Argument 1 第一篇，望指点

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This argument claims that Nature's Way should build the next new store in Plainsville, because the author believe that the stores are most profitable in areas where residents are highly concerned with leading healthy lives and Plainsville has many such residents. To support this conclusion, the author points out three pieces of truth. However, this argument suffers from several critical flaws.

First of all, the report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs is worth questioning. Does it involve the majority of stores selling running shoes and exercise clothing? Perhaps, the report is written by sellers of running shoes and exercise clothing, just after investigating those stores which have good sales, in order to attract more customers. Ever if the report is reliable, those who by running shoes and exercise clothing may have no interest in health food, they may just care about sports rather than food. Therefore, this report has not enough persuasion to let readers convince.

Sencondly, the author points out that the local health club which nearly closed five years ago due to lack of business, has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. Maybe the author wants to gain a result from this truth that the recovery of the club is because of many residents who are concerned with healthy lives. However, the author fails to consider several other factors. The improvement of exercise equipment, better management and attractive advertisement are all useful to fetch more and more customers.

Thirdly, the author anticipates a new generation of customers who are required to participate in a "fitness for life" program in Plainsville's schools. The author assumes that schoolchildren are concerned with healthy because they are emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age. However, the author provides no evidence to substantiate this assumption. Only when the author can provide a reliable, specific report about this phenomena is it likely that the company will consider the opening of the next new store.

To sum up, the conclusion lacks enough reasonable evidences to support. To strengthen the argument, the author should carry on further investigation to gain more convictive conclusion.

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我也是个新手，刚刚开始写；不过个人之见，我觉得你的这个argument有这么几处问题：
1、第一个理由的前面部分牵强了一些。最好不要去怀疑一些证据之类的东西的正确性，应该尽量从逻辑上来找问题。网络上应该有很多总结arugument的逻辑错误的文章。
2、也不必一定要对statement陈述的问题一个一个分开来进行批驳，我觉得有时候能够从不同的层次和方面对一个或者两个逻辑错误进行批评和纠正就很好了。
3、第二段、第三段展开得不够充分，也就是我上面说的你的战线拉开的太长乐，所以不能再某一个点上着重用力。
4、最后一个批评的似乎有些牵强。没证据应该不成为我们批评的理由。

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嗯~~多谢了
刚刚开始写argument，还不太能掌握着重点在哪里，以后写的时候会多多注意你提到的几个问题，再次感谢了：）