Issue28 我的第一篇。写了3天啊，给拍拍吧，我发到3篇就开始拍人

flyfish9UID: 156664

题目：
Students should memorize facts only after they have studied the ideas, trends and concepts that help explain those facts. Students who have learned only facts have learned very little.

分析：
should类题目，要从需要性和可行性的方面来说
采用纯反对态度，论证不需要性（只记住事实同样可以成为专家），不可行性（有些知识只有事实没有解释；要想都把解释搞清楚太困难，容易被puzzled）

Some people are against absolute fact remembrance, thus claim that facts should be memorized only after the relative ideas, trends and concepts have been studied. But as the case stands, Students can, sometimes have to, memorize facts before they have studied things helping explain those facts.

People who only remember a lot of facts is also a kind of specialist, although different from those who know all the ideas, trends and concepts related to the facts of their knowledge. The wide facts they remembered is a precious wealth to society. A historian is a good one, at least a useful one, if he can memorize the exact time of all the historic events. Similarly, students who only remember facts can also be this kind of experts.

Sometimes it is difficult or even impossible to know the things which can help to explain facts, making it necessary to just remember the facts. In the technological area, there are kinds of experience formulas, which are summarized from many a experiement. These formulas are hard or impossible to explain, but practical in solving engineering problems. There is no way for students who study these sorts of knowledge to avoid only memorizing facts.

At the beginning of study, students will be puzzled if they try to studied all the relative ideas, trends and concepts, which are usually much harder to understand than the facts themselves. Especially to young people, whose memory is wonderful while intellect is poor, remembrance without understanding is necessary. In addition, it is much easier to understand the explanations with the help of fact remembrance.

To sum up, it is not necessary to avoid memorizing facts before studying explanation. And sometimes, this avoidance is a mission impossible. Thus, students should be allowed to remember some facts, no matter if they have learned the ideas, trends and concepts that help explain those facts.

naiba369UID: 131655

写了3天啊，给拍拍吧，我发到3篇就开始拍人

如果没有人给你改，那先push out yourself，先改改别人的吧，同样也是学习、提高呢

别等到发了3篇，呵呵，那还要在9天后呢，呵呵

乒乓球爱上九月UID: 162925

你的审题有问题 题目里面有个only呢


为虾米要三篇才拍撒? :o

naiba369UID: 131655

https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=207761

把上面的链接看一下，3x

jasoncaUID: 194895

题目：
Students should memorize facts only after they have studied the ideas, trends and concepts that help explain those facts. Students who have learned only facts have learned very little.

分析：
should类题目，要从需要性和可行性的方面来说
采用纯反对态度，论证不需要性（只记住事实同样可以成为专家），不可行性（有些知识只有事实没有解释；要想都把解释搞清楚太困难，容易被puzzled）

Some people are against absolute fact remembrance, thus claim claiming that facts should be memorized only after the relative relevant ideas, trends and concepts have been studied. But as the case stands, Students can, sometimes have to, memorize facts before they have studied things helping explain those facts.

People who only remember a lot of facts is also a kind of specialist, although different from those who know all the ideas, trends and concepts related to the facts of their knowledge. The widetremendous facts they have remembered is a precious wealth to society. A historian is a good oneexample, at least a useful one 插入语多余, if he/she can memorize the exact time of all the historic events. Similarly, students who only remember facts can also be this kind of experts.
有点跑题，题目强调的是学生学习的方法，而不是具体哪一类人才的长短，HISTORIAN的例子不好，学生并不能从此类比推出
Sometimes it is difficult or even impossible to know the things which can help to explain facts, making it necessary to just remember the facts. In the technological area, there are kinds of experience formulas, which are summarized from many a experiement. These formulas are hard or impossible to explain, but practical in solving engineering problems. There is no way for students who study these sorts of knowledge to avoid only memorizing facts. There is no way for students to study such knowledge by avoiding memorizing facts only
这一段的立论有点弱，FORMULAS 可以从FACTS得到，已经由前人解决，学生的任务是学习，完全可以先学FORMULA，然后应用与实际，加以验证，促进学习，反而支持了反方观点
At the beginning of study, students will be puzzled if they try to studied study all if they always try to start from the relative ideas, trends and concepts, which are usually much harder to understand than the facts themselves. This is particularly true Especially to young people, whose memory is wonderful while intellect comprehending is poor, remembrance memorizing prior to without understanding is therefore necessary. In addition, it is much easier to understand the explanations with the help of fact remembrance.
这段比前面要好，讲明了FACTS的一大用处
To sum up, it is not necessary to avoid memorizing facts before studying explanation. And sometimes, this avoidance is a mission impossible. Thus, students should be allowed to remember some facts, no matter if they have learned the ideas, trends and concepts that help explain those facts.

总体来讲，这篇作文没有抓到实处，说服力不足，语法还行，用词一般。可能采取肯定的立场更容易写

乒乓球爱上九月UID: 162925

up

flyfish9UID: 156664

谢谢大家啊，特别谢谢jasonca，改得好认真！
前两天家里宽带断了一直上不来快郁闷死了。
主要刚开始写，水平太差了，所以不敢改别人的文章；不过我会开始试着提提意见，不会只做享用成果的人的

legendhfwangUID: 191674

字数是不是少了一些啊

flyfish9UID: 156664

重温自己的第一篇文章，感慨颇深。
那时候一切都不熟悉，字数很少，也出了不少问题。
不过第一篇的意义还是非同寻常的，确实是一道坎。
现在写起来逐渐轻松多了，虽然还离成功很远，但毕竟看到了曙光。
大家一起努力吧！