issue56 大家扔石头过来吧

ilmfampUID: 188503

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56 Governments should focus more on solving the immediate problems of today rather than trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future.
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The immediate problems are so urgent that call for prompt solving. But government should also focus on future problems for they may come to be the immediate problems for future generation. However, as the resource of every government is limited, in my opinion, government should focus more on solving the immediate problems in front of them.

Solving immediate problems of today is a guarantee to the normal running of the society.  If violence happens, governments certainly have to solve the problem immediately. Also, take the problem of peasant’s income in my country as an example. Our government implemented systematical policies to make sure that the peasant could sustain a basic live standard, these polices including decreasing the tax of farming, increasing the price of farm products and so on. Although education of peasants is also a problem that in the future will influence the whole development of our country, the government has to put it in the second place considering the urgence of the peasant's living problem . From these we can see that for governments the question is generally not should but must to solve the immediate problems.

Solving the immediate problems is also a test of governments’ ability, so it is vital in earning the support of their people. Citizens judge a government mostly by how they solve the present problems not how they solve the future problems that actually are difficult to judge. Transportation problem is one of the major problems in front of many governments. A government's achievement in solving this problem can be showed by how many roads or crossroads are built. If the government also try to solve the anticipate problems in the future, such as more and more vehicle would run on the road, they have to build longer and wider roads than present need.The government will not be lauded but be criticized, for anticipation may not definitely happen and it is a waste of present resources. Government should focus more on present problems to meet the needs of its citizens.

Admittedly, although the governments have to solve the immediate problems at first, attention should also be paid to the anticipated problems of the future. Development of today should not be based on sacrifice of the future generation. The environment problem is the most obvious one. Although laws are enacted to regulate pollution from companies, in order to pursue a high development of the economy, these laws are not strictly executed, which will definitly result in  enviroment pollution damaging the life of future generations. The Chinese government offers one method to solve this problem- "sustainable development", that is to say development of today should  be set up on the consideration of  future generation.

In all, government should focus more on immediate problems but they should also take the future problems into consideration. Maybe the measure of sustainable development is one way to solve this dilemma

gondolierUID: 193827

56 Governments should focus more on solving the immediate problems of today rather than trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future.
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The immediate problems are so urgent that call for prompt solving solution. But government should also focus on future problems for they may come to be the immediate problems for future generation. However, as the resource of every government is limited, in my opinion, government should focus more on solving the immediate problems in front of them.

Solving immediate problems of today is a guarantee to gurantees the normal running of the society. If violence happens, governments certainly have to solve the problem immediately. Also, take the problem of peasant’s income in my country as an example. Our government implemented systematical policies to make sure that the peasant could sustain a basic live standard, 去掉these policies including decreasing the tax of farming, increasing to avoid repetition, ->raising the price of farm products and so on. Although education of peasants 太别扭了，还是改成education in rural areas is also a problem that in the future will influence the whole development of our country, the government has to put it in the second place lower priority considering the urgence of the peasant's living problem . From these we can see that for governments the question is generally not should but must 不太通吧 to solve the immediate problems.
In my humble opnion: do not cite evidence in out native country, more universal examples such as "unemployment" "social security"might easily arouses foreign readers' empathy

Solving the immediate problems is also a test of governments’ ability, so it is vital in earning for winning the support of their people. Citizens judgeevaluate a government mostly by how they solve the present problems not how they solve the future problems that actually are difficult to judge. Transportation probleminefficiency is one of the major problems in front of many governments. A government's achievement in solving this problem can be showed by how many roads or crossroads are built. If the government also try to solve the anticipated problems in the future, such as more and more vehicles would run on the road, they have to build longer and wider roads than present need.The government will not be lauded but 不要be criticized, for anticipation may not definitely happen and it is a waste of present resources. Government should focus more on present problems to meet the needs of its citizens.

Admittedly, although the governments have to solve the immediate problems at first, attention should also be paid to the anticipated problems of the future. Development of today should not be based on sacrifice of the future generation. 是不是用trade...for...更好The environment problem is the most obvious one. Although laws are enacted to regulate pollution from companies, in order to pursue a high development of the economy, these laws are not strictly executed, which will definitly result in enviroment pollution damaging the life of future generations. The Chinese government offers这样说不太尊重事实把，嘿嘿。。 one method to solve this problem- "sustainable development", that is to say development of today should be set up on the consideration of future generation.

In all, government should focus more on immediate problems but they should also take the future problems into consideration. Maybe the measure of sustainable development is one way to solve this dilemma

思路很清晰，三段的TS也很到位，只是语言上还有更多可以改进的地方，body3可以更深入论述sustainable development

sblbaslerUID: 175229

The immediate problems are so urgent that [B][they][/B] call for prompt solving. But government should also focus on future problems for they may come to be the immediate problems for future generation. However, as the resource of every government is limited, in my opinion, government should focus more on solving the immediate problems in front of them.
[B][个人认为第一句话可以不要，因为你后面还有一个however，转来转去的比较罗嗦，而且显得逻辑不够严禁，而且既然你前面说了两个都重要为什么后面还要说解决现有问题重要呢][/B]
Solving immediate problems of today is a guarantee to the normal running of the society. If violence happens, governments certainly have to solve the problem immediately. Also, take the problem of peasant’s income in my country as an example. Our government implemented systematical policies to make sure that the peasant could sustain a basic l [B][living][/B] standard, . [B][把这句话变成插入语插到第一个policies的后面][/B] Although education of peasants is also a problem that in the future will influence the whole development of our country, the government has to put it in the second place considering the urgence of the peasant's living problem . From these we can see that for governments the question [B][什么question][/B] is generally [B][not should but must][/B] [B][这不叫英语呀，not simply necessary but imperative to ][/B]  solve the immediate problems.
[B][这段例子还可以，但不是很精彩][/B]
Solving the immediate problems is also a test of governments’ ability, so it is vital in earning the support of their people. [B][这句话如果用中文说似乎可以懂，逻辑也没什么问题，但用英文这样表达以后，感觉不是很对，你可以再仔细体会一下][/B] Citizens judge a government mostly by how they solve the present problems not how they solve the future problems that actually are difficult to judge. Transportation problem is one of the major problems in front of many governments. A government's achievement in solving this problem can be showed by how many roads or crossroads are built. If the government also try to solve the anticipate problems in the future, such as more and more vehicle would run on the road, they have to build longer and wider roads than present need.The government will not be lauded but be criticized, for anticipation may not definitely happen and it is a waste of present resources. Government should focus more on present problems to meet the needs of its citizens.
[B][这一段由于TS写的有些问题因此整段给人的感觉就是说服力不强，而且举的例子不是事实在在的例子更多是介于说理与举例之间，给人一种不信服的感觉][/B]
Admittedly, although the governments have to solve the immediate problems at first, [B][为什么要用被动呢][/B] Development of today should not be based [B][at the cost of 更长用些吧][/B] the future generation. The environment problem is the most obvious one. Although laws are enacted to regulate pollution from companies, in order to pursue a high development of the economy, these laws are not strictly executed, which will definitly result in enviroment pollution damaging the life of future generations. The Chinese government offers one method to solve this problem- "sustainable development", that is to say development of today should be set up on the consideration of future generation.
[B][你整篇文章的TS句既然写的那么绝对，这里的转折似乎有些不妥][/B]
In all, government should focus more on immediate problems but they should also take the future problems into consideration. Maybe the measure of sustainable development is one way to solve this dilemma
[B][整篇文章最大的败笔就是最后一段，我觉得这使得文章跑题，因为你的中心不是两个方面都要考虑呀，如果说上一段的转折还凑合说的过去的话，最后一段和中心不能说背道而驰也差不多][/B]


[B]整个文章两个问题最致命[/B]
[B]1是语言问题，似乎也没什么大的语法错误，但读起来很别扭，有的话说的很不地道，而且词用的过于简单，给人一种很肤浅的感觉[/B]
[B]2就是逻辑问题，其实这篇文章个人认为写两方面都重要是最好的，刚开始看的时候一看你第一段的TS一点余地都没有就比较奇怪想看看你究竟怎么能自圆其说，但从文章来看，你写的还是两个都重要，这样给人的印象就很不好[/B]
[B]其实这篇文章完全可以这样写：开头说两个都重要，第一个BODY说一个重要，第二个说另一个重要，第三个说其实要把两个统一起来，最后深化一下论点[/B]

sblbaslerUID: 175229

以上是个人的理解，还请赐教