issue136 毫无选择那个BT题 砸吧！

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Issue136. The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare


Life is full of choice. Some people are poor; some are rich; some are virtuous; some are full of jealousy and enmity in their mind; some people are optimistic, confident and enthusiastic; some are pessimistic, cowardly and impassive... all these differences actually stem from different choice. 【看到最后才明白你的意思，这样是不行的，一定要让读者能够跟上你的思路，论证要在一条线上，而且要证明清楚，不能像这样写一堆现象，随便解释半句。建议这样写：生活充满选择，选择态度，选择职业，选择方向等等，然后不同的选择就造成了individual的不同，然后说你的现象。个人意见】Perhaps the ability to choose is one of the greatest powers unique to human beings. And in fact, seldom can people be in a circumstance that is absent of choice. 【开头已经形成了自己的风格，很好！】

For personal life, people choose wealth, health and character. This sounds to be paradox【这个是名词，应该是paradoxical】 in that it is universally believed that people are born with such factors. 【怎么就矛盾了？人们生下了就有什么了呢？选择的权力？】 Nevertheless, man always goes far beyond what nature restricts him to be and makes a colorful and challenging life through the process of choosing. 【看到这里才明白你说的矛盾，你看，这里又出现了我在开头说过的问题。要让人看到你论证的线，不要把结果扔出来就算了，你明白别人不明白】Some people pay enough attention to diet and exercise, while some choose a life style with immoderate smoking and drinking. 【:D这有什么不好？:D】Some people may choose to 【去掉】calmness and critical thinking when confronted with troubles while some people choose to be anxious and irascible. 【这个不太算是一种选择，你可以说遇到问题有人选择勇敢面对和克服，有人选择逃避畏缩，更好一点。另外，wealth的问题你说了吗？】For instance, almost everyone who had watched the closure of the 2004 Special Olympic Games was deeply expressed【impressed。。。汗】 by the perfect and amazing dance performed by 20 deaf-and-dumb girls from china. They could not speak, but they used their body languages to show their passion to life; they could not listen to the music, but their orderly and beautiful actions told the world that they were no weaker than normal people. Life is tough to them, but they did not choose to cry for the unfair fate but chose to raise their eyes toward an appealing future. Here lies the power of choice. 【例子是好的，但是你还是没说到点子上，应该说，即使在这样的情况下面人们还是有选择的，所以不是rare的，才扣题扣思路】

Not only in personal life can people make their choice, but also in almost every domain people 【加个can】decide what they should do. In political realm, a nation can choose to be a democratic state or a despotic country. In business operation, the numerous determining, continuously analyzing and frequently investing and so on are also a process of choosing. 【不觉得是选择的问题，再解释清楚一点】In an effort to resist the govern of British colonist, Indian people chose passive resistance leading by Mahatma Gandhi. Facing the great loss from the Indian Ocean tsunami, people all over world would like to make a donation to help the displaced persons to rebuild their destroyed country. It is the choice people made that forms the diversification of world. 【唉，还是感觉不是很符合“选择”】

Is there a situation that can be termed "absence of choice"? Sometimes people may feel it is hard to make their choice and they would say, “I have no choice but to do something. 【have to do】” This “but to do” is actually a choice finally made by individual in troubles. 【这个论点还不错，没有选择也是一种选择】 When the original desire of people could not be realized and people have to select an unenjoyable 【无乐趣的？？？unpleasant？】method, they are likely to say that they have no choice. 【这句不明白你要说什么】In fact, the labeled "on choice"【no choice。。。汗。。。你以为是on sale啊】 is virtually a circumstance that a choice of individual cannot be made freely but depends on that of the others. From this perspective, the absence of choice is a rare situation. 【怎么又说回去了，你到底是支持是反对啊？】

Hamlet, the prince of Denmark remarked, “my dear soul was mistress of my choice”. If the soul of people can be chosen, what we can wish for more? 【感觉他的意思不是soul可以选择，而是soul来做选择】The absence of choice is but an illusion. If it does exist, it is a very, very rare situation.
【语言有进步了，但是低级错误要避免，论证过程还是需要提高，问题已经在文章中指出了。思路上面感觉你提出的大部分都是一些例子现象，本质上面的原因论证不够，这样感觉力度就不够。不说了，加油吧！】

victoriazhizhiUID: 163135

TO 鬼
1，

要让人看到你论证的线，不要把结果扔出来就算了，你明白别人不明白

袄急需解决界个问题，跳跃了一辈子了，从小做数学证明题有的都是要给老师再说说的，总以为自己理解了别人也要顺着我的思路走。怎么办啊？

2，

【 :D 这有什么不好？ :D 】

     说的就是你  :mad:    天天喝喝喝

3，wealth忘了说了，再写个某些人出生很贫穷，很可怜，穷的要过不下去了云云的可怜，还是有办法怎么努力工作获得得到幸福云云。汗，，，怎么这么恶 觉得

4，

【这个论点还不错，没有选择也是一种选择】 When the original desire of people could not be realized and people have to select an unenjoyable 【无乐趣的？？？unpleasant？】method, they are likely to say that they have no choice. 【这句不明白你要说什么】In fact, the labeled "on choice"【no choice。。。汗。。。你以为是on sale啊】

是想说当人们原来的最初的希望没有实现的时候，他们只得选一个令人不爽的方法，所以他们哭喊着没法活了。

5，

【怎么又说回去了，你到底是支持是反对啊？】

  
没说回去了 在加强我的观点 说 那个情况其实还是有选择的只是要依靠别人的力量或者说收到很多限制 只是人们以为没有选择了

6，哈姆雷特那个小破话，偶自己理解的，要是不对就不用了。现在感觉你说的对。

鬼谷子UID: 159645

4.你表达的不清楚，还是我说的，要让读者也能了解你的意图。
5.From this perspective, the absence of choice is a rare situation.
这不是说回去了吗，你前面的意思是实际上这样无选择也是选择，后面貌似又让步了一下，然后最后你写了这句，不就是总结成了反面了吗。要么你就多写两句把让步的让回来，再重新总结到你的观点。最后一句一般都要总结一下的。不过最好还是别写那个让步了，绕来绕去的思路不清晰了。

victoriazhizhiUID: 163135

记下各位牛牛的建议了
崩溃了 现在偶自己看这个文章都晕晕的 以后不在夜里写了 思想很奇怪的说
谢过各位