Xbox would become a electric machine of studying archaeology and been no longer popular by young people, because they have no interest in it. So, it is very important to accept modern culture. Essentially, everyone likes it.


However, classical arts and literature has their own excellence. As time passes and situation  changed, only classical cultures endure for centuries. They are record in the history forever. Comparing modern culture, maybe now when young people listen to the music of 70's, he can't accept the characteristic of the music. When we see TV advertisement of 80's, even, I think this kind of originality in advertisement is so old-fashioned that helping laughing. But no one can forget Balzac's play and Vinci's painting. As a point of my view, classical arts and literatures have excellence. But as a common person, I need not to know too much about them. Commonly it is enough to know the name of Balzac's plays and details of some of plays, because I weren't   archaeologist or literature researcher. It is useless to learning too many details using our limit energy, although it looks lettered to know them. I would like to put most energy of mine into studying science and technology in order to get a well developmental career. No one can enjoy wonderful arts when he is hungry.



As a student of university, I suggest universities and colleges offer both modern art courses like music and movie and classical culture courses like literature. It depends on my major to select which kind of courses to study. If my major is archaeology, I would select literature and classical art besides my required courses. They profit my major studying. Comparing a student of compute science, he likes to study modern TV and movie technology or culture which oriented future computer application. The best way of solving the argument is that universities and colleges should give their rights to students. Let themselves to choose which courses are useful to them. Certainly, basic classic arts and culture courses are required for every student no matter what major.



In sum, both modern culture and classical culture are helpful. therefore, we can't neglect neither of them. Besides the help to our major, we should understand more knowledge of other fields. One person can't live only in his or her own world. He or she must connect with others and have a friendship with others. From student period on, studying more courses of other fields is helpful to their whole life in the future.
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It is no longer an academic argument that colleges and universities should offer more courses on popular music, film, advertising, and television because contemporary culture has much greater relevance for student than do arts and literature of the past. More people argued which culture would be more excellent for college students. But in this education field, the aim of colleges and universities is to offer suitable courses to cater to the profit of students learning, no matter which kind of culture is better. It is necessary to distinguish different majors of students, because their orientations are different. To design a good curriculum, colleges and universities should offer different kinds of courses which are alternative for students.

More and more modern culture like pop music, Hollywood movie and ESPN TV shows are alluring young people's eyes and ears. Even some of scientists and old professors like enjoying the coziness of modern convenience. It is true that modern art and culture are much easier to accept. Modern culture delegates future orientation of art and culture. Universities and colleges are necessary to offer more courses on pop music, movie, TV, and etc. Thus, students who will graduate in future are much easier to face to the society. No educators would like to see any students get in trouble after they graduated. Supposed that a boy has no interest in modern things like music or movie, how can he affiliate with others when he began his life and future after he graduated. 这里似乎应该强调一下大部分人都喜欢谈论pop music and movie,不然欠缺说服力[U]He would have no friends, because friendship is constructed by the same interest. [/U]他可以找跟他有同兴趣的人做朋友的  [U]Even I can’t image that how bill gates lead MICROSOFT if he only enjoys art or literature. In that way maybe Xbox would become a electric machine of studying archaeology and been no longer popular by young people, because they have no interest in it. So, it is very important to accept modern culture. Essentially, everyone likes it.[/U] 没看懂

However, classical arts and literature has their own excellence. As time passes and situation changed, only classical cultures endure for centuries. They are[U] record [/U]  in the history forever. Comparing modern culture, maybe now when young people listen to the music of 70's, he can't accept the characteristic of the music. When we see TV advertisement of 80's, even, I think this kind of originality in advertisement is so old-fashioned that helping laughing. But no one can forget Balzac's play and Vinci's painting. As a point of my view, classical arts and literatures have excellence. But as a common person, I need not to know too much about them. Commonly it is enough to know the name of Balzac's plays and details of some of plays, because I weren't archaeologist or literature researcher. It is useless to learning too many details using our limit energy, although it looks lettered to know them. I would like to put most energy of mine into studying science and technology in order to get a well developmental career. No one can enjoy wonderful arts when he is hungry.这段差点没转过弯来,前面把传统文化说的太好了,经的住时间检验肯定有其存在的理由啊,后面突然180度转弯,全盘否定,说他们没有实用价值和指导意义,貌似有点前后矛盾,请再斟酌

As a student of university, I suggest universities and colleges offer both modern art courses like music and movie and classical culture courses like literature. It depends on my major to select which kind of courses to study. If my major is archaeology, I would select literature and classical art besides my required courses. They profit my major studying. Comparing a student of compute science, he likes to study modern TV and movie technology or culture which oriented future computer application. The best way of solving the argument is that universities and colleges should give their rights to students. Let themselves to choose which courses are useful to them. Certainly, basic classic arts and culture courses are required for every student no matter what major.既然你的观点是两个都开,就应该写各自的好处,似乎比较有说服力,也比较好写啊。


In sum, [U]both modern culture and classical culture are helpful[/U] . 看看,是不是前后矛盾?therefore, we can't neglect neither of them. Besides the help to our major, we should understand more knowledge of other fields. One person can't live only in his or her own world. He or she must connect with others and have a friendship with others. From student period on, studying more courses of other fields is helpful to their whole life in the future.
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听见花开的声音
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It is no longer an academic argument that colleges and universities should offer more courses on popular music, film, advertising, and television because contemporary culture has much greater relevance for student than do arts and literature of the past. More people argued which culture would be more excellent for college students. But in this education field, the aim of colleges and universities is to offer suitable courses to cater to the profit of students learning,[大学的目的可不只是迎合学生的需要,还在于培养学生的个性等等] no matter which kind of culture is better. It is necessary to distinguish different majors of students, because their orientations[orientation这个词用于方向东西南北的定位,对环境的定位,托福听力中常有,这里这个词不合适,用goals, targets即可] are different. To design a good[appropriate, good这种词少出现] curriculum, colleges and universities should offer different kinds of courses which are alternative[这里用法也有些别扭我也不会改] for students.

More and more modern culture like pop music, Hollywood movie and ESPN TV shows are alluring young people's eyes and ears. Even some of scientists and old professors[be advanced in years] like enjoying[直接enjoy不就完了?] the coziness of modern convenience.[luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life] It is true that modern art and culture are much easier to accept. Modern culture delegates future orientation of art and culture. Universities and colleges are necessary to offer more courses on pop music, movie, TV, and etc. Thus, students who will graduate in future are much easier to face to the society. No educators would like to see any students get in trouble after they graduated.[可以说如果教育者不怎么…学生毕业后就怎么…] Supposed that a boy has no interest in modern things like music or movie, how can he affiliate with others when he began his life and future after he graduated. He would have no friends, because friendship is constructed by the same interest. Even I can’t image that how bill gates[人名大写] lead MICROSOFT if he only enjoys art or literature. In that way maybe Xbox would become a electric machine of studying archaeology and been no longer popular by young people, because they have no interest in it. So, it is very important to accept modern culture. Essentially, everyone likes it.[拜托,不是每个人都是学计算机的,花看不懂俺也看不懂,xbox是什么冬冬啊俺只知道Xerox是施乐复印机,觉得你这个例子不是很好,可以说一个学生没有现代艺术的知识在工作中会遇到苦难等等,交朋友方面我觉得不会啊,我就有朋友不喜欢时尚的]


However, classical arts and literature has their own excellence. As time passes and situation changed, only classical cultures endure for centuries. They are record [recorded] in the history forever. Comparing modern culture, maybe now when young people listen to the music of 70's, he can't accept the characteristic of the music. When we see TV advertisement of 80's, even, I think this kind of originality in advertisement is so old-fashioned that helping laughing. But no one can forget Balzac's play and Vinci's painting. As a point of my view, classical arts and literatures have excellence. But as a common person, I need not to know too much about them. Commonly it is enough to know the name of Balzac's plays and details of some of plays, because I weren't archaeologist or literature researcher. It is useless to learning too many details using our limit energy, although it looks lettered to know them. I would like to put most energy of mine into studying science and technology in order to get a well developmental career. No one can enjoy wonderful arts when he is hungry.[这一段不是很又力度,最后怎么冒出来学生应该学习为将来职业谋划的论点来?其实古典艺术对shape one’s personality很有用处,你若想驳斥应该驳斥这一点]



As a student of university, [As a university student,]I suggest universities and colleges offer both modern art courses like music and movie and classical culture courses like literature. It depends on my major to select which kind of courses to study. If my major is archaeology, I would select literature and classical art besides my required courses. They profit my major studying. Comparing a student of compute science, he likes to study modern TV and movie technology or culture which oriented future computer application. The best way of solving the argument is that universities and colleges should give their rights to students. Let themselves to choose which courses are useful to them. Certainly, basic classic arts and culture courses are required for every student no matter what major.[no matter what major he/she is]



In sum, both modern culture and classical culture are helpful. therefore, we can't neglect neither of them. Besides the help to our major, we should understand more knowledge of other fields. One person can't live only in his or her own world. He or she must connect with others and have a friendship with others. From student period on, studying more courses of other fields is helpful[beneficial] to their whole life in the future.
[整体感觉不错该说的都说了
别忘了你的诺言帮俺看看issue39]
我们就是这样苍老的,从时光的一端碾转到时光的另一端,请别说再见,不需要再见

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颜色妹妹,呵呵大海,哈哈,你们的作文我都看了。顶一下,我明天上午改一下再发上来
我考过3次4级,3次6级,4次托福,2次GRE。
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No.1 issue98 教育类的,欢迎拍啊,强烈喜欢,有贴必回,且回拍哈哈
98. Colleges and universities should offer more courses on popular music, film, advertising, and television because contemporary culture has much greater relevance for students than do arts and literature of the past.
大学应该在流行音乐、电影、广告和电视上开设更多的课程,因为现代文化比过去的艺术文化对学生更适合。

提纲:
1,大学课程如何开设成为教育学家和教授的难题。那种方式更加的适合。课程的目的就是教授学生知识,而在什么方面开始课程要适合于学生的发展。
2作为现代文化,他的影响力和吸引人的注意力值得人们去思考。对于大部分年轻人现代文化跟有吸引力。现代文化代表着未来文化的发展方向,值得去研究学习
3 传统文化,是历史积累下来的精华。虽然经典,能够经得起推敲,但是,现实意义并不大。除了几个特殊学科:考古,文学研究,或者古典音乐的研究。其他的学科不用太深究
4合:针对学生的兴趣和专业和未来发展的方向制定现代文化和未来文化的课程的比重。大学实行选课制度!

It is no longer an academic argument that colleges and universities should offer more courses on popular music, film, advertising, and television because contemporary culture has much greater relevance for student than do arts and literature of the past. More people argued which culture would be more excellent ?怪怪的,beneficial?for college students. But in this education field, the aim of colleges and universities is to offer suitable courses to cater to迎合利益? the profit of students learning, no matter which kind of culture is better.把教育的目的讲得太肤浅了,单纯满足学生的利益(按照你的说法)势必会导致很多社会问题 It is necessary to distinguish different majors of students, because their orientations are different. To design a good curriculum, colleges and universities should offer different kinds of courses which are alternative for students.开头后面一半的内容和题目好象没太大关系了

ts提前,后面两句不是ts吧。按照我的理解是在陈述事实More and more modern culture like pop music, Hollywood movie and ESPN TV shows are alluring young people's eyes and ears. Even some of scientists and old professors like enjoying the coziness of modern convenience. It is true that modern art and culture are much easier to accept. Modern culture delegates委派。。。为代表?represents future orientation of art and culture. Universities and colleges are necessary to offer more courses on pop music, movie, TV, and etc. Thus, students who will graduate in future are much easier to face to the society. No educators would like to see any students get in trouble after they graduated. Supposed that a boy has no interest in modern things like music or movie, how can he affiliate with others when he began his life and future after he graduated. He would have no friends, because friendship is constructed by the same interest. Even I can’t image that how bill gates人名大写 lead MICROSOFT if he only enjoys art or literature. In that way maybe Xbox would become a electric machine of studying archaeology and been no longer popular by young people, because they have no interest in it. So, it is very important to accept modern culture. Essentially, everyone likes it. 太武断了。必然的,每个人都喜欢它。而且take course 和喜欢是两回事情。有些东西是喜欢,但是和正规上课接受系统教育是否划等号?现在没有开设这些课程,我也能和别人相处得很好,谈得很融洽。不开课不等于不接触这些文化!应该从是否值得系统学习上来支持学习这些东西

However, classical arts and literature has their own excellence. As time passes and situation changed, only classical cultures endure for centuries. They are recorded in the history forever. Comparing to modern culture, maybe now when young people listen to the music of 70's, 前后主语不一致,compare的东西he can't accept the characteristic of the music. why?When we see TV advertisement of 80's, even, I think this kind of originality in advertisement is so old-fashioned that helping I can’t help laughing. But no one can forget Balzac's play and Vinci's painting. As a point of my view, classical arts and literatures have excellence. But as a common person, I need not to know too much about them. 现在不是对于一个普通人来说,对象是大学教育。文化常识是否重要?? Commonly it is enough to know the name of Balzac's plays and details of some of plays,文化给人带来的是精神上的熏陶和洗礼,光记一个名字是否必要?是否必须?我觉得讲得太浅。 because I weren't archaeologist or literature researcher.是否只有考古和文学研究人员才需要学习classical art..如果观众群, 那他们本身的存在价值就值得商榷了 It is useless to learning too many details using our limit energy, although it looks lettered to know them.把对于classical的学习认为是看上去有修养,本身就表面化了。楼主应该讲得再深一点 I would like to put most energy of mine into studying science and technology in order to get a well developmental career. No one can enjoy wonderful arts when he is hungry. 这句话暗示教育的目的是教会人们生存技能,和开头的aim不统一



As a student of university, I suggest universities and colleges offer both modern art courses like music and movie and classical culture courses like literature既然认为pop重要classical不重要,那何必开设选修课程,单开始pop为必修不就可以了吗?浪费学校资源,而且与上一段很矛盾. It depends on my major to select which kind of courses to study. If my major is archaeology, I would select literature and classical art besides my required courses选修课的目的在我看来是补充自己薄弱的地方,使自己的知识更多元化。而不是选修相关的课程。. They profit my major studying. Comparing a student of compute science, he likes to study modern TV and movie technology or culture which oriented future computer application. The best way of solving the argument is that universities and colleges should give their rights to students. Let themselves to choose which courses are useful to them. Certainly, basic classic arts and culture courses are required for every student no matter what major. 如果课程本身没有价值,作为学校应该引导和不不开设这类课程。

In sum, both modern culture and classical culture are helpful你的文章里好象是讲modern helpful,没有说classical helpful. therefore,大写 we can't neglect neither of them. Besides the help to our major, we should understand more knowledge of other fields. One person can't live only in his or her own world. He or she must connect with others and have a friendship with others. From student period on, studying more courses of other fields is helpful to their whole life in the future. 结论从第三句开始和主题没有很紧密的关系,升华是指扣题的升华,把问题扩大了但没有支持

觉得这篇文章应该重新考虑一下,深度不够。且前后矛盾。有些用词如果不确定的话,最好先查一下。砸得狠了点。因为我最近身体不好,不能帮大家改很多文章。所以集中火力改一篇。希望对你有所帮助,也表示我的谢意
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