issue41 nonmainstream马上就要考了没啥把握想请大家看看

louchen1984UID: 172975

41"Such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits play a vital role in society by satisfying human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science."

In ancient times, when mainstream science such as physics, chemistry and maths were hardly developed, people depended largely on astrology, fortune-telling, and paranormal pursuits to explain the world and predict the future.  However, since the revolution of science and technology broke out in 19th century and a great advance of psychology took place, little by little, the role played by those nonmainstreams ways to inquiry paled against more reasonable and logic explanations provided by science and psychology.

It is true that past people put great emphasis on astrology, fortune-telling, and paranormal pursuits in order to explain the world and predict the future.In human nature people have psychological demand to be assured by knowing what would happened to them. Meanwhile at that time science was hardly developed. Both the psychological need and lack of scientific knowledge resulted in past people's deep trust in such mysterious ways. In eastern coutries, some groups such as necromancers were believed to have the ability to discover people's hidden ideas, to talk with ghost and to release souls from purgatory. These necromancers were widely respected because people were afraid to fall into hell after death, they believed that the necromancers could lead them to Elysium. In western countries, Indians and witches were believed to have the supernatural power to tell fortunes of a person's past, present and future. To do this, they read portents by watching a crystal ball or tea leaves in a glass, and this mysterious method usually eliminated all the  suspicion people may had before, if there were any. Compared to these two inquiry ways, the astrology seemed more convincing, which was not absolutely groundless and might had some common place with the later developed astronomy. In classical China, Greece, and Rome, the astrologers, ususally engaged in royal courts, predicted what would happen on earth by observing the aspects, positions and movements of stars. The emperors always relied on them to make crucial decisions such as military strategies or when was the appropriate time to hold a ceremony. The similar things existed in western world, until late in 17th century, many Europeans consulted astrologers to calculate the fate of an imminent wedding or a sign of illness. To sum up, with no consideration of their correctness, people in ancient time were used to turn to the fortune-tellers and astrologers for help once they feared of life or nature.

However, with the help of increasingly developed science and technology as well as the comprehensive psychology, people are much more certain about ourselves and the world, with many natural phenomenons explained, and as a result people paid less attention to those predictors who seem to be less trustworthy. For example, Sigmund Freud's theory about subconsciousness explained why people dreamed such dreams and revealed that sometimes people's behavior were subconsciously influenced by their inside impulses and desires. Since then people did not depend on fortune-tellers to tell them what their dreams indicated and what would happen as a result. Also since we have made great progress in astronomy, astronomers are able to give more well-grouded explanation to many astronomic phenomenons rather then the astrologers could. That is to say, with scientific methods and theories, today's scientists can make much more explict and accurate predictions than ever before. Admittedly, there are still many people believe in astrology or fortune-telling or something alike, because they need to find a reliance which can never be doubted and questioned and rely on it to gain assurance and confidence for life. But after all, these people are fewer and usually they depend on science much more even they are not aware of this, as today's world is a world of truth and knowledge.

In conclusion, the nonmainstream inquiry ways did play an crucial role in past, and becaus of people's psychological need they are still part of today's world. However, their functions paled gradually as the accelerated pace of science and psychology develpment.

今天多发了一篇，不好意思，还请版主不要见怪 :)

鬼谷子UID: 159645

占一个
最近改了两篇41了
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louchen1984UID: 172975

不好意思 我是看了昨天的某个帖子，上面有个不错的提纲就搬过来了。

鬼谷子UID: 159645

No.1 issue41 nonmainstream马上就要考了没啥把握想请大家看看
41"Such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits play a vital role in society by satisfying human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science."

In ancient times, when mainstream science such as physics, chemistry and maths 【math】were hardly developed, people depended largely on astrology, fortune-telling, and paranormal pursuits to explain the world and predict the future. However, since the revolution of science and technology broke out in 19th century and a great advance of psychology【跟心理学也有关系吗？】 took place, little by little, the role played by those nonmainstreams ways to【of？】 inquiry paled against more reasonable and logic explanations provided by science and psychology. 【第一句挺好的，但是后面的句子中你的意思似乎是19世纪人类才有科学技术，然后人们才不相信非主流了，不是很妥当。】

It is true that past people put great emphasis on astrology, fortune-telling, and paranormal pursuits in order to explain the world and predict the future. In human nature people have psychological demand 【demands】to be assured by knowing what would happened to them. 【嗯，明白为什么你要说心理学了】Meanwhile at that time science was hardly developed【用过了，换换】. Both the psychological need and lack of scientific knowledge resulted in past people's deep trust in such mysterious ways. In eastern coutries, 【countries】 some groups such as necromancers were believed to have the ability to discover people's hidden ideas, to talk with ghost and to release souls from purgatory【炼狱是western的】. These necromancers were widely respected because people were afraid to fall into hell after death, 【后面的另起一句】they believed that the necromancers could lead them to Elysium. In western countries, Indians and witches 【这是怎么个并列法？】were believed to have the supernatural power to tell fortunes of a person's past, present and future. To do this, they read portents by watching a crystal ball or tea leaves in a glass, and this mysterious method usually eliminated all the suspicion people may had before, if there were any. Compared to these two inquiry ways, the astrology seemed more convincing, which was not absolutely groundless and might had some common place with the later developed astronomy. In classical【？？？？】 China, Greece, and Rome, the astrologers, ususally【usually】 engaged in royal courts, predicted what would happen on earth by observing the aspects, positions and movements of stars. The emperors always relied on them to make crucial decisions such as military strategies or when was the appropriate time to hold a ceremony. The similar things existed in western world, 【前面的Greece, Rome不是西方吗】until late in 17th century, many Europeans consulted astrologers to calculate the fate of an imminent wedding or a sign of illness. To sum up, with no consideration of their correctness, people in ancient time were used to turn to the fortune-tellers and astrologers for help once they feared of life or nature.【总体的感觉是很罗嗦，而且没有重点。试着简练一点，找出一点共性来谈，不要把想到的东西都写上去】

However, with the help of increasingly developed science and technology as well as the comprehensive psychology, people are much more certain about ourselves and the world, with many natural phenomenons【这个词就已经是复数了】 explained, and as a result people paid less attention to those predictors who seem to be less trustworthy. 【混乱，拆开成两到三个句子来写，要么就简练点】 For example, Sigmund Freud's theory about subconsciousness explained why people dreamed such dreams and revealed that sometimes people's behavior were subconsciously influenced by their inside impulses and desires. Since then people did not depend on fortune-tellers to tell them what their dreams indicated and what would happen as a result. Also since we have made great progress in astronomy, astronomers are able to give more well-grouded 【ground】explanation to many astronomic phenomenons rather then the astrologers could. That is to say, with scientific methods and theories, today's scientists can make much more explict 【explicit，用word检查到没线了再发】and accurate predictions than ever before. Admittedly, 【这里就应该再起一段了】there are still many people believe in astrology or fortune-telling or something alike, because they need to find a reliance which can never be doubted and questioned and rely on it to gain assurance and confidence for life. But after all, these people are fewer and usually they depend on science much more even they are not aware of this, as today's world is a world of truth and knowledge.

In conclusion, the nonmainstream inquiry ways did play an crucial role in past, and becaus【检查！】 of people's psychological need they are still part of today's world. However, their functions paled gradually as the accelerated pace of science and psychology development【检查！！】

【总的来讲，首先感觉语言还不够流畅，应该多加练习，论述上面泛泛而没有重点，结构上面，先说了反面，我不赞成的写法，然后写正面的里面又加了让步，混乱啊，还有就是不认真，希望至少把自己能够解决的拼写和语法错误改了再发上来。还需要进一步的努力啊！加油啊！】.

nickaaronleeUID: 183378

In ancient times, when mainstream science such as physics, chemistry and maths were hardly developed, people depended largely on astrology, fortune-telling, and paranormal pursuits to explain the world and predict the future. （However）, since the revolution of science and technology broke out in 19th century and a great advance of psychology took place, little by little, the role played by those nonmainstreams ways to inquiry paled against more reasonable and logic explanations provided by science and psychology.

It is true that past people put great emphasis on astrology, fortune-telling, and paranormal pursuits in order to explain the world and predict the future.In human nature people have psychological demand to be assured by knowing what would happened to them. Meanwhile at that time science was hardly developed. Both the psychological need and lack of scientific knowledge resulted in past people's deep trust in such mysterious ways. In eastern coutries, some groups such as necromancers were believed to have the ability to discover people's hidden ideas, to talk with ghost and to release souls from purgatory. These necromancers were widely respected because people were afraid to fall into hell after death, they believed that the necromancers could lead them to Elysium. In western countries, Indians and witches were believed to have the supernatural power to tell fortunes of a person's past, present and future. To do this, they read portents by watching a crystal ball or tea leaves in a glass, and this mysterious method usually eliminated all the suspicion people may had before, if there were any. Compared to these two inquiry ways, the astrology seemed more convincing, which was not absolutely groundless and might had some common place with the later developed astronomy. In classical China, Greece, and Rome, the astrologers, ususally engaged in royal courts, predicted what would happen on earth by observing the aspects, positions and movements of stars. The emperors always relied on them to make crucial decisions such as military strategies or when was the appropriate time to hold a ceremony. The similar things existed in western world, until late in 17th century, many Europeans consulted astrologers to calculate the fate of an imminent wedding or a sign of illness. To sum up, with no consideration of their correctness, people in ancient time were used to turn to the fortune-tellers and astrologers for help once they feared of life or nature.（举了很多例子，很充实的说明了过去人们依赖nonmainstream，然后楼主的观点是同意，还有否定，还是中立呢？从手段来看，楼主however后面才是自己支持的，那么用这么多笔墨来说明nonmainstream是不是有些主次不分了？）

However, with the help of increasingly developed science and technology as well as the comprehensive psychology, people are much more certain about ourselves and the world, with many natural phenomenons explained, and as a result people paid less attention to those predictors who seem to be less trustworthy. For example, Sigmund Freud's theory about subconsciousness explained why people dreamed such dreams and revealed that sometimes people's behavior were subconsciously influenced by their inside impulses and desires. Since then people did not depend on fortune-tellers to tell them what their dreams indicated and what would happen as a result. Also since we have made great progress in astronomy, astronomers are able to give more well-grouded explanation to many astronomic phenomenons rather then the astrologers could. That is to say, with scientific methods and theories, today's scientists can make much more explict and accurate predictions than ever before. Admittedly, there are still many people believe in astrology or fortune-telling or something alike, because they need to find a reliance which can never be doubted and questioned and rely on it to gain assurance and confidence for life. But after all, these people are fewer and usually they depend on science much more even they are not aware of this, as today's world is a world of truth and knowledge.（本段前半部分比较好的回应了自己的论点，后半部分的让步又削弱了论点）

In conclusion, the nonmainstream inquiry ways did play an crucial role in past, and becaus of people's psychological need they are still part of today's world. However, their functions paled gradually as the accelerated pace of science and psychology development
（我觉得楼主审题有些问题，题目是说nonmainstream是否play a vital role，那么就应该针对这点来谈，如果不同意就从不同意的角度说明理由。本文，我觉得楼主立场有些模糊，个人意见。加油~~~）

louchen1984UID: 172975

抱歉，我把那个没有修改过的版本发上来了， 向鬼版主致歉

louchen1984UID: 172975

In ancient times, when mainstream science such as physics, chemistry and mathematics were hardly developed, people depended largely on astrology, fortune-telling, and paranormal pursuits to explain the world and predict the future.  However, since the revolution of science and technology broke out in 19th century and a great advance of psychology took place, little by little, the role played by those nonmainstreams ways to inquiry paled against more reasonable and logic explanations provided by science and psychology.

It is true that past people put great emphasis on astrology, fortune-telling, and paranormal pursuits in order to explain the world and predict the future.In human nature people have psychological demand to be assured by knowing what would happened to them. Meanwhile at that time science had achieved little. Both the psychological need and lack of scientific knowledge resulted in past people's deep trust in such mysterious ways. In eastern countries, some groups such as necromancers were believed to have the ability to discover people's hidden ideas, to talk with ghost and to release souls from purgatory. These necromancers were widely respected because people were afraid to fall into hell after death. They believed that the necromancers could lead them to Elysium. In western countries, witches were believed to have the supernatural power to tell fortunes of a person's past, present and future.  Compared to these two inquiry ways, the astrology seemed more convincing, which was not absolutely groundless and might had some common place with the later developed astronomy. In old China, the astrologers predicted what would happen on earth by observing the aspects, positions and movements of stars. The emperors always relied on them to make crucial decisions such as military strategies or when was the appropriate time to hold a ceremony. The similar things existed in western world, until late in 17th century, many Europeans consulted astrologers to calculate the fate of an imminent wedding or a sign of illness. To sum up, with no consideration of their correctness, people in ancient times used to turn to the fortune-tellers and astrologers for help once they feared of life or nature.

However, with the help of well-developed science and psychology, people are much more certain about the world. Since science could explain many puzzles, people paid less attention to those predictors who seem to be less trustworthy. For example, Froyide's theory of subconsciousness explained why people dreamed such dreams and revealed that sometimes people's behavior were subconsciously influenced by their inside impulses and desires. Since then people did not depend on fortune-tellers to tell them what their dreams indicated and what would happen as a result. Also since we have made great progress in astronomy, astronomers are able to give more well-founded explanation to many astronomic phenomenons rather then the astrologers could. That is to say, with scientific methods and theories, today's scientists can make much more explicit and accurate predictions than ever before. Those detractors of this opinion may point out that many people still believe in astrology or fortune-telling or something alike, because their need to find a reliance which can never be doubted and rely on it to gain confidence for life cannot be provided by science. But after all, these people are fewer and usually they depend on science much more even they are not aware of this, as today's world is a world of truth and knowledge.

In conclusion, the nonmainstream inquiry ways did play an crucial role in past, and because of people's psychological need they are still part of today's world. However, their functions paled gradually as the accelerated pace of science and psychology development.

To nick: 我本来的意思是分时间段讨论的，两个body是并列的意思，不知道这样写可不可以？

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In ancient times, when删掉when mainstream science such as physics, chemistry and mathematics were hardly developeddeveloped slowly, sometimes unavailable, so people depended largely onhad to turn to astrology, fortune-telling, and paranormal pursuits to explain the world and predict the future. However, since the revolution of science and technology broke out in 19th century and a great advance of psychology took place, with the breakthrough of science and technology of 19th century little by little, 删掉little by little the role played by those nonmainstreams ways to inquiry paled against more reasonable and logic explanations provided by science and psychology. 开头很好

It is true that past people put great emphasis on astrology, fortune-telling, and paranormal pursuits in order to explain the world and predict the future. In human nature people have psychological demand to be assured by knowingpsychological tendency to knowing比较合适 what would happenedwould happen to them. Meanwhile at that time与此同时，就不要at that time，这句话改成unfortunately, science help little because of its limitation science had achieved little. thusBoth the psychological need and lack of scientific knowledge resulted in past people's deep trust inso obsessed with such mysterious我认为是迷信的东西，不改也可以，老外倒认为是奇迹般的现象 ways. In eastern countries, some groups such as necromancers were believed to have the ability to discover people's hidden ideas, to talk with ghost and to release souls from purgatory你说的我也开始相信了，呵呵. These necromancers were widely respected because people were afraid to fall into hell after death. They believed that the necromancers could lead them to Elysium. go to hell是见鬼，去死；fall into hell落入地狱？有没有这个说法，斟酌一下，另外，人们担心是心虚的表现，你这里完全忽视了人性善的一面，违背了西方国家信奉的宗旨，我想最好改成all the people were willing to be in their seventh heavy用过过渡词再说西方国家，同样， In western countries, witches were believed这样的词要学会变换，一篇中出现太多了 to have the supernatural power to tell fortunes of a person's past, present and future. Compared to these two inquiry ways, the astrology seemed more convincing, which was not absolutely groundless and might had some common place with the later developed astronomy. In old China, the astrologers predicted what would happen on earth by observing the aspects, positions and movements of stars. The emperors always relied on them to make crucial decisions such as military strategies or when was the appropriate time to hold a ceremony. The similar things existed in western world, until late in 17th century, many Europeans consulted astrologers to calculate the fate of an imminent wedding or a sign of illness. To sum up, with no consideration of their correctness, people in ancient times used to turn to the fortune-tellers and astrologers for help once they feared of life or nature. 总体上讲，问题不大，不过从Compared to到to sum up前最好都不要了，尤其在考场上，太细了，非主流的学科举个例子论述就可以了，平时倒是可以这样写，为考试积累的材料，不多评论

However, with the help of well-developedunder further development of science and psychologytechnology,我想psychology是人文科学，应该也是science的一类，要是并列也是science, typical of psychology,来写, people are much more certain这个肯定不好，记得有个歌词，“只要你一个眼神肯定，我的爱就有意义”，他应该不是certain about the world. Since science could explain many puzzles, people paid less attention to those predictors who seem to be less trustworthy. For example, Froyide's theory of subconsciousness explained why people dreamed such dreams and revealed that sometimes people's behavior were subconsciously influenced by their inside impulses and desires.
Since thenpeople did not depend on fortune-tellers to tell them what their dreams indicated and what would happen as a result. 删掉，直接到下个例子，过渡一下
Also since we have made great progress in astronomy, astronomers are able to give more well-founded explanation to many astronomic phenomenons rather then than,不知道你的ranther then是否打错，前面有more，后面怎么用呢？the astrologers could. That is to say, with scientific methods and theories, today's scientists can make much more explicit and accurate predictions than ever before.
Those detractors of this opinion may point out that many people still believe in astrology or fortune-telling or something alike, because their need to find a reliance which can never be doubted and rely on it to gain confidence for life cannot be provided by science. 毫无道理的插入，删掉，另起一段好好谈谈主流科学，再到结论
But after all, these people are fewer and usually they depend on science much more even they are not aware of this, as today's world is a world of truth and knowledge.

In conclusion, the nonmainstream inquiry ways did play ana crucial role inthe past, and because of people's psychological need they are still part of today's world. However, their functions paled gradually as the accelerated pace of science and psychology development.

每段的讨论针对中心点好好讨论是对的，但是考场上没有时间用例子来堆砌句子，所以请适当修改，语言上略微注意，单复数之类的小问题不注意，自己吃亏。大部分的句子链接写的很好，用词也还不错，加油！面临考试要心平气和，祝好运！

To nick: 我本来的意思是分时间段讨论的，两个body是并列的意思，不知道这样写可不可以？