issue122 菜鸟：第二篇 欢迎拍砖！必回拍：）

zhangqiang928UID: 188538

Issue122  第3篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：45分3秒     519 words
从2005年1月27日20时32分到2005年1月27日21时45分
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We owe almost all our knowledge not to people who have agreed, but to people who have disagreed.
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There is always a controversy that we owe almost all our knowledge from people who have disagreed . . Many people support it as an effective way to improve the quality of education, while others think that it is unnecessary to do so. As far as I[I] am concerned, student-centered education would be effective to help students learn. And as I am concern , where the knowledge that we learn come ? This depend on at least three factors, such as the age of the learner and which subject we learn and the character of the learner. All the knowledge benefit for us ,we should accept.
       In the first place , when we are very little boys, we accept all the information around us, because we don't know which the thing we should agree and which the thing we should disagreed. For example , the babies learn the language from their parents, they don't know what is right and what is wrong . They learn the language just because the essence which motivate  them to learn the language. Human being all have the ability to learn the language , and many other fundamental skills adapt their conditions . When they are older ,they go to school to learn the knowledge to have the ability to survive in the society . We owe the knowledge , such as primary math and art , literature as well as other courses. At that times we don't know what is the right and what is wrong. Because we are too young to distinguish the difference between the agreed ideas and disagreed ideas
      Besides , when we are so old enough to distinguish what is benefit for us . If you have a good characters to pursue the good conditions , you will choice the knowledge which is benefit for you , sometimes it come from the people who have agreed ,sometimes it come from the people who have disagreed. For instance , we want to work in good condition , and live in the big house. So we accept all the advice that will benefit for my future. On the other hand , which do the knowledge come from ? They also depend on which subject we study . If you are a lawyer , maybe you learn the knowledge from you adversary who don't agree with you in the court . And also if you are general , maybe you get the skill from you adversary ,in this case you will owe knowledge from the people who have disagreed with you. At last , there are many other factors make you learn the knowledge such the competition , we live the society which conclude the competition almost everywhere , we must learn the knowledge to survive in the society. If we don't get enough knowledge to live , we can’t afford for myself. So in that case we learn the knowledge whether it come from .
To sum up , when we are young we learn all the information around as ,and when we have the capability to distinguish ,we can say that if the knowledge is good for ourselves we will accept it ,whether it is come from .There also are many other case. So I don't agree with the author , I believe that the people adapt the society will live in good conditions. So which is the knowledge come from is not important, just accept them whether they come from.


时间仓促写得不好，请批改的人理解啊！我一天一篇issue 一篇argument 开学了由点忙不过来：） 我知道游艇多简单错误，水平有限帮我改一下吧，多谢了
谢批我的文章,交个朋友一个改文章罢

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https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mod=viewthread&tid=250654
https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mod=viewthread&tid=250916
西安外国语学院 3月25日

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zhangqiang928UID: 188538

开学了好忙啊！  但我想还得坚持对不对呀！
  郁闷的时候有G友相伴，生活不再无味：）

谢批我的文章,交个朋友一个改文章罢

有机会请多拍砖,每拍必回拍,多谢
https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=250654
https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=250916
https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=251025
西安外国语学院 3月25日

当阳光照遍每个角落
心情像风般漂泊不停留
抛开界限 快乐行走
我有属于自己的方式做梦

指向大海UID: 158737

Issue122 第3篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
------摘要------
作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户 共用时间：45分3秒 519 words
从2005年1月27日20时32分到2005年1月27日21时45分
------题目------
We owe almost all our knowledge not to people who have agreed, but to people who have disagreed.
------正文------
There is always a controversy that we owe almost all our knowledge from people who have disagreed . . Many people support it as an effective way to improve the quality of education, while others think that it is unnecessary to do so. As far as I[I] am concerned, student-centered education would be effective to help students learn. And as I am concern [有这个用法么？], where the knowledge that we learn come ? This depend on at least three factors[这三个因素是你以后要说的，一笔代过好了], such as the age of the learner and which subject we learn and the character of the learner. All the knowledge benefit for us ,we should accept.[这句绝对了，有利的你学不过来啊]
In the first place , when we are very little boys, we accept all the information around us, because we don't know which the thing we should agree and which the thing we should disagreed. For example , the babies learn the language from their parents, they don't know what is right and what is wrong . They learn the language just because the essence which motivate them to learn the language. Human being all have the ability to learn the language , and many other fundamental skills adapt their conditions . When they are older ,they go to school to learn the knowledge to have the ability to survive in the society . We owe the knowledge , such as primary math and art , literature as well as other courses. At that times we don't know what is the right and what is wrong. Because we are too young to distinguish the difference between the agreed ideas and disagreed ideas
Besides , when we are so[这个so去了] old enough to distinguish what is benefit for us . If you have a good characters to pursue the good conditions , you will choice the knowledge which is benefit for you , sometimes it come from the people who have agreed ,sometimes it come from the people who have disagreed. For instance , we want to work in good condition , and live in the big house. So we accept all the advice that will benefit for my future. On the other hand [没有on the one hand,怎么有on the other hand?], which do the knowledge come from ? They also depend on which subject we study . If you are a lawyer , maybe you learn the knowledge from you adversary who don't agree with you in the court [直到这里才点题了]. And also if you are general , maybe you get the skill from you adversary ,in this case you will owe knowledge from the people who have disagreed with you. At last , there are many other factors make you learn the knowledge such the competition , we live the society which conclude the competition almost everywhere , we must learn the knowledge to survive in the society. If we don't get enough knowledge to live , we can’t afford for myself. So in that case we learn the knowledge whether it come from .
To sum up , when we are young we learn all the information around as ,and when we have the capability to distinguish ,we can say that if the knowledge is good for ourselves we will accept it ,whether it is come from .There also are many other case. So I don't agree with the author , I believe that the people adapt the society will live in good conditions. So which is the knowledge come from is not important, just accept them whether they come from.
[讲三点
1 有点跑题，这道写了一大堆才说意见相同和意见不同的人对我们的影响，重心也不对，你再叫别人看看，是不是我说的这样
2 每段空一行！
3 标点符号的打法你贴到WORD里看看就知道你的错误了]

zhangqiang928UID: 188538

谢谢指点
很中肯！
有机会请多拍砖,每拍必回拍,多谢
第一篇https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=250654 issu121
第二篇https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=250916 argument120
第三篇https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=251025 issue122
西安外国语学院 3月25日

当阳光照遍每个角落
心情像风般漂泊不停留
抛开界限 快乐行走
我有属于自己的方式做梦

朽木白哉UID: 195804

------题目------
We owe almost all our knowledge not to people who have agreed, but to people who have disagreed.
------正文------
There is always a controversy that we owe almost all our knowledge from people who have disagreed . . Many people support it as an effective way to improve the quality of education, while others think that it is unnecessary to do so. As far as I[I] am concerned[?], student-centered education would be effective to help students learn. And as I am concern, where the knowledge that we learn come ? This depend on at least three factors, such as the age of the learner and which subject we learn and the character of the learner. All the knowledge benefit for us ,we should accept.

In the first place , when we are very little boys, we accept all the information around us, because we don't know which the thing we should agree and which the thing we should disagreed. For example , the babies learn the language from their parents, they don't know what is right and what is wrong . They learn the language just because the essence which motivate them to learn the language. Human being all have the ability to learn the language , and many other fundamental skills adapt their conditions . When they are older ,they go to school to learn the knowledge to have the ability to survive in the society . We owe the knowledge , such as primary math and art , literature as well as other courses. At that times we don't know what is the right and what is wrong. Because we are too young to distinguish the difference between the agreed ideas and disagreed ideas
[这段有点罗嗦 与其说是baby的时候不能分辨 读书了还是不能分辨 还不如举个实际的例子。比如妈妈教“好东西要和大家分享”没有agree还是disagree 只是照做。]
[不过举小时侯的例子 给人有点不能明辨是非的感觉 而不是同意不同意 我也有点晕了。。再讨论下]

Besides , when we are so old enough to distinguish what is benefit for us . If you have a good characters to pursue the good conditions , you will choice the knowledge which is benefit for you , sometimes it come from the people who have agreed ,sometimes it come from the people who have disagreed. For instance , we want to work in good condition , and live in the big house. So we accept all the advice that will benefit for my [our] future[这个例子感觉有点大，可以考虑以下他的。 比如在team work中的学习]. On the other hand[同楼上] , which[where ?] do the knowledge come from ? They also depend on which subject we study . If you are a lawyer , maybe you learn the knowledge from you adversary who don't agree with you in the court . And also if you are general , maybe you get the skill from you adversary ,in this case you will owe knowledge from the people who have disagreed with you. [这部分说的好]At last , there are many other factors make you learn the knowledge such the competition , we live the society which conclude the competition almost everywhere , we must learn the knowledge to survive in the society. If we don't get enough knowledge to live , we can’t afford for myself. So in that case we learn the knowledge whether it come from .

To sum up , when we are young we learn all the information around as ,and when we have the capability to distinguish ,we can say that if the knowledge is good for ourselves we will accept it ,whether it is come from .There also are many other case. So I don't agree with the author [这句最好不要], I believe that the people adapt the society will live in good conditions. So which is the knowledge come from is not important, just accept them whether they come from.