Issue51 第2篇 教育类 多谢各位批改建议！

DarrenYangUID: 191179

Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.
只有当教育根据个人的需要和每个学生的兴趣具体设计时才是真正有效果的。
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The speaker deems that education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student. I agree insofar as teaching students in accordance with their aptitude is one of the best education methods. It satisfies the diverse requirements and preferences of students for education since everyone is unique and so their interests and objectives. However, specifically designed education for individuals is not the truly effective way alone to teach students. Here, the speaker's assertion goes too far. Basic and common educations, which exhibit the guiding function of education system, are also indispensable in the art of teaching and surely effective through proper ways.

Teaching students in accordance with their aptitude serves useful purpose of effective education for individuals. The perspective does not appear today but be inherited from our ancient educationalists and be attested by time and facts. Interest is the best teacher. This is a visual parlance to illustrate why it is right. People are different from each other. They may have different dreams, different habits, and different level of capabilities. It is hard to ask a born left-hander to use right hand to draw a canvas. This kind of forced education is noneffective sometimes. Contrarily, when education follows the individual needs and interests at some extent, a student will develop himself fully and actively. One example is myself. I shifted my major from electrical engineering to material science since I found that this field was just like a secret garden in front of me and allured me to visit it. During the interview for entering a materials research center, which was once considered to be a tough one, I felt quite comfortable as I was asked to explicate my interest. After that, every time when it comes to my specific research topics, professor will have a discussion with me rather than allocating one arbitrarily. Now, I am getting well developed here and working with passion.

Although specifically designed education offers a possible approach for all different individuals to learn effectively, it is impossible to occupy the whole meaning of education today. Firstly, our society does not possess the competence to afford it. A simple example is that there may be 30 different education needs in a class with 30 students. Then, we need 30 different curriculum schedule or 30 different teachers for just one subject. No school can provide such fantastic education mode at present because of the consideration no matter from feasibility or finance problems. Secondly, it is hard to find someone who has the authority to design the education for different individuals. May students themselves be OK? No, they are learners not experts. May educationalist be ok? No, they don't have time and energy to figure out everyone's requirement. May parents be ok? No, they may lack enough knowledge of pedagogy and be likely to choose an education mode adapted to their own taste. As a result, education cannot be fully specifically designed nowadays.

Finally, specifically designed education is not the only effective way and basic and common educations are indispensable in this system. Chinese ancient educationalist summarized the functions of education as 3 aspects: 1. Imparting morality and ideality; 2. Teaching skills; 3. Answering questions. Specifically designed education is beneficial to the latter two. For the first goal of education, basic and common education plays an essential role. People are dissimilar; people also have things in common. Especially for a society, common moral standards and values should be advocated by its education. Basic and common education can exert this function better than specifically designed education.

In sum, things always have two aspects. The speaker's assertion overemphasizes individual needs and interests in education, but neglects the demands from society. Despite the important effect of specifically designed education, it is not practicable as the only effective education way and represent the whole education system. A reasonable and effective education system should adopt more contents and methods, such as common value education besides the designed part for individuals.

DarrenYangUID: 191179

无限时，写的很痛苦，想不出合适的例子。看的书太少，背的文章也太少。
怎么办，感觉准备时间越来越少，可是什么都没做。。。还要忙论文的事情:(

qianqunUID: 193202

写的好多阿，我也是举不出例子来。
贴下我的，大家互批吧
Nowadays, more and more emphasis is placed on the issue over how to make education truly effective thus to benefit the people and society. Some people argue that education should be specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of the students. I doubt such education will be truly effective and I think some other needs and interests, no less important than individual ones should be taken into consideration, which effective education ought to meet.
As a student myself, I cannot wait to welcome education specifically designed corresponding to my own needs and interests. I always long that I can learn whatever appeal to me, from philosophy, arts to science and business. Curiosity is the best teacher. With the opportunity provided by education, students can dig into what they concern, they can read classical works, they can discuss with teachers and experts of the area, they can do surveys and experiments to demonstrate what they learn ,they can show their own thinking and findings through practice, they can run their own business... They are inspired by free, broad and considerate education and developing their talents. They are performing and becoming stars on their own stages. All in all, with strong will to learn and good chance to learn, students can get academic, professional or personal achievement at least. Then it is not hasty to assume such education effective.
If education ignores individual needs and interests, it may become a assembly line and mechanically pour things into students regardless of individual distinction. Different students may have different responses to such education. Those who are active in thinking and doubting won't be satisfied to be a passive containment and they may reject education because it hampers their progress. Others who just submissively accept what available will be less independent and less admissive by the challenging world. Both results are against the purpose of education.
However, every coin has two sides. It is likely that such education only focusing on the needs and interests of students leads to imbalance and disorder. Firstly, students are growing and changing day after day. What attracted them yesterday may be no longer popular today. If education is designed to meet their needs, then it has to be modified, changed and overwhelmed all the time, without definite direction. It may consume a lot but progress little. Secondly, students have various needs and interests, some of which are entirely opposite. To meet whose needs and interests and ignore whose will be a big problem that teachers and educationalists must face. Thirdly, we students cannot justify what we want is good and reasonable to ourselves, to others and to the whole society. We have no rights to establish our happy life on the basis of others' tragedy. Finally, the fact is that the present society cannot promise one to get what he/she wants, limited by current economic, social and technological level.
What's more, education won't be effective regardless of the needs and interests of society. We are living in a society and we have to access into the society sooner or later .If education cast no concern about the needs and interests of the society and neither do students ,students may not meet the needs of the society. Self-improvement won't come true if one cannot survive at first. So it is necessary of education to teach students some ability and skills to live and work in a society, as well as some important characteristics, such as responsibility, honesty, open-mindedness to make students more welcomed by others and the society.
In conclusion, to meet the needs and interests of individuals and the society are both crucial tasks of education. Students can survive in society and achieve self-improvement when education is both oriented and well balanced. Society can also get useful members. Therefore, both students and society benefit from education.

davidjackyUID: 135962

9No.1 Issue51 第2篇 教育类 多谢各位批改建议！
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Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.
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The speaker deems that education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student. I agree insofar as teaching students in accordance of?是不是in accordance with,这个用法更常见一点 their aptitude is one of the best education methods because it satisfies the diverse requirements and preferences of students for education since everyone is unique and so their interests and objectives. However, specifically designed education for individuals is not the only truly effective way拗口，not the truly effective way alone to teach students. Here, the speaker's assertion goes too far. Basic and common educations, which exhibit the guiding function of education system, are also indispensable in the art of teaching and surely effective through proper ways.

Teaching students in accordance of their aptitude serves useful purpose of effective education for individuals. The perspective does not appear today but ??be inherited from our ancient educationalists and be attested by time and facts. People often say that interest is the best teacher. A visual parlance illustrates why it is right. People are different from each other. They may have different hobbies, different dreams, different habits, and different level of capabilities. It is hard to ask a born left-hander to use right hand to draw a canvas. This kind of forced education is noneffective sometimes. Contrarily, when education follows individual needs and interests at some extent, a student will develop himself fully and actively. One example is myself. My former major is electrical engineering. When I found that every human epoch is nominated by materials and materials science is just like a secret graden in front of me, alluring me to visit it, I take the chance. Druing the interview for entering a material research center, which was considered to be a tough one, the professor only asked me two questions: why do you want to join our group and what do you want to learn in this center? The answer was quite easy since I was just asked to express my true feelings. After that, every time when it comes to my specific research topics, professor will have a discussion with me rather than allocating one arbitrarily. Now, I am doing well here with passion.我想这段的论述可以再压缩一下，尤其是这个例子，能不能精练一点？

Altough specifically designed education offers a possible approach for all different individuals to learn knowledge effectively, it is impossible to ocuppy the whole meaning of education today. Firstly, our society does not have the ability to afford it. A simpe example is that there may be 30 different education needs in a class with 30 students. Then, we need 30 different curriculum schedule or 30 different teachers just of one subject. Now, we can image what will happen: no school can provide such kind of dreaming education at present. Even they can, they do not will? to becasue of the consideration no matter from feasibility or finance problems. Secondly, it is hard to find someone who have the authority to design the education for different individuals. May students themself be OK? No, they are learners not experts. May educationalist be ok? No, they don't have time and energy to figure out everyone's requirement. May parents be ok? No, they may lack enough knowledge of pedagogy and be likely to choose a education mode adapted to their own taste. As a result, education cannot be specifically designed fully nowadays.这段写的比较散，拼写错误一大堆，态度问题，还要再强调吗？

Finally, specifically designed education is not the only effective way and basic and common educations are indispensable in this system. Chinese ancient educationlist summarized the function of education as 3 points: 1. imparting morality and ideality; 2. teaching skills; 3. answering questions. Specifically designed education is beneficial to the latter two. For the first one, basic and common education plays an essential role. People have difference. People also have things in common. Especially for a society, common moral standards and values are demanded. A single tree may grow up as its needs. However, in a forest, each tree should clearly know that space and food is not infinite. Basic and common education can inhibit this function of education better than sepcifically designed education.

In sum, things always have two aspects. The speaker's assertion overemphasizes individual needs and interests in education, but neglects the requirement from society. Despite the important effect of teaching in accordance of their aptitude, this kind of fully designed education is not practicable and cannot represent itself as the truly effective education only. A reasonable and effective education system should adopt more contents and methods, such as common value education besides the designed one for individuals.

xjtuciweiUID: 175145

I think this one is better than the first one~~~
说些优点：这篇基本没什么我认识的单词哈（说实话，第一篇里我看见了一大堆红宝单词的堆砌~~~都似曾相识但不认识 逻辑思路也没这篇清晰），这篇很明朗的说，自己的例子举得蛮好，还有长短句的结合~
说写缺点：不喜欢太长的开头，提纲挈领就好吧 个人喜好了
其实惭愧得很，自己对于这些point倒是记在心里，昨晚破土动工第一篇万分艰难，AI实在是比TWE难太多，肚里没货就是不行啊
一个月多点，我想得只是：能准备到什么样就什么样吧
当初考T也是硬着头皮去的结果倒也不错
加油了，还有时间，就有希望，
准备到最后一刻了！~~~~~~~~~~~~ :D

dotmanUID: 193231

个人例子倒是很特别的， 后天考试的时候可以考虑自己德例子了

qianqunUID: 193202

原来说自己这样也算举例子阿，我以为一定要举名人或大事呢。。。
btw：单词还没背过，所以只能用简单词阿

DarrenYangUID: 191179

对于拼写问题，实在抱歉。是想写完以后自己检查完拼写再贴上来。这个问题自己很清楚，昨天是赶着出去汇款，怕银行关门，所以匆匆贴了上来，以后一定注意。

我自己感觉是写得太罗嗦了。

多谢批评指正。

davidjackyUID: 135962

最初由 DarrenYang 发布
[B]对于拼写问题，实在抱歉。是想写完以后自己检查完拼写再贴上来。这个问题自己很清楚，昨天是赶着出去汇款，怕银行关门，所以匆匆贴了上来，以后一定注意。

我自己感觉?.

以下省略...... [/B]

下次注意就好了，没关系，继续加油，期待下一篇文章

DarrenYangUID: 191179

被斑竹训了，我好怕怕的。。。。

我会加油的！大家一起加油！

volitionUID: 167546

To Derrenyang
题目是satisfy the needs and interests of each students, 并不仅仅是aptitude方面的差异，没有必要处处带上teaching in accordance with aptitude.个人认为文章的结尾部分没有对自己的观点进行明确的总结和阐述。个人意见，仅供参考！

whxyjUID: 186010

The speaker deems that education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student. I agree insofar as teaching students in accordance of with their aptitude is one of the best education methods because it satisfies the diverse requirements and preferences of students for education since everyone is unique and so their interests and objectives. However, specifically designed education for individuals is not the only truly effective way to teach students. Here, the speaker's assertion goes too far. Basic and common educations, which exhibit the guiding function of education system, are also indispensable in the art of teaching and surely effective through proper ways. 开头不错的

Teaching students in accordance of their aptitude serves useful purpose of effective education for individuals. The perspective does not appear today but be inherited from our ancient educationalists and be attested by time and facts. People often say that interest is the best teacher. A visual parlance illustrates why it is right. People are different from each other. They may have different hobbies, different dreams, different habits, and different level of capabilities. It is hard to ask a born left-hander to use right hand to draw a canvas. This kind of forced education is noneffective sometimes. Contrarily, when education follows individual needs and interests at some extent, a student will develop himself fully and actively. One example is myself. My former major is electrical engineering. When I found that every human epoch is nominated by materials and materials science is just like a secret graden in front of me, alluring me to visit it, I take took the chance. Druing the interview for entering a material research center, which was considered to be a tough one,定语从局有歧义 the professor only asked me two questions: why do you want to join our group and what do you want to learn in this center? The answer was quite easy since I was just asked to express my true feelings. After that, every time when it comes to my specific research topics, professor will have a discussion with me rather than allocating one? arbitrarily. Now, I am doing well here with passion.写interview的目的是什么？有点digress from TS

Although specifically designed education offers a possible approach for all different individuals to learn knowledge effectively, it is impossible to ocuppy the whole meaning of education today. Firstly, our society does not have the ability to afford it. A simpe example is that there may be 30 different education needs in a class with 30 students. Then, we need 30 different curriculum schedule or 30 different teachers just of one subject. Now, we can image what will happen该成scenario : no school can provide such kind of dreaming education at present. Even they can, they do not will to because of the consideration no matter 用both会不会好点？from feasibility or finance problems. Secondly, it is hard to find someone who have the authority to design the education for different individuals. May students themself be OK? 有点怪。No, they are learners not experts. May educationalist be ok? No, they don't have time and energy to figure out everyone's requirement. May parents be ok? No, they may lack enough knowledge of pedagogy and be likely to choose a education mode adapted to their own taste. As a result, education cannot be specifically designed fully nowadays.

Finally, specifically designed education is not the only effective way and basic and common educations are indispensable in this system. Chinese ancient educationist summarized the function of education as 3 points: 1. imparting morality and ideality; 2. teaching skills; 3. answering questions. Specifically designed education is beneficial to the latter two. For the first one, basic and common education plays an essential role. People have difference. People also have things in common. Especially for a society, common moral standards and values are demanded. A single tree may grow up as its needs. However, in a forest, each tree should clearly know that space and food is not infinite. Basic and common education can inhibit ? this function of education better than sepcifically designed education.

In sum, things always have two aspects. The speaker's assertion overemphasizes individual needs and interests in education, but neglects the requirement from society. Despite the important effect of teaching in accordance of their aptitude, this kind of fully designed education is not practicable and cannot represent itself as the truly effective education only. A reasonable and effective education system should adopt more contents and methods, such as common value education besides the designed one for individuals.
条理还是很清晰，语言再润色一下吧，满好的啊