issue 224，第一次写，请多多指正。

hardbeaverUID: 197443

我3月11号考，现在才开始写，是不是有点晚了？请大家多批评，呵呵。



Issue224  第1篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：44分50秒     475 words
从2003年1月25日18时57分到2003年1月25日19时44分
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Censorship is rarely, if ever, justified.
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There is always a controversy that whether government should put censorship on the mass media, such as TV, radio, newspaper and so on. Some people claim that the programs provided by medias should be inspected to judge whether it is proper to the public, while others advocate that the mass media has the freedom to offer their productions without restriction. As far as I am concerned, censorship can contribute to the interest of the public, in certain extension.

In the first place, the mass media plays a momentous role in individuals’ lives. Nowadays, the mass media is the primary resource of information, most of what we learn everyday come from it. Take television for example, as the development of technology, television has significantly popularized to the ordinary families, and watching TV has become a main way of entertainment. The programs played on television play an important role in the citizens' daily lives, such as the fashion of clothes, the interested place where to go, the popular ways of pastime, etc. People would follow to try the things played on TV, whether they are conscious of it or not, especially for the youth, who have weak ability to judge whether the thing is good or bad. Statistics have shown that the rate of crime committed by youth has increased radically in the past decades, of which the main reason is the negative influence cast on the youth by the unhealthy programs, such as the movies filled with eroticism and violence. Therefore, not only the government but also every member of the society should be more aware of the trend, and take actions together to hold it back. Simply put, the government has the responsibility to protect the public from the erosion of negative programs broadcasted on television.

Furthermore, what is also true is that the mass media tend to abuse their freedom of expression in order to maximize their commercial interests. Today we can see that TV is permeated with various kinds of advertisements, which terribly disturbs our normal watching. Television stations would like to broadcast as many advertisements as they can to gain their profits, but it is irresponsible to the audience. What is worse, it is potential for some youth to learn to smoke and drink wines from some advertisement of cigarettes and wines at a very early age, which would do harm to their healthy growth. The government should step in to supervise the programs and interfere in if necessary, in order to ensure the television stations to provide us a high quality of service.

In conclusion, the government has the responsibility to keep enough aware of the information conveyed by the mass media, supervise them and step in to put down or correct the negative information when it occurs, and lead them to offer us more and more productions with better quality.

goasupleaseUID: 195799

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In the first place, the mass media plays a momentous role in individuals’ lives. Nowadays, the mass media is the primary resource of information, most of what we learn everyday come from it. Take television for example, as the development of technology, television has significantly popularized to the ordinary families, and watching TV has become a main way of entertainment. The programs played on television play an important role in the citizens' daily lives, such as the fashion of clothes, the interested place where to go, the popular ways of pastime, etc. People would follow to try the things played on TV, whetherno matter they are conscious of it or not, especially for for去the youth, who have weakless ability to judge whether the thing is good or bad. Statistics have shown that the rate of crime committed by youth 是不是叫juvenile delinquencyhas increased radically in the past 少了点东东decades, of which the main reason is the negative influence cast on the youth by the unhealthy programs, such as the movies filled with eroticism and violence. Therefore, not only the government but also every member of the society should be more aware of the trend, and take actions together to hold it back. Simply put, the government has the responsibility to protect the public from the erosion of negative programs broadcasted on television.主题句最好在开头摆出来,嘻嘻,加把劲,重点应该是民众分辩意识不高

Furthermore, what is also true is that the mass media tend to abuse their freedom of expression in order to maximize their commercial interests. Today we can see that TV is permeated with various kinds of advertisements, which terribly disturbs our normal watching. 这个用法有点怪Television stations would like to broadcast as many advertisements as they can to gain their profits, but it is irresponsible to the audience. What is worse, it is potential 这个词ms不能这么用for some youth to learn to smoke and drink wines from some advertisement of cigarettes and wines at a very early age, which would do harm to their healthy growth. The government should step in to supervise the programs and interfere in if necessary, in order to ensure the television stations to provide us a high quality of service.

In conclusion, the government has the responsibility to keep enough aware of the information conveyed by the mass media, supervise them and step in to put down or correct the negative information when it occurs, and lead them to offer us more and more productions with better quality.
除了开语言中要多注意细节和英文习惯外,分析显得有点不足;不过45分钟确实很难得了,我还没这么练过...+u+u

zhangqiang928UID: 188538

There is always a controversy that whether government should put censorship on the mass media, such as TV, radio, newspaper and so on. Some people claim that the programs provided by medias should be inspected to judge whether it is proper to the public, while others advocate that the mass media has the freedom to offer their productions without restriction. As far as I am concerned, censorship can contribute to the interest of the public, in certain extension.[很常见的开头，模式固定的]

In the first place, the mass media plays a momentous role in individuals’ lives. [个人觉得不是很点题　]Nowadays, the mass media is the primary resource of information, most of what we learn everyday come from it. Take television for example, as[是不是该用with] the development of technology, television has significantly popularized to the ordinary families, and watching TV has become a main way of entertainment. The programs played on television play an important role in the citizens' daily lives, such as the fashion of clothes, the interested place where to go, the popular ways of pastime, etc. People would follow to try the things played on TV, whether they are conscious of it or not, especially for the youth, who have weak ability to judge whether the thing is good[是不是应该用right] or bad. Statistics have shown that the rate of crime committed by youth has increased radically in the past decades, of which the main reason is the negative influence cast on the youth by the unhealthy programs, such as the movies filled with eroticism and violence. Therefore, not only the government but also every member of the society should be more aware of the trend, and take actions together to hold it back. Simply put, the government has the responsibility to protect the public from the erosion of negative programs broadcasted on television.[没看住与主体相关阿5555555]

Furthermore, what is also true is that the mass media tend to abuse their freedom of expression in order to maximize their commercial interests. Today we can see that TV is permeated with various kinds of advertisements, which terribly disturbs our normal watching. Television stations would like to broadcast as many advertisements as they can to gain their profits, but it is irresponsible to the audience. What is worse, it is potential for some youth to learn to smoke and drink wines from some advertisement of cigarettes and wines at a very early age, which would do harm to their healthy growth. The government should step in to supervise the programs and interfere in if necessary, in order to ensure the television stations to provide us a high quality of service.

In conclusion, the government has the responsibility to keep enough aware of the information conveyed by the mass media, supervise them and step in to put down or correct the negative information when it occurs, and lead them to offer us more and more productions with better quality.
[文章挺好的，但是我没看出来与主体的相关性。]

hardbeaverUID: 197443

嗯，意见很中肯，我的主体句总是找不好，看来还得多练。